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Review #1, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap 

17th June 2012:
"My Lucius has always poured his heart into the very worst things for him, the most self-destructive. He got that from me, you know." She sighed. "And just like me, he never sees it until itís too late."

^ I think that pretty much summed up the entire chapter. Wow. Seriously. Wow. I know it's a word I repeat in my reviews to you a lot but I don't know...it's the best word to really define what I'm feeling that's 12+.

The scene with Andromeda, really. At first I just thought she figured that it was someone but not Narcissa but then when she said her name it broke my heart. She really had to deal with so much because of her 'silly' sisters. Bellatrix has always been too far gone but really Narcissa could have ended up on either side if I think about it. I don't know if you would agree.

Author's Response: Oh yay, I'm glad you liked that bit! That's exactly what I was going for: an overall summary of Lucius and what he's like, and why he does what he does. He's sort of blinded to his mistakes until he can view them in hindsight.

Narcissa could have gone either way, I think, and if she hadn't ended up with Lucius, she might have followed in Andromeda's footsteps. It was all sort of one door after another that she took that led to her fate. Like Lucius, I think she was too proud and too invested in the present to take stock of herself and her surroundings until it was far too late.

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Review #2, by adluvshp 

17th February 2012:
Another amazing chapter. I love your descriptions. I can really understand what Narcissa & Lucius are going through at the moment. Your writing is really captivating and brilliant!! Great work!



Author's Response: Thank you! Describing things is my favorite thing to do, so I'm very pleased. I'm so glad that you're still reading and still enjoying. :)

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Review #3, by Ardeith 

4th January 2012:
So glad you're back with this story! I couldn't stop reading the part where poor Narcissa was at the MacKinnon's. Great, so riveting! I was a little confused in the Rosalind part and where that was coming from, but that could be because it's been a while since I read the first part of your story. You are a great writer! :-)

Author's Response: Thank you for reading! Yes, I'm kicking myself for waiting so long to update, because now no one recognizes Rosalind. Although she's not called by name earlier in the story, she is alluded to. For reference, if you're curious, you might reread the beginning of chapter 15, and you'll be able to see her origins. :)

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Review #4, by FWHPObsessed 

3rd January 2012:
Loving this story so far. Your writing is just entrancing. (:

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you're enjoying it. :)

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Review #5, by academica 

3rd January 2012:
"I wouldn't be surprised if no one is still around to read this." Uh-huh. Whatevs. You're not getting rid of us that easily, love. I don't think a week goes by when there isn't someone telling me something like, 'oh, you like Lucius/Narcissa? There's this *great* story you should read...' MM-HMM.

The beginning of this was super interesting. I was so touched by the connection between Lucius and Narcissa, their determination to rebuild Malfoy Manor and make it perfect, and then I was pulled away from the moment much as they were. The contrast between the sensation in the kiss and the sensation in their Marks was really powerful imagery-wise.

The middle section with Tulia and Rosalind was interesting, if a bit confusing - was that intentional? I sometimes found it hard to tell to which woman Narcissa was referring. This line, though, made me take pause: "My Lucius has always poured his heart into the very worst things for him, the most self-destructive. He got that from me, you know." She sighed. "And just like me, he never sees it until it's too late." If that isn't the best possible summary of the plight of Lucius and his family from canon, I don't know how one could be crafted. You explained his whole life so beautifully and so simply.

The scene with Andromeda and the Polyjuice was so powerful. I really felt for Narcissa, especially in that moment when she realized that killing her sister would mean killing not one family member but two. I'm really proud of her for being brave and trying to save Andromeda's life, and that of Ted. Also, the thought of Bellatrix trying to practice the killing curse as a little girl is positively terrifying. Well done there!

Another excellent dose of Narcissus, Sarah :)


Author's Response: I see that I am reaping what I sow here, with that long lapse between updates. I am doing so many face palms right now, taking so long to update, because now the mentions of Rosalind aren't nearly as traceable to past hints in the story as they might have been otherwise. To reacquaint you, here's a snippet from Chapter Seven:

"You're trusting the house's judgment?" Ramien replied, sneering a little. "The house is cursed. It's evil. It doesn't want us to ever leave and it doesn't want us to break the spell. In my opinion, the fact that it's behaving so strangely is further proof that this go round, we've got it right. If you remember last time..."

The room went suddenly quiet.

"Well," Ramien continued carefully, "it didn't act this way. Nothing out of the ordinary happened. And obviously, that wasn't the right one. So here we are, years later, with another shot at it. I beseech you, Master, not to be selfish."

Rosalind is discussed more in-depth in the beginning of Chapter 15, although she is not called by name.

Thank you so much for returning to this story. It was your support on the TGS Purgatory thread that made me come back to update it, as your opinion largely influences how I write it and I did not want to disappoint you. Purgatory will be changing direction soon and delving into a different period of Narcissa's life, which I'm hoping to write very soon. I'm a bit excited about it and I hope you'll like it!


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Review #6, by x3CherryWatermelonx3 

3rd January 2012:
Another amazing chapter! I loved the idea of incorporating Tulia Malfoy.

As Narcissa wanted a different reunion with Lucius, I did too, but as long as they're reunited, I'm happy! :) Although I didn't like how they reunited, the scene was brilliantly executed. I do feel bad for Narcissa though in having to do that.

Can't wait for you to post up the next chapter! :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for continuing to read. :) Their reunion was tempered with quite a bit of tension, but they'll have better moments, I promise you.

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Review #7, by TenthWeasley 

3rd January 2012:
This was so worth the wait, I cannot evenÖ THERE IS SO MUCH LOVE FOR
♥ ♥ This was such a fabulous chapter that I am almost
hard-pressed to even begin to think that you put off writing it for so
long. It just came into existence with all those lovely words and the
action and drama (AND LUCIUS KISSING NARCISSA) and was just marvelous
from the onset.

That scene in the McKinnonsí house was so intense, and I was literally
gripping my phone so tightly sitting in the hallway outside English
this morning when I read it. I donít know how you do it, but you write
the /best/ action sequences ever, and they just make me squirm with
loving jealousy. I loved how you described the effects of the Mark,
too, because I think thatís exactly what it would have felt like, and
actually very similar to how Iíd planned to describe it later on. You
justÖ You have a remarkable way of getting into the heads of your
characters, and knowing them, and letting your readers know them, even
after a multiple month hiatus.

I loved Ė and hated Ė the brief moment between Andromeda and Narcissa,
because there was so much emotion there, and you didnít need to write
it explicitly for it to be felt. All the emotions in here were superb,
especially Lucius when he came into the house after Narcissa and
Travers had finished. Bittersweet and poignant and painstaking and
justÖ I am so impressed. There are no words to describe my love for
this chapter. It was magnificent, Sarah, truly magnificent, and even
that word doesnít begin to do it justice.

(Apologies for the senselessness of this review. Iím trying to do
better but your stories make it darn hard.) This was tops Ė nothing
less and probably more, but I canít find the words anymore. I am
speechless at your capabilities and cannot, cannot, cannot wait for
more. You are going so many places. :D ♥

Author's Response: Okay, I have reached the end of my coherency abilities, so here goes:

She looks on from her tree branch, talons and wings
and surveys a field of dandelion seeds.
She thinks to herself that somehow, somewhere
there exists half of her heart in the Dark Lord's lair; and she wishes, somehow, she could fly to there.
If only, if only, she thinks with a sigh, they could be reunited again without wands drawn to their sides,
without hindering loyalties or accusing cries
and Morsmordre igniting the somber skies.
If only, she dreams as she listens for him,
she could blow away into the restless wind
like the dandelion seeds,
every now and then
to be with the other half of her heart again.

That was fail but you love me anyway

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