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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap 

25th May 2012:
Uh! Narcissa frustrates me but now I have another theory. So, it just seems to me that McNair is pure evil but could she be Circe? I still think it was the supposed muggle woman from before but I don't know...well, now I know that Gaspard really doesn't want Lucius to come out because Lucius could just sweep in and that would be the end to Gaspard's life as whatever-it-was-that-he's-supposed-to-become.

I kept screaming at Narcissa at this chapter. For such a smart young woman she's oblivious to what is right in front of her. Of course if she figured it out then the story would be over.

I love how she thinks of Lucius though. She accepts his pain as hers. Really jarring.

Author's Response: Macnair and Circe are both baddies, but not the same person, I assure you. They are, however, in cahoots. Margaret is completely separate; she's just an unfortunate victim.

Bahaha, Narcissa. For as smart as she is, like I told her earlier, she thinks she's a whole lot smarter. Which often leads to overestimating herself and thinking she knows all the ins and outs of what's going on around her.

Absence makes the heart grow fonder. :) So in other words, not seeing Lucius has given Narcissa some rose-colored memories of him.


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Review #2, by x3CherryWatermelonx3 

1st January 2012:
Another brilliant chapter, as always! :)

You know what, though? All the sympathy I had for Mrs. Macnair is absolutely gone. I don't think anyone would be able to change my mind. She must be like all of the evil witches in the fairytales combined. I'm almost convinced of it! Now that I think of it, I'm somewhat wondering if maybe she, herself, could be Circe. It seems a little farfetched, but at the same time it seems almost plausible. Hmm.

I must find out, and continue reading!

Author's Response: Mrs. Macnair is a great big ball of evil. She needed an excuse to be evil and it snowballed, and now she just enjoys it. I do love writing villains!

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Review #3, by halfbreed 

10th September 2011:
Again, just loving the enchanting fantasy of it all. I think her dreams/visions reveal so much about who she is, and they're an absolutely essential part of this. Her determination is empowering; and the best part is that it fits perfectly into the character mold you've so perfectly crafted for her. Your spot-on symbolism is rather creepy as well but utterly fascinating.

I love that Narcissa expresses Lucius' pain as hers, and that even though I think she might still be slightly skeptical of Circe (or maybe not, that's just the impression I was getting) she's recognizing that someone she cares about depends on her finding this elusive mythical person. I think Narcissa would go on to find Circe whether she believed she actually existed or not, just because she's so firm. Of course, that's just my interpretation of it; but in any case, I just love everything about Narcissa to pieces!

Author's Response: You got it spot-on: Narcissa is definitely skeptical of Circe. She's skeptical of everything she can't see with her own eyes, really. It's like when she first got trapped in the castle and was devising escape plans, talking about getting plenty of rest for "her long journey home to Wasteir". She doesn't accept no for an answer, and honestly, she's got blinders on. She doesn't really believe in the all-powerful and fantastical because she spends most of her time locked up inside her own head.

But, exactly like you said, Narcissa is determined. If there is the slimmest chance that Circe might be real, Narcissa is going to find her.

I'm so glad that you're interpreting Narcissa exactly like I'm trying to portray her. :)


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Review #4, by TenthWeasley 

7th August 2011:
Oh.

WHY IS THERE NOT MORE. I want to go on. And on, and on, and on...

Wilds is one of the most psychologically disturbed characters I've ever read, and I've really got to hand it to you for writing her so convincingly. She's absolutely and completely mental, but in a believable way so that she seems as real as a character in Harry Potter fan fiction ever could. I think she might possibly be my favorite character in this entire novel -- her or Lucius. It's a toss-up. :)

THE PAINTING. I have been watching it for so long, waiting for its significance and here it is! I am floored and creeped out at the same time, because WHAT. Wilda just exceeded her creepy level tenfold. *shudder*

And I am just going to say, I wanted to scream at Narcissa this whole chapter. :D "The window, the window! Go through the window!!!" Because you have crafted a Narcissa I want to scream at for her success, and that is no mean feat. :)

Also -- might Gaspard not make it to St. Mungo's in time? Pretty please?

I cannot describe my love for this story. If I could refacorite this a million times over, I would not hesitate. That is how deep my affection for it runs. *Skype wiggly-eared bear*

SO MUCH LOVE. Brilliant, brilliant, brilliant, brilliant. BRILLIANT.

Author's Response: THERE HOPEFULLY WILL BE MORE TODAY.

Those validators have been working very hard - a chapter from Fred/OC that I posted last night is now on page 10 of recently added. Which means that Sneth will post sooner than we thought, hopefully! (I wanted to put in a long 'ee' here to show my excitement but the editing thing kept changing it back to one 'e' and that looks stupid. BOO ON YOU, EDITOR)

I knew - I KNEW - that you would like Wilda because of her complexity. That is so /you/, to appreciate those villainous characters that everybody else loathes just because of her motivations. I think my favorite character in the story is Lucius, but I actually like Ramien as well.

GO TO THE WINDOW, NARCISSA! Baha. Oh Narcissa, you have no idea of the horrors that await you in the form of a little old lady.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.



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Review #5, by academica 

2nd August 2011:
Hey there!

Wow, Mrs. Macnair is very sinister. And what a surprise about Lucius's fateful accident with the piano! You've created quite an enemy for Narcissa here, and yet you've painted her in such a way that her actions don't seem entirely illogical, particularly when it comes to her concern for Charlie and the way she lives like she's part of the manor. I also love the idea of a girl preceding Narcissa at the manor, someone even more beautiful and talented than she. The difference, of course, is that Narcissa can learn to love the tormented Lucius, and that adds a new dimension of romance to this tale. And what will come of the woman in the portrait? You continue to entertain me with many twists and turns.

As always, your writing is fabulous. The paragraph about Malfoy Manor being a disease that wiped out all of Narcissa's former common sense, one that she readily embraced, really hit me hard. The addition of Little Hangleton and the Deathly Hallows symbol provides an new dimension that I'm very interested to explore in your new chapter.

Still totally loving the way you're writing the ship. Lucius and Narcissa are miles apart, but the way you write them, it's like they never left one another's side. I'm very curious about how Lucius's canon personality might (or might not) be eventually altered by the acts of kindness attempted by Narcissa in this story.

Great work, though I expected no less. Update soon, love! :)

academica

Author's Response: Thank you!

I view Mrs. Macnair as a rather evil old woman, selfish and entitled, who feels very powerfully intimidated by Narcissa. She is desperate for everything to remain as it had been in years past, for the same people to stay together forever. She can't afford for anyone to destroy this future she designed in her head, one where all of them would be happy as ghosts. One where she would always be with Charlie. But as I just said in response to another review, Mrs. Macnair is not doing Charlie any favors by keeping him bound the the spell. The dead do not belong with the living. She's selfish and her rationality is slipping away.

The woman in the portrait! There are many hints in the past several chapters. ;) If you look carefully at all the clues, you'll realize immediately who she is.

I'm excited to write this next chapter - I think, more excited than I've ever been about any of the others so far. I won't say any more than that, but I can't wait to see what you think of it. :)

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Your reviews are awesomesauce.



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Review #6, by TheHeirOfSlytherin 

2nd August 2011:
"The corridors of Malfoy Manor will run red with the remains of Narcissa Malfoy" Was that meant to be Narcissa Black? Or were you preparing us for the happy ending? ;)

Left Pravus for Malfoy and raised her second son, Lucius? Does...does that make Lucius and Gaspard... Brothers??? If so, that's horrible? Poor Lucius, to be related to... Him! >.<

I know she's doing this all for Charlie, but I don't like Mrs Macnair! I really hope the others find out it was her who hurt Lucius. She needs to be stopped!

10/10!

Until the next chapter...! ^_^

Sam.

Author's Response: OMGAHH. Thank you for catching that!

Ha. I am so used to thinking of her as Narcissa Malfoy because of the books, that I make that typo constantly. And this time it slipped through my editing. So thank you again, for catching that!

Mrs. Macnair is a woman with evil intentions that can be seen in a forgiving light, if that makes any sense. She does it for Charlie, but more for herself. If she really loved Charlie, she would want him to be able to go on, with the rest of the dead. Keeping him trapped in a castle in a world in which he does not belong is granting him no favors. She's a very bad person.

And yes, this means that Lucius and Gaspard are brothers! Which might explain why Mrs. Macnair chose Gaspard's mining camp to install the enchanted mirror, and why he wanted to prevent Narcissa from going back to Malfoy Manor. Gaspard is less than fond of his brother.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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