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Review #1, by Debra20 

7th February 2013:
Hullo! I'm back for more of this wonderful, wonderful story. I believe that this chapter marked the middle of the tale and from now on, we'll go back in time, to Lily's own time.

Moody was SO sweet this chapter. When he rand and brought Lily a lily I positively "aw-ed". He is adorable! I really enjoyed reading him through all of his ages and this one, oddly enough, is my favourite. At this age he is still pure, still a child with all the innocence and easiness of spirit that childhood brings. He's still hopeful, he's still happy, he's still optimistic and curious. He doesn't know the atrocities of war yet, he doesn't know betrayal, he isn't hurt, damaged yet. It really makes me feel like crying imagining that this happens to real children in real life. When you bring them into the world, watch their serene faces and watch them grow, how can one imagine what they will become? The course they will take in life? Will they invent something grand? Will they make a breaking discovery? Or will they die prematurely or follow a self-destructing path?

Author's Response: Hello again! :D It's great to see you back for more!

Yes, Lily will head back toward her own time, though things get more complicated from this point, as you'll see.

Oh, I'm so glad that you liked the young Moody. He was a joy to write at this age, before any of the bad things happened - before he had to grow up in the midst of a world war. It's interesting that his youth here made the chapter more sad because we've already seen how he'll be at the end. It's not something everyone gets to see with a single person - it's rare to know a person from birth and live beyond their death, and even harder for a wizard, since they live longer. Like with Dumbledore, for instance, it's much harder to imagine his youth because it exists in a more distant past. And you can never be sure if the sparks of the future are there from the beginning, either. With Moody, there's little relation between the boy and the old man, and I can see how that's painful, for both you and Lily.

Wow. Thank you again for reading and reviewing! You've given me a lot to think about with this story, things that never occurred to me when writing. I love it when that happens!

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Review #2, by BellaCamille 

13th August 2012:
This is so brilliant! I wondered whether or not you would bring young Moody into this, and I'm so glad you did! This may have been my favorite chapter so far...

Author's Response: Oooh, favourite chapter! I wasn't that sure about it because writing children is /hard/, but it's a relief to hear that young Moody turned out so well. Thank you! ^_^

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Review #3, by Lillylover22 

12th May 2012:
Alastor as a child is so different 10/10 : )

Author's Response: Very different, I agree! It was a challenge to write him young because it's so distanced from canon knowledge - I had to make it up as I went, guessing the whole way. I'm glad you still liked it, though! :D

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Review #4, by Snapdragons 

28th February 2012:
My goodness, you've managed to break my heart in a chapter. Thanks a lot.

But it was heartbreaking. And, as Lily said, it made me realize what Moody must have felt during her first/his last meeting - one oblivious, the other knowing too much. Knowing what's in front of him, knowing what's going to happen without knowing if she'll ever see him again... D: Bah. This honestly is sort of tragic. ;=;

And little Moody was just adorable. You could see traces of who he'd become in him - but at the same time, he was missing the gruffness, the lack of trust, the scars. Just a child- a bright child, but a child nonetheless. His enthusiasm to help, the flower... gah. Alastor!

I love the timeline and how it has the parallel worlds sort of thing going on - seeing the man that Moody will become, seeing the woman that Lily's become. She's grown so much in such a short period of time - but then again, time here is relative, is it not? :P She's matured so much, and the character growth has been delightful.

And now... to the end. What's the end, I wonder? Again, bright side with being behind = not waiting for chapters. Success.

beautiful beautiful beautiful. Now on to the next!

Author's Response: *runs and hides*

Well, to be honest, I wanted this story to be very, very sad - the most romantic story I could write, which, for me, means tragically heartbreaking. I'm very sorry, but I couldn't be happier to hear that it's been a successful venture. ;)

This is oddly the happiest chapter of the story, mostly because of Moody's innocence - something that Lily simply doesn't have, even when she first meets Moody. He is pretty adorable, especially when he fetches the flower, which is probably what makes it more painful for Lily because she can't help but see what he will become each time she looks at him. I can't imagine how painful this chapter must have been for Lily - it doesn't come out that much in the narration, though it's starting to slip here with more fragmentation, etc. It's funny writing a first person narrative while knowing that my narrator is continuously keeping things back from me.

I'm really glad that you like the whole paralleling aspect of this story - it's the best part of the plotting for me, though it does make things complicated too, especially with characterization. I'm pretty much developing Moody backwards, writing his story from the end to the beginning, while Lily's goes from beginning to end. It's insane! But I love it, and I'm glad that you love it too. ^_^

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing again! These are so wonderful to read and respond to!

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Review #5, by justonemorefic 

13th January 2012:
Gah, if anyone could spin such wonderful growth packed into less than 24 hours worth of time, it would be you. Lily's changed so much now, and I wasn't sure how to describe how she must feel, but when I came upon this line, it is exactly what I wanted to say: "It hit me then, that terrible realisation that the future held nothing for me. I only had the past for solace and – dare I say it – for purpose." It's like Lily's built her past in a way. Whether or not she has things in the future, she has already affected the course of history, long long ago in Moody's time.

;_; He had waited so much longer for that final meeting, only to learn that I did not yet know him, that all of his waiting was for naught, or nearly so. Time had punished him most of all.

Bawww, little Moody is so adorable. The blue lily and I can just imagine him panting as he runs all the way back to her and being out of breath. “I thought the flower would help.” He took a breath. “Girls like those things.”

AHHH I had a suspicion, when Moody talked about the charm previously, that Lily would be the one to set it all up from the beginning. And now she's going back with the lily to July and AHHH.

-incoherent fleeing to the next chapter-

Author's Response: I often forget while writing this story that the timeline is so incredibly short. What was I thinking when I came up with this plot?! Blame it on Doctor Who again. That's the easiest excuse.

But I'm glad that it's working out so well for Lily's development. On her side, it's like she's lived all of those years of his life - very much along the lines of Einstein's theory of relativity. You're right in that she's built herself a past, forming history while also forming a place for herself within that past. It will be the most difficult thing for her once she returns to her own time. ;)

lol, writing children was just as difficult as I thought it'd be. Trying to think again like someone that age is hard without making them sound stupid (which they aren't at all - more in tune with the world than adults, in many cases). But little Moody definitely has a crush on Lily and he only knows how to express it in the most traditional way with the giving of the flower. It's so cute, and I'm glad that you liked it and him. ^_^

Oh, I'd forgotten just how much of the history she shapes in this chapter alone. I keep thinking back to this chapter as one in which not much happens, but a lot does - she figures out the cabinet, sets up the initial connection between herself and Moody, then from there, the previous parts of the story all develop. It's like writing a story going in both directions at once - from start to finish and from finish to start - and I keep forgetting and confusing things as I go.

Thank you again! Only one more chapter left for you, then it's bother, bother time, right? :P

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Review #6, by SunSation Gal 07 

5th January 2012:
Aww! He's so young! And he went and got her a flower. XD Sorry it took me so long to get to this chapter, Susan. School was not friendly to the things that I read. And now, onto the next chapter that I missed!

Author's Response: Isn't he cute as a child? I couldn't believe it at first that Moody could be like that, but why not - it's the experiences that came latter which transformed him.

No worries about the review - school's been eating me up, too, making it hard to write much less review. But this story has been too often on my mind, making me write more at a faster pace than I usually do.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! It's great to hear from you! :D

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Review #7, by ColiePhoenix 

30th November 2011:
This is such an interesting and unique idea for a story! I really like the mystery and suspense, it seems like you're pulling everything together really well. And Moody as a boy is very interesting- I like how you've portrayed him. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's been a fun challenge to keep the threads of this plot together, and I'm glad that you're enjoying the mystery throughout. Writing adult canon characters as children/adolescents is very awkward, but it's great that you like how Moody turned out here! ^_^

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