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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by CambAngst 

20th February 2013:
Hello, again! You know, some day in the not too distant future, I'm going to run out of chapters to read. And when I do, I'm going to be sad. How say really depends on how the story ends, but at a minimum I know I'll be bummed about coming to the end of the journey. This story is so good. I can't believe that more people aren't reading it; well, reviewing it, anyway. It's tough to gain a following, I think, for a Next Gen story that isn't one of the angsty-teen-drama-unrequited-romance-premarital-pregnancy-happy-ending affairs that seem to dominate the genre. This one is definitely a hidden gem.

Your opening is another great example of something that I think I mentioned before: you really can write nearly any story you want on HPFF without violating the rules as long as you're clever about it. All of the little insinuations and suggestive details that you worked into this really stimulate the reader's imagination to the point where not much is left to the imagination, if that made any sense at all. I especially loved Rose's "solution" to Viktor's problem of banging his head on the ceiling and his reaction to it. I thought that one little moment spoke volumes about both characters.

Rose was happy. For the first time in a very long time, she found herself letting go - not overanalyzing everything, not playing through every possible scenario in her head. - I love this moment for her. Again, it says a lot about the person she is compared to the person she wants to be.

Krum sat up, pressing his finger to her lips, silencing her. "You don't have to ask my permission to speak to someone, Rose. You're your own person. I don't control you. Do you understand?" She nodded. "Good. I donít ever want to hear you make that mistake again." - OK, I'm sorry. I think this is going to be one of those chapters where I spend a lot of time quoting your own words back to you. But I particularly liked this paragraph because it neatly highlights what I'm starting to think of as the two sides of Viktor Krum. On the one hand, his words tell Rose that he values her for her independence, yet in the very next sentence he's making demands of her. To loosely paraphrase: "These are the things I like about you; I forbid you to change any of them."

She sort of turns the tables on him with the conversation turns to "that bloke" Albus. He's not the only one who's allowed to keep secrets and spring them onto her.

Krum shook his head. "No, it's not. But it's important Peter doesn't know that." - I have the strangest feeling, as though this will turn out to be important somehow...

The rest of their conversation had a nice, easy sort of feel to it. They continue to play their little cat-and-mouse game with information about Viktor's life, but that's just become sort of endearing at this point. My big take-away from that are that Viktor does have a spot to run to if things really get bad, but it isn't the most pleasant of options. No wonder he prefers living in London on somebody else's dime.

I really love the role you've given Albus in this story. He's become "that friend" -- I think everybody had at least one in their early-to-mid 20's -- who's basically a screw-up but after some life-changing catastrophe he/she suddenly creates at least the appearance of pulling their life together and turning into a responsible adult. And it causes all of his/her friends to stop and rethink their lives. "Wow. We're all getting older. So-and-So used to live for one night stands and holiday weekend benders and now he/she is getting married and having a kid. What am I doing with my life?" But first, another line that I'd be remiss not to point out:

"What have you been doing in there? And what's that smell?" - Ewww!!! ;)

Dang it, you figured out a way to keep me from using any more quotes in this review: Heart filled them all full of non-12+ words! I said it before and I'll say it again, he's a beautiful bastard! He's already figured out the business angle on this crisis in his head and he's not going to pass on the advantage, even at the price of Rose's reputation. He's full steam ahead, strike while the iron is hot. For his character, I also liked the way he was so belittling of her. Like it never occurred to him that she was anything less than a sucker for Krum's manly charms.

Looking ahead, I'm very excited to see what happens when she arrives on her parents doorstep. I'm not quite sure whether Hermione will rationalize the whole thing and be clinical about it or turn into the freaked-out, over-protective mom, but it will be awkward either way. Which should be a walk in the proverbial park compared to how Ron responds. ;)

Lovely chapter, as always! I'll be back soon!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you're liking the story. I'm terribly self-conscious when it comes to my writing and tend to assume people are just saying they like it to be nice, but it's great to hear regardless. And I'm pretty used to the low read/review numbers (and I'd probably only half the totals I do now if Jami hadn't been so nice to recommend it to people), but I guess that goes with writing unusual ships. People aren't all that crazy about my Lily/Scorpius story either :P

I'm glad that line of Rose's stood out to you. I think it's easy to see what Krum gets out of the relationship, but I thought it was important to show that Rose is really getting something in return -- a chance to be outside herself a bit.

Quote away! It worked on Rose :P Seriously though, I'm glad you liked that part. I see Krum as working mostly on emotion. He likes that she's independent, but he also likes that she does what he tells her. It doesn't bother him that he's inconsistent, but it can be hard on the people around him.

Viktor's house does return in the future, though in retrospect, probably not as much as it should in the overall story arc.

I kind of like Al too, if that isn't terrible to say. I definitely know a few of them myself. More than that though, I wanted SOMEONE in the story to remind Rose and the reader that life exists beyond what's happening with Krum and the book -- my feeble attempts at a sub-plot.

Hahaha! That line... Originally it was meant to refer to the cigarette smoke smell that clings to smokers' clothes, even after they quit, but as soon as I wrote it, I realized what it looked like. I don't know what it says about me that I kept it in...

I know Heart can be a little much as a character, but I really don't see him as a bad person and hopefully that comes through and gives him some dimension... even when he is doing things that border on the despicable.

Thanks again for the wonderful review. I can't wait to see if the Ron/Hermione bits live up to expectations.


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Review #2, by Dark Whisper 

13th February 2013:
Oh, the fun and amusement of this chapter... so much revealed and in such a fun and playful way. And wow a full weekend of it! Lucky Rose.

Love how the sloped ceiling got in the way. LOL! And I love their banter about 'other guys' and 'insulting his talents.' ;)

I LOVE that he has loads of land and his childhood home, even if it is falling apart. In a way, it shows he does have a sentimental side, and who doesn't love a touch of that in our men? Hmm? Perfect.

And Albus is having a child and I just love weddings. I find Rose's views of him getting married interesting, but I'm glad she is keeping those thoughts to herself and is being supportive. It was nice of him to warn Rose of the man stalking outside. Yikes. I do not like this person at all.

And... Oh, NO! They've been found out! Darn it! Hope they get together again soon.

Wonderful chapter of debauchery. I have favorited and shall return to these last few chapters often just to get my fill of Viktor. So if your review count for these chapters goes up mysteriously every now and then, its probably me. LOL! XD

Dark Whisper
10/10

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you liked the more playful feeling in this chapter. They are going to have a lot of unpleasantness dropped on them soon, so I thought they deserved a little fun.

And I'm so glad you liked the bit about his childhood home. I think he really longs sometimes for that simpler time. And I'm with you -- a touch of sentiment isn't a terrible thing.

Hehehe, feel free to re-read anytime. It still surprises me that anyone wants to read this once, let alone twice :D


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Review #3, by maskedmuggle 

19th January 2013:
*trying to catch up on chapters to match your awesome speedy updating skills but failing miserably* ahem, anyway, another great chapter! you know, it's always a very enjoyable and interesting read :)

First off, your response about Rose being more insecure and not really needy makes a lot more sense, especially considering how much she needs Krum also for her book. Their relationship went a bit further than i was expecting.. (you know, staying together over 2 days) but I think I can start to understand Rose's feelings through this - she's starting to loosen up a bit. It was a little reckless of them, especially for Rose professionally, but I definitely did not expect that news article!

It also presented a slightly different side to Heart, who I've always thought of as this overbearing boss, but actually, he also has a softer side, so I liked how nice he was to Rose about considering it an early holiday (after he kind of told off Rose :P) His suggestion seemed reasonable - going to live with her parents. I can't wait to hear her parents' reactions to the news article!!! Both Hermione and Ron, aha!

There's a lot of dialogue in your chapters, more so than most people write, but even though it's a lot of conversation, you manage to make it flow and comfortable to read. I also liked that little bit with Albus. :D

Author's Response: Wow, it's so nice to see you back again so soon! If it helps at all, I only have three chapters left to write, so pretty soon their won't be any more updates at all.

Two days together is a long time for sure, but I guess I see Krum as very intense, like Liddy described him -- that sort of flame that burns bright and then dies. So I see a lot of it being all or nothing with him, and Rose as just sort of along for the ride at times. And I'm glad you liked this slightly different side of Heart. He really does like Rose a lot, in his own way. Hehe, writing Ron and Hermione in the next chapter ended up being a lot of fun, so I hope you like them.

I started to notice about the dialogue as well starting around chapter 16 or so, and have been trying to break up the chapters into several smaller scenes as opposed to 2 or 3 really big ones. If you read that far, you can let me know if it's a little less overwhelming.

Thanks again for the lovely R&R. I super, duper appreciate it :)


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Review #4, by momotwins 

2nd January 2013:
Ah, the flat is Liddy's, that makes sense. I can just see her offering to let him stay, rent-free, while he gets back on his feet.

Eeeek, busted! Oh man, she's going to be in trouble when she gets home! Excellent, excellent chapter, really sucked me in. Sorry the review isn't longer. Your writing is brilliant and you are awesome but I can't stop to review cause I must click "next"!

Author's Response: The best reason for a short review ever! And yep, it's all Liddy. I remember you mentioning on another chapter that he was throwing a lot of money around for a guy who is supposed to be broke, so hopefully that helps clear it up.

Thanks for the review!


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Review #5, by Ardeith 

24th September 2012:
I'm still reading! :-) And I love your story more and more. I loved the beginning with Krum and Rose flirting and teasing. I like how, despite the imbalance of ...what? power?...given the difference in their ages, his fame, etc., Rose is able to tease him. This was very funny:

ďAnd who says there have been others?Ē

You've so captured the magic yet worry of beginning relationships. Speaking as someone who is in that situation and a chronic over-analyzer (does "Thanks for an awesome evening" mean he had a good time or is just being polite?...)

And poor Rose, a new relationship is fragile and it must be terrible to have it seem tawdry to the outside world.

Just everything really well done in this chapter. :-)

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Ardeith. I'm so, so glad you liked the chapter. And you totally picked up on exactly what I was going for with the opening scene. For the most part, Krum has been in control of their interactions, but now Rose is just starting to get her feet under her in the relationship, to where she feels she can jab back at him.

And I'm so with you on the over-analyzing bits. Rose and I definitely have that trait in common. Those early days in a relationship can be like a minefield!

Thank you again. I'm so happy you're continuing to enjoy the story.


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Review #6, by Jchrissy 

18th September 2012:
YOU TOLD ME THE WEASLEYS WOULD KNOW SOON! AHH! Okay, this chapter is the only reason I haven't gone crazy lady killing spree today. I have been waiting for this wonderful moment the minute I saw your updates post and it did not disappoint.

I adored the love den in the first section. And how tempting (and romantic) is the idea of gathering blankets and pillows and having a very adult living room camp out? I love the small hints of jealousy we get from Viktor also.. and I have to say when Rose said the line about 'who said there's been other men?' my eyes/mouth popped open also. She fooled Krum and myself both, sneaky girl.

SO! IS STRANGE MAN OUTSIDE A REPORTER?? WILL TOMORROWS HEADLINES READ...'Viktor Krum, the former Quidditch heart throb and serial drug user, caught red handing slipping form Rose Weasley's (daughter of Ministry Officials Hermione and Ron Weasley) flat Monday morning. And by the looks of his disheveled clothing and hair, this reporter would have to say that he was doing a bit more than offering friendly tips on how one might get the Quaffle through the hole. Pun intended'

Okay, I hope the article is written a bit better than that one, but you get what I'm saying ;).

YOU SURPRISED ME! I completely expected Krum to react all 'that vasn't your business, you can't just talk to whoever you vant about me, certainly not one a dear friend of mine' and stomp out. But he didn't! Which I loved, because his reaction was much less predictable.

My heart broke for Rose at the end of this :(. Especially this new love she's feeling being nothing more than affair from all logical standpoints.. gah. Poor girl. We know the Weasleys must've heard about this, right? And I'll find our how they react next chapter. right?? So you'll spend the next hours slaving away to finish it..?

Thank you so much darling for just making my day! And for the sweet mention ♥ When you are a famous author I'm sending this chapter into some newspaper - that way I can prove to everyone I read your writing first ;).

Author's Response: What would I do without your wonderful reviews?! It's a good thing I don't get too many like this or my head might start to swell :D

I'm so glad you liked their little love nest. I have to admit, I'm not always sure where to draw the line on the romance parts. I don't want it to be all in the reader's face with mature content, but they are two adults... I thought making the bed into a fort would keep it on the playful side. And I couldn't resist with that line of Rose's. Krum is always teasing her; it was about time she returned the favor!

I debated on how Krum would react to the news. I felt like there was no way Liddy wouldn't have told him right away about the meeting. In the end, I think Krum trusts Rose so he's willing to go with it, though I like that he's unpredictable. I want him to overreact to things (like in the pub), just as much as he under-reacts to things, if that makes sense.

I'm still processing the ending myself. I think I said to you one time I didn't really want the characters to see their relationship as scandalous but she has to know that's how everyone else will see it. I'm still working on finding that balance.

And what can I say? You are right on all fronts about the next chapter. The Weasleys will know, the man outside the flat will return and I am definitely slaving away on it!

Thank you times infinity for being so supportive of my story. I can't lie; it really gives me a confidence boost!



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