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Review #1, by onestop_hpfan18 

31st July 2016:
Ooh, the answer to all the tension between Harry and James is finally being revealed bit by bit. It's a slight on Harry that James doesn't feel like he's measured up, so I can see why its distanced them. I only hope that they work out, especially since Harry seems to approve of Carlotta if he was talking with her for a lot of the scrimmages. I hope father and son work out their differences and finally see eye to eye, as well as Harry accepting his son for the accomplishments he's made instead of thinking he's wasting his life just playing professional Quidditch.

Author's Response: The James/Harry tensions come from all sorts of little incidents, and James definitely THINKS he knows why Harry gives him short thrift. But yes, Harry does like Carla a lot. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #2, by slytherinchica08 

20th March 2014:
Just a small thing but I thought I would mention that I'm pretty sure in the last chapter Teddy and James had decided on meeting at the Leakey not Three Broomsticks. Although I could be mistaken but thought I would point it out none the less. Overall though, this was a really wonderful chapter. The ending left me rather sad and feeling sorry for James. I do hope that Harry and James sort out their differences soon because you can tell the James does love his father and just wants to have the same love and acceptance in all that he does from his father. I also liked seeing the different dynamics of all the relationships. Harry seems very much supportive of Lily and loves her with all of his heart but has almost more of a tough love for James. It was also really cool to see the depth of Quidditch. How they all stack up against each other is based on the amount of points that they have over all the other teams etc. It was something that I had never really thought about before. You can definitely tell that you put a lot of work into the back story of everything from Quidditch to the players which really makes this story stand out. Also adding in that bit about Maddie was just fantastic! It was nice to learn more about her and understand where she is coming from. It also added so much more depth to her character and really made me feel for her and be so much happier for all of her success. I have a feeling if she were a witch she would probably be in Hufflepuff for her loyalty. Because you know, go PUFFS! Anywho, great job on this chapter it was a treat to read! Great Job!


Author's Response: ...Did I send them to the wrong pub? WOW, what a moron I am. I'll have to check that one out, thanks for the heads up!

Yeah, I'll be the first to say I did a lot of Quidditch-thinking when writing this. A lot of it was almost accidental - as in, I was thinking about the match I had to write and came up with an idea, rather than deliberately developing it. But it was good fun, until I ran out of ideas. :P

Maddie is one of those characters who was supposed to be a fringe character but ran away with the story. She has her own plotline in the sequel, that's how much she's wormed her way into things. And she would DEFINITELY be a Puff, either that or possibly a Gryff, she is quite ballsy and says what she thinks which I think are Gryff traits. She's mostly full of Puff goodness though. :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #3, by imacullenpottergirl 

21st August 2012:
Another awesome and amazing chapter :)

Author's Response: Glad you liked, thanks for reviewing!

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Review #4, by Slide 

20th August 2012:
Aha. Manly talks time. James could do with one, he spends most of his time with Freddie dealing with Freddie's issues or with a girl present. Ha, James Potter NEVER rings first. It's good to see James talking with a mate, and one who's going to be blunt in that way what men are with him. This ISN'T an average relationship of his, and everyone else has been so busy fussing over that she's a Muggle that they've not REALLY addressed that it IS becoming more serious. Good on Teddy. Okay, now he is bringing it up, but certainly PROPERLY, in way to make James think (instead of berating him about it).

Hmm. Concerning that the conclusion of 'stick with her' is the sensible, practical one, not the emotional one. I mean, clearly it IS affection that's driving him too, but that's a worrying prospect for if the affection dries up. What IS he going to do? Just hope she stays quiet? Mm, Teddy has the right of it. I like Teddy, he's - OH NO he just said "what could go wrong." Doomed. Doomed!

Good on James for taking being Reserve so well. He's right and he's being mature about this - I do quite love the juxtaposition of how he's considerably more sensible professionally than personally, we can see these qualities DO exist within him. Oh, you are FIBBING, Carla. Fibbing, fibbing, fibbing!

Heh. Judicious planning to sit next to Hermione. That sounds like a double-edged sword but equally, food! I do like the Quidditch stuff, I know you worry about it sometimes but *I* think it's fun and interesting. And hee on Maddie drawing the comparisons between Quidditch and Hockey. Good lateral thinking. Love Maddie. AND NOW I LOVE HER EVEN MORE. That's loyalty. Ah-ha, more daddy issues no, wait, Carla, push, I want to hear more! Curses.

Phew! Mammoth chapter here. But a good 'un.

Author's Response: The trouble with James and Freddie's friendship, is that neither of them seek out a friend who they can talk to about things, because neither of them are the type of person to talk about their issues. They're both fairly easy-going guys, who like to have a laugh. So when James DOES need to talk, he can't really go to Freddie - and vice versa. Hence why James needs Teddy in this instance.

This has indeed become much more of a relationship than James' previous, but the trouble is that BECAUSE Carlotta is a Muggle, the automatic thought is that the reason why it's different is because of this. And nobody is thinking any further than that; James certainly isn't! So nobody's thinking about the emotional side of things here.

Clearly nothing can go wrong! ;)

James is partly okay with being reserve because he didn't want to play in the marathon match in the end! And of course, Roxanne is first and foremost his cousin, so he wants her to stay with the Falcons and recognises that he occasionally needs to be the one on the sidelines for her to play. He IS more sensible when it comes to Quidditch, partly because he has goals and knows what he needs to do to achieve them. He has little other responsabilities, and so is much more carefree outside his professional life. TOO carefree at times...

I like the Quidditch stuff, and it needs to be in place, because it's just as important as the Carlotta storyline. I did worry that it might have been too much, but I think it's fine. People seem to be enjoying it! So it's not a problem, and it will stay!

Maddie IS indeed a total babe. She does have the odd flaw, but in general she's a bit fab, and in danger of taking over this fic. Or at least she was until I decided she could have her own, haha.

DADDY ISSUES GALORE. Sorry, Carla isn't pushing for more :)

This chapter ended up bigger than I thought it would be. But I didn't want to split it up, so it all went up in one go. The next one is a bit shorter though. Thanks for reviewing, glad you liked :)

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Review #5, by missclaire17 

18th August 2012:
You updated!

From James point of view, it isn't too easy to tell what is up with Carlotta but I think there is something up.
It cld be because carlottas friends might be giving her some trouble because she and James spend so much time together and now she knows about his secret world, it can't be easy to keep her loved ones appeased.

I'm not sure; I feel like that part where James and teddy were talking really proved a good point. James and Carlotta have now reached a point that it becomes hard for them to go back.

Yet, I feel like there IS something about James and Carlotta that neither of them of realized and maybe James's family have either because she's a Muggle. I feel like James just says casually that Carlotta is fun to be fun around but the thing is that I feel like James cares a LOT more for Carlotta than he has realized.

For Carlotta, I wonder if she realized already this troublesome situation between her and James needs to be resolved. Or maybe she's realized that her meeting all of his family when she isn't a part of the magical world is not something that is just casual.

*sigh* I don't know. I do know that there is something up with Carlotta, perhaps not bad, but there is something wrong with the way she's acting that isn't normal.

I wish she and James can get together D;

And Harry! Maybe Harry is more proud of lily because of how difficult she has it as a squib. I don't know. I don't think that Harry is quite as bad as James likes to make Jim out to be but the way that Harry did say earlier when he found out about Carlotta, how he was a senior member of the ministry and James said that Harry always makes it about him, I don't know.
I think there is something seriously wrong with Harry and James. This just isn't normal behavior, for Harry and for James. And it makes me sad bc from James's point of view, Harry really doesn't seem supportive of him at all and to see James upset, as much as he likes to hide it, makes me sad for him D;

Are we gonna find out more about what's wrong with Carlotta and why Harry and James are like that?

I love ur updates

Author's Response: I updated! Sorry about the wait, you'll probably be glad to know that the next few updates should be at quicker intervals! The next chapter is in the queue so should be out in the next day or two :)

There IS Something up with Carlotta, yes, although James obviously has no idea what it is. Although it clearly can't be easy for a Muggle to know about the Wizarding World but not truly be involved with it, especially when it's a non-committal relationship. And yes, James has become a bit stuck, because, like he said, he can't just end things with her, not unless he's prepared to Obliviate her; she knows too much. And he won't Obliviate her, because he thinks it's cruel. In terms of their relationship, it's clearly more than just a fling by now, but he either doesn't see it or doesn't want to acknowledge it. The pure fact that she's a Muggle makes it a more serious relationship in itself because he suddenly has so much more responsibility to keep the Statute intact, especially given that he's already broken it once!

So basically, yeah, it's more than just a fling by now, and it's just a case of whether it naturally develops into a more serious relationship or whether Things Go Wrong.

Yeah, there is a definite issue between Harry and James - and as you yourself say, it's worth remembering that James is by no means an impartial narrator! And there are always two sides to every story. It definitely seems to James as though he doesn't get much parental support though. You will, of course, have all of your questions answered ... in time. :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #6, by countrymusicfanatic 

17th August 2012:
Amazing as always :) Can't wait for the next update!

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed! The next chapter is already in the queue so hopefully it'll be up soon. Thanks for reviewing!

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