7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by onestop_hpfan18 

31st July 2016:
This was a very Quidditch-centric chapter, but I wouldn't expect much else since the season's started and England wanted James to train with them on his week off. Makes sense that James wasn't picked as he's just getting his name out there and been invited to England's training, and it had been huge for him to be called out of the 20 other players to join the main squad's training since he's still so young and fresh in the world of professional Quidditch. It's impressive that he was included in training, shows that England is watching him.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! :)

 Report Review

Review #2, by slytherinchica08 

20th March 2014:
Another well done chapter! I'm always so shocked when it comes time for them to go visit Harry's parents at their graves for their birthdays. I think its a very sobering idea and sets a different tone for the story as well. It really makes me thankful for what I do have and sad for James in what he is missing. "But every time that any of my cousins spent time with their other grandparents, it hit me that I didn't have that option, save sitting in front of a patch of ground with a tombstone sticking out of it." This bit in particular stood out to me and made my heart ache for him. I'm just completely in awe of this story and so much in love with it. I love that while its got enough James/Carla to keep me satisfied its also not the only focus in this story. Its very much about James and who he is and how he has changed just over the course of time since meeting Carla. It's all about his development as a person and how Carla has managed to change him in ways that aren't quite noticeable when you just look at the chapter in question but when you look at where he is at now compared to the very beginning of the story it is very noticeable and you almost wonder how it has managed to sneak past you this whole time. You've got a very realistic portrayal of a person here and their journey and I'm just so much in love with this. You do a wonderful job of giving me enough description to help me picture exactly what is going through here and really make me feel like I'm a part of the story and that I am there during this whole thing. Its a wonderful experience and I'm just very much in love with this story! Great Job!


Author's Response: I do think it would be a big thing for James, Al and Lily that one set of grandparents is dead, especially given the manner in which they died all those years ago. Sad as they were, I liked writing these scenes because it's nice in a rather morbid way to reflect on things. The sentence you quote is one of my particular favourites in this chapter.

The main focus of this fic isn't James' love life, or his career; it's James himself. The whole fic centres around his journey, and everything that goes on in his life is just as important as the next thing. So, while his relationship with Carlotta is a big thing in this fic, it's not the only focus. Aside from anything else, I didn't want to write a fic where a girl comes waltzing in and is James' soul-mate and fixes everything for him. So I'm glad you like that! Thanks for the lovely review :)

 Report Review

Review #3, by Slide 

4th September 2012:
Oops. I totally did miss a chapter. Ah, I see it's a Quidditch chapter, which is why I didn't quite notice (also my gross inattentiveness) but whee, Quidditch! Ha, James, you never know when you've got it good? Though I imagine it would be frustrating to dedicate time to a match he wouldn't play. Hee, Transylvania - and you've got one of my little pet loves, the cross-over between the political make-up of the wizarding world versus the Muggle world and how the former doesn't always keep up with the latter - ASSYRIA. You're killing me. And bless him. I do love James, I love how passionate and stroppy and silly (and not without good reason) he can be, but I do love that he has a level head underneath and I love how it comes out more over Quidditch than anything else.

And bless him for looking after Brigid, and bless him for his concern for her being very wisely affected by his respect for his own nose. Not to mention that I'm sure Brigid can take care of herself. I just hope she's doing it for her own sake, not to make Freddie jealous. It's a BAD PLAN.

D'aww, the funeral. Of course his namesake would love some Wheezes. Of course the Potters are sensible and pragmatic in ensuring their kids know the truth about what's happened and why. And grief like that's a funny thing - in the weird way, not the ha-ha way. You didn't need to belabour the point, especially not after the visit to Lily's grave, but it's a nice, important touch.


Author's Response: Haha, yeah, this is one of those chapters that you wouldn't automatically MISS because nothing massive happens in it. But, you know, grave visits and all that. :) I got so much amusement from the whole Transylvania/Assyria thing! I love the way that the wizarding world totally hasn't kept up with Muggle politics. Carlotta would find it TOTALLY bewildering. James is ONLY sensible when it comes to Quidditch. And people judging others unfairly. ;) He is also a ridiculously loyal/over-protective friend, delete as approps. And thinks too much about his own appearance. BUT boys will be boys! Brigid's theory is definitely that this date will either help her move on, or give Freddie a much needed kick up the backside, so it's a win-win situation for her. In THEORY.

I've always struggled with working out what the Potters would have told their kids, and - more importantly - WHEN. The whole Harry/Al chat about Slytherin and namesakes in the epilogue suggested that they didn't know everything at that point, but I think that they would have known what they needed to know by the time they went to school, and certainly they would have known the full story by this point. This grave bit was hard to write because obviously it doesn't need to be as long as the first one was, but it still needed a decent mention. I like how it turned out in the end. :) Thanks for reviewing!

 Report Review

Review #4, by imacullenpottergirl 

21st August 2012:
That last bit about Granddad James' birthday was touching. Another amazing and capturing chapter!!
I promise to leave longer reviews next time! Its just really REALLY late at night, and I don't think I could form a long coherent review if I tried.

Author's Response: Don't worry, I don't mind shorter reviews! It's just nice to know that people are enjoying the story :) I'm glad you liked the visit to the grave, I was quite happy with how that came out in the end. Thanks for reviewing!

 Report Review

Review #5, by missclaire17 

21st August 2012:
lol i had two tabs open for new story updates, this one and another story that i really love.
in the end i had to choose this one to read first because the lure of ur story was too strong for me to resist haha
honestly, out of the millions of stories that i've read on HPFF, i think that this one is DEFINITELY in my top three lol

anyways. i LOVED this chapter!
so much Quidditch but it was great because i love seeing that England wanted James to be in training for one of their matches, even if they didn't choose him. it is a start and a VERY great start at that.

not much happened in this chapter, really, but what i did like was the part about James's granddad's birthday, aka his namesake aka James Potter the first.

of course, there wasn't much to describe as everything was described in Lily (the first)'s birthday but i did like that part in there.
and how James was worried about missing his granddad's birthday. and that part about James frequently wondering if they were proud of him made my heart all fuzzy and everything.

the part when James explained that his parents had told him all about the War and their history and how the thought of his grandparents and what they went through was sobering and heartbreaking.
that part made me love james even more.

what was interesting to me, however, was that when James mentioned that he frequently wondered if his grandparents would be proud of him, i realized something about james. it seems that he is always striving to make his family proud of him. James wants Harry to be proud of him, James basically wants his grandparents to be proud of him, and it's like even though he's in the public scrutiny so much because of Quidditch and his parents, in the end, James really only cares about making those people closest to him, aka his family, proud of him. i feel like THATS what really matters to James, and it was sweet to think of it that way because it brings James down onto a much more personal level than how others might perceive him to me.

i dont think that James has insecurity problems, like how Ron used to have. But i think that James's main insecurity, if you can even call it that, is that he can't match up to what others did before him.

i dunno, this is just me speculating as i draw from examples of how james always mentions how he doesn't like every single female he knows to be so obsessed with cato and that he subconsciously is always comparing himself to cato, and based on the fact that i feel that james always wants to make harry and his family proud... i feel like James's main insecurity, if you can even CALL it that, is that he can't measure up.

he has his super famous parents that did so many amazing things, he has a whole family full of brilliant people, and he is now part of the Quidditch world, a world that it is so easy to be lost and forgotten if you weren't the best. i feel like because of all of that, James feels like he needs to measure up, which may be where perhaps some of his "arrogance" comes through.
it cant be easy for James to make a name for himself and for everyone to recognize him and like him for who he is and what he has achieved because of his family, his friends, and his occupation.

Author's Response: I updated again! I figured that it had been a while since I'd last updated, so decided to repay you guys with two quick updates :) And yours is my 100th review for this story! It's very exciting :)

I'm glad you like this chapter, because it's quite light on the James/Carlotta and quite heavy on the Quidditch, and I was a bit concerned that it would seem a bit fillery, but I like it and it has some important stuff in it. James making England training IS a good start indeed, because it means that they like what they see and he has a chance of making the World Cup squad. So long as he works hard :)

Yeah, James basically wants people to be proud of what he's accomplished. He seems quite confident on the outside, but underneath he IS a little bit insecure in that he worries that he's not doing his parents proud. You are indeed making some very good observations, and this review makes me very happy because it means that I'm doing things right! So thank you ever so much for your feedback! :)

 Report Review

Review #6, by Courtney 

20th August 2012:
It seems like it will be hard for James to keep thinsg casual with Carlotta after telling her so much. I'm so happy that Brigid has someone interested in her and hope she likes Cato. I hope that Freddie doesn't make a fuss as it would be hypocritical and only what he deserves for taking her for granted.

Author's Response: Yeah, things between James and Carlotta are definitely going to get difficult! Brigid has, indeed, finally realised that the thing to do is to stop waiting around for Freddie. She's not necessarily getting over him, but she's still exploring other options in the hope that either he gets his act together or she finds someone else! Thanks for reviewing :)

 Report Review

Review #7, by BBWotter 

20th August 2012:
James sweetheart, they will ALWAYS be proud of you! okay? xxx


Author's Response: Of course they will be! But he's not so certain, poor thing. I'm glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing!

 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login
Add a Review