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Review #1, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap 

17th June 2012:
And he steps through the veil.

^ Interesting 'invention' of his. I think one of the best parts of the story so far. The way you weave everything in is so insane.

I never would have thought that it would have crossed Lucius's mind that the Dark Lord could be defeated. Really, I always just thought he was more into it than Narcissa, a little too far gone and she was the one that had to pull him back, to realize what was important and in the end she does, severing their ties to the Dark Lord and that's that. I think he would have listened to his wife but only when he was desperate. I don't doubt he loved her but either he was a really good actor when it came to the Dark Lord or he just crushed whatever doubt he had inside of him.

Author's Response: The creation of the veil was something I've been wanting to write since the beginning of the story. I like to explain the more vague aspects of canon, and give stories to small, often overlooked bits.

In canon, I think that Lucius was pretty gung-ho about Voldemort and that he was definitely more into it than Narcissa, who was sort of just along for the ride by association. I agree, I don't think he would have listened to her opinions unless their situation was hopeless, like in Deathly Hallows when he's fallen from grace. For the purposes of this story, however, and for making Lucius rather more likable, I'm making him reluctant to start off with even though he's going to slowly become that eager villain we know in canon. It's an evolution.

THANK YOU, THANK YOU, THANK YOU for being awesome and amazing and for reading this story and reviewing it. :) :)

- Sarah

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Review #2, by adluvshp 

15th May 2012:

Wow this was another breath-taking chapter! As I have told you many times before, I love your take on Lucius and Narcissa, and Bellatrix, and Voldemort. The way you write it makes it all so surreal, it gives me the shivers.
With each chapter, the story keeps getting more and more interesting. I am looking forward to how they are going to treat Circe. I am sure it won't be anything good but I'm just curious to see how much pain Lucius would be willing to inflict on her. I think that will tell a great deal about how his character is further going to develop.
As ever, your writing is superb, do update soon!



Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! It was lovely to see you back here again. I'm making an effort to give this story more of my attention, but I'm pretty horrible with following up on my intentions. -is ashamed-

The reintroduction of Circe is something I have been planning for a very long time. The story will wrap up just a few chapters after that, since I feel like I've told the story I wanted to tell. We're slowly making our way out of the fairy tales and into reality, which is where it ends.

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Review #3, by academica 

11th May 2012:
SARAH ♥ I have returned, after having been beaten down by spring semester, to flail at your lovely Lucissa.

Oh my gosh, you are brilliant. I cannot believe how much I love this idea of the backstory behind the infamous black veil. I felt so much for Cygnus reading this, in part, I think, because I can imagine a similar scene playing in out for my beloved Snily, had Severus had the necessary information. It was so lovely how you built up the story with details until finally, shockingly, I realized precisely what he was doing. It's so interesting to see something as pure as love and the loneliness of a widower juxtaposed with such a dark creation. And your description of the way Narcissa would react to her father's idea sent chills down my spine. I fear things will not end well for Cygnus, Druella, and God knows who else.

I also love how you've used the events of the plot to really differentiate between the three Black sisters. I'm sure I've said this before, but it's so clear to me -- Andromeda is pure, fighting for the side of good; Bellatrix is evil, fighting for her own selfish desires; and Narcissa is this complex little thing trapped in the middle, the youngest and the one fighting the hardest. And then I blink, and the portrayals are no longer clear cut; Andromeda is out to put her sisters in prison, and Bellatrix is clinging to Narcissa in a demonstration of faux 'sisterhood', and Narcissa doesn't want to fight for anything anymore, not if she could just run away with Lucius instead. I love how this theme of separation reverberated throughout the story; in particular, I found an eerie parallel between the point Narcissa made about how Cygnus was Bellatrix's father, too, and yet she didn't acknowledge him, and the later point where Narcissa said that Bellatrix doesn't know Andromeda like Narcissa because they're sisters, ignoring the fact that Bellatrix is still Andromeda's sister as well.

Voldemort is so chilling, of course, and it breaks my heart because I've become so attached to your Lucissa. You can really see the special connection and tender romance between them after watching it build for so long, and I feel like it fits in so well with how I see them in the final canon book. In the same theme, I have to wonder how much of their behavior up until that point was just the presentation of coldness and obedience, and whether there was more of this under the surface, quietly working to balance it out. I believe that a good story makes me ask questions, and yours never fails to do just that, all while leaving me completely mystified.


Author's Response: Amanda! ♥

I'm not sure how worthy I am of any flailing, seeing as how negligent I've been with this story. I am so, so horrible with balancing fics. And it seems that I have to be in a really strange mood to write this story. But I'm very grateful that you're still sticking with me, anyway. :hug:

Narcissa has a lot of imperfections. While she's quick to find fault in others, she rarely sees any of it reflected in herself - like in how she was angry that Bellatrix regarded Cygnus as Andromeda's father but not her own, but forgot about Bellatrix when she was thinking about sisters and how she knows Andromeda better than anyone. The Black sisters are troubled; some have more issues than others. Narcissa is pretty selfish and would definitely just run off with Lucius if she could, leaving Bellatrix behind to fend for herself.

I think that a lot of Lucius and Narcissa's love became lost after they realized that Voldemort was seemingly back from the dead. They had to reexamine their roles in society, their loyalties; they had to weigh the benefits and drawbacks of hiding in the shadows and risking punishment from Voldemort or openly joining Voldemort again and risking punishment from the Ministry. Or at least that's how it is in my headcanon. I refuse to believe that they didn't love each other. If they didn't love each other, it's impossible that they would have made it through to the end, doing whatever they could to keep each other alive. Even so, the Malfoys are some pretty twisted people. I find them fascinating. XD

Thank you so much for dropping by yet again and for leaving me this lovely review. :)

- Sarah

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Review #4, by Ardeith 

8th May 2012:
Wow! I had forgotten how much I loved this story of yours, too! It's been a while, but I think I remember where it was going... I loved the opening with Cygnus creating the portal to the dead. What beautiful writing! Was it your own idea to make the veil a dementor? Or is that something suggested in canon? Can't remember...

Also love your characterization of the Death Eaters as a cult! So brilliant...the community property idea, the way they are subsumed in Voldemort, the way he plays them.

So sad to see Lucius and Narcissa arguing after all they've been through, but they're certainly under enough stress.

I love your other story, "Run", so much I'm not sure I should encourage you here, too! Anyway you can keep up with both of them?

Thanks and thanks for all your sweet replies to my ramblings! :-)


Author's Response: Hi, Ardeith! Hee, yes, the dementor/veil was my idea. It just seemed to fit for me and it's a scene that I've been wanting to write since I was about five or six chapters into Purgatory. Oooh, 'cult' is a very appropriate name for the Death Eaters. They're extremely private, secretive, and tightly-knit, and everything belongs to everyone, while everyone belongs to Voldemort. There is no privacy whatsoever because the main goal, rather like a cult leader might do, is to try to strip away everyone's sense of self, their autonomy. It's all a part of the brainwashing.

I'm going to attempt to keep up with both Purgatory and Run; I'm on a bit of a streak with Run and I fear that if I don't make that story the main priority, it won't end up finished. :/ I'm going to shoot for a Purgatory update at least once a month, and hopefully that will be achievable.

Thank you so much for reading this chapter even though it's been an eternity since I paid this story the attention I owe it. I appreciate it very, very much.

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Review #5, by TenthWeasley 

4th May 2012:
This review is extremely overdue, and first and foremost I shall offer up apologies for that. ♥ Because I pretty much nearly cried tears of excitement when I saw you'd updated this story, and that is really only a very small exaggeration. It's like... the fan fiction equivalent of JKR writing another Harry Potter book. Or something. :D ANYWAY.

I loved that beginning bit with Cygnus! It was very poetic and mellifluous, and I could so clearly picture every single emotion in it -- his sorrow and his somewhat fruitless hopes, and I think it's perfect that you had him construct the arch where he did. That atmosphere perfectly embodied what you were writing about. And that's sort of what I was trying to say in my latest review to you: Whatever your characters are experiencing, your setting's embracing as well, and there's just something very, very cool in that.

LUCIUS. ♥ I knew if anyone could make me like him, it would be you -- and I was so right about that! This entire chapter, the whole way through, I just wanted to throw my arms around him. And it's so amazing, really, how well he's come to know Narcissa, and how to care for her, in such a short span of time. It's hard to think that I was ever creeped out by him, really, although ink-black eyes and transparent skin are good candidates for creepiness.

YOU WRITE VOLDEMORT SO WELL. Have I mentioned that? I don't think I've had a lot of opportunity to yet, but I'll go ahead and say it here, even if I already have. I am just blown away by your characterization of him, because it's pretty much how I've pictured him, every detail intact. (And thank you for being so up to speed on details and not making him a red-eyed skeleton man from the get-go. Cannot enunciate how much that bothers me.) And those last few paragraphs -- UGH, I AM GETTING A TWISTY FEELING JUST THINKING ABOUT THEM -- hit home in a way that's almost never happened in reading your stories before. Oh my gosh, I just... it's the sort of twisted thing that I love reading about, the sort that you call me odd for enjoying. :D I adored it. Those last paragraphs made this chapter.

I am legitimately so excited you're working on this again. Like, bouncing-off-all-the-walls-multiple-times excited. Because this is foremost and forever my favorite story of yours (well... it's pretty much tied with "So, Listen..."), and I just have a great time reading it. :) And you're fabulous and wonderful and if you don't update again soon, I might explode. But no pressure. ♥ I cannot wait!

Author's Response: I AM UNWORTHY. SO UNWORTHY. I consider myself lucky that you read this at all. Seeing as how I used to update this story once a week (and sometimes twice), I've been terribly negligent with Lucius and Narcissa. I DO NOT DESERVE THIS REVIEW IT IS TOO LOVELY. -foams at mouth-

The arch bit has been planned since the very early chapters. I was always curious about the veil (Siriuuus creyyy) and wondered what it might be made out of, and for some reason a dementor seemed a bit like a viable option. I mean, they're so closely associated with death, what with all their soul-eating and whatnot, and it made me think that underneath their hoods, in the faces that no one in living memory has ever seen, you can see the faces of the souls that dementor has sucked out. SORRY FOR THAT BIT OF AWFUL IMAGERY BUT THERE WE HAVE IT.

Lucius lulz. In canon I absolutely hate him. I possibly hate him more than Voldemort. He was /so mean/ to Arthur and that's just unforgivable. I can try to justify his rudeness any which way I want, but at the end of the day, this story is the only place I like him. At all. And this story feels so spaced out in time, even when it isn't really, that I forget he hasn't really been with Narcissa all that long. I have been slowly pushing away from the fairytales to bring them into reality - which I am doing on purpose - but I think very soon I am going to bring back some old faces here and there, or at least mentions of them.

VOLDEMORT IS EASIER FOR ME TO WRITE THAN DUMBLEDORE, WHAT DOES THAT MEAN. Maybe I'm more in touch with my inner villain than my inner Confucius. And nope, I always saw his transformation from good-looking Tom Riddle to scary-as-hell Voldemort to be very gradual, increasing more when he's being more evil. The worse the evils are that he's committing, the more his physical appearance is going to reflect that loss of humanity. Now that he's starting to gather up more and more power, he'll start to deteriorate a bit more and become the inhuman-like creature we all know.

YOUR FAVORITE STORY OF MINE SQUEE ♥ I have such a soft spot for this story. I think a lot of the reason why I haven't written it is because I'm afraid I might write it wrong and it won't come out the way I want it to. I'm just going to push through it and adapt to whatever ends up coming out.


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