7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by andre 

5th December 2014:
Didnt Gryffindor win the cup since James entered the team in his second year

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Review #2, by Liana 

21st October 2012:
I must say I feel a little sad at Lucius' passing. Didn't Moaning Myrtle have a crush on Draco at one point? Did you mention that before? I wonder what Albus will find out from Myrtle. Despite Albus' concerns for his family he's certainly had a good end of the year with dueling and Quidditch. You're building up the suspense--I'm waiting for the other shoe to drop.

Author's Response: Lucius's passing is sad. Myrtle did have a crush on Draco in HBP if I'm remembering right. Albus definitely had a good ending to Quidditch and dueling. Thanks for reading and reviewing! :)

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Review #3, by Pheonix Potioneer 

14th October 2012:
This is great so far! Keep writing!

I think Albus is right, that Malfoy is up to something. Early in the year, he needed the shrieking shack. The shrieking shack has nothing to do with his grandfather.

Did you purposely add the election in to shadow the events that look like are going to happen? Malfoy is up to something, Elsie Willinson is acting odd, prisoners are still on the loose, Laurentis is elected, Harry Potter is no longer head auror, and the dementors are reinstated, and Hogwarts is going to change as well, probably in a bad way. I can tell that whatever is going to happen at the end of this year, is going to be the worst so far.

Keep up the great work! I really hope you get through all seven years. That probably feels a long way ahead to you!

Thank you for this wonderful series!

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Review #4, by MargaretLane 

14th October 2012:
Right at the beginning of this chapter, you've said "Laurentis officiall became Minister," leaving off the "y" at the end of "officially".

OK, her reforms are creepy. Reinstating the Dementors is obviously creepy and while the evaluation of the Hogwarts teachers isn't necessarily a bad idea in and of itself, it's creepily reminiscent of Umbridge and anything she did is a bad idea to repeat by definition.

*grins at Slughorn planning on retiring* I've had him say he's planning on doing so in the story I'm writing at the moment too. Looks like there might be a new professor in your year 5 after all. I was wondering if Albus might finally get a year with no new teachers because nobody seemed particularly likely to leave at the end of this.

Oh gosh, that's a mean prank.

Rose should be so lucky - getting John and Kaden to get good marks.

I'd forgotten about Elsie. I still wonder what she knows and if they'll get it out of her by the end of the year. Maybe even by the end of this chapter. I wonder if she'll be nervous-surrounded by 3rd and 4th years.

I am also pretty interested to know what Malfoy's up to. The school year is so close to an end and yet there is so much still to find out. That's assuming we will find it all out in this story. Of course, some of it might be continued on into year 5 or beyond.

One other slight mistake I noticed. You said "Albus was "sept up in the crowd". I assume up mean "swept up in the crowd."

Hmm, the death of Lucius Malfoy has to be significant in some way or why would you mention it? But I can't figure out WHY? Unless you are just trying to get sympathy for Malfoy, but I've a suspicion you've some greater reason.

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Review #5, by StyloEnsanglante 

13th October 2012:
Why you so good :( I want to be as good as you one day. This book is absolutely amazing... :)

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Review #6, by ngayonatkailalnman 

13th October 2012:
Thank you for the update. I am concerned about all the changes. It looks like the wizarding world will be facing a crisis in the future what with all these mad policies being passed by the Minister of Magic no less!

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Review #7, by Chazi 

13th October 2012:
Loving it! Brilliant, and cant wait for next week :)

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