Reading Reviews for Purgatory , Chapter 10: Skill
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Review #1, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap 

25th May 2012:
As far as I'm concerned, Andromeda is dead

^ I didn't expect you to include that into the story. Andromeda getting married and being disowned I mean. I figured once Narcissa got out she would want to see her father and her sisters, moreso Andromeda than Bellatrix because she's never around but I was wrong.

The way she described him this time was much more calming to me. I didn't think he was a scary figure but more of an eerie one which is silly, I know.

I thought no one could come into the house and then leave it? How could that person apparate into the house and then vanish?!

Author's Response: Until this point, Narcissa's main goal is to get back home. If she's preoccupied with getting back home, her heart's not really going to be in the here and now and there is no chance of her breaking the spell. So she had to see Andromeda's marriage as a betrayal, to make her not care about going back anymore.

Eerie is good. :) This was around the time I was trying to transition Lucius from beast to man.

That one person is a mysterious individual who cannot be trusted. I shall say no more!


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Review #2, by x3CherryWatermelonx3 

31st December 2011:
Absolutely loved this chapter! The Andromeda part...the man couldn't possibly Ted Tonks, could it? Or was it someone to pay off everything they had owed? Hmm.

I also loved the part where she actually took the time with Lucius, and finally answered his question. I can't wait to read the next chapter! :)

Author's Response: Yep, that was Ted Tonks!


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Review #3, by halfbreed 

9th September 2011:

Everything about this story, and this chapter in particular, makes me want to keep reading forever and ever. So many beyond creepy things laced in with the lights of discovery. It's just so... intriguing. If there could be one word to describe this story, that would be it. Though of course, that still couldn't do it justice.

I admit the wedding part at the beginning seemed really weird? Like it was almost out of place. But then of course, you made it fit by having the anger affect Narcissa's observable behavior, and the scene became a definite part of the story. But I like that we're learning more about her family, and that it's also kind of like the Beauty and Beast mirror thing. I'm a bit confused by it, sure, but that's sure going to keep me reading. And I'm happy to be delving further into Narcissa and Andromeda's relationship.

I'll take a minute or two to say how wonderful Narcissa is. I was definitely not expecting what was revealed in this chapter, but I have to say it does fit very nicely. She likes thinking; I grinned at that. I like that you're reconciling the Narcissa we met at the beginning who was absolutely determined and the Narcissa from the carriage ride who could manipulate so easily with the Narcissa stuck in a cursed castle who can think things through as much as she wants, but still be caught by surprise. This was like a huge coming-together chapter for her. And she's so awesome. Like... really, really awesomely awesome.

And now I must go on reading because the suspense is killing me!

Author's Response: Ahh, the wedding. The wedding symbolizes the end of Narcissa's intense desire to go home. There was no hope that she would want to stay at the Manor for any reason at all if she thought her family was waiting for her at home. Therefore, in order to sever that loyalty to her family (and to her sister, since she needed a canon reason to stop talking to Andromeda altogether), Andromeda had to get married. But you couldn't have failed to notice Andromeda's somber attitude during the ceremony, which is something Narcissa would likely gloss over in her own thoughts. Narcissa has a certain ignorance about her - she lives inside her own mind, her own wants and needs, and doesn't always recognize the motivations of others and why people do the things that they do. In my mind, Andromeda married Ted not just because she loved him, but because she needed to. I will elaborate on this later in the story. Which is to say - you will definitely see Andromeda again.

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Review #4, by TenthWeasley 

7th July 2011:
YES. This was excellent; all I asked for and more, and I don't think I could have been more thrilled with how this chapter turned out. Excellent, excellent work as always, but then I expect no less from you.

I think that what you had Narcissa see in the pool was excellent, and a really good insight into her character to boot. What she wanted most was to see her family, but sometimes what we want most isn't always what's best for us, and she was obviously hurt by the knowledge offered. With good reason, of course. But that's showing a bit of the Slytherin in her - heady, leaping before looking, even a bit arrogant, should we go so far. I enjoyed that; she's becoming more a person, less a character.

And LUCIUS. SO great -- exactly what I was talking about. He is so much more real now, and you've started hinting toward his past as a human, which furthers that. He is more flesh, less fantasy, if that makes any sense. We are beginning to see him in a new light, and I think that this was a good point to include that. Keeps people reading!

The shadows were my favorite part of this by far, though. It continually astonishes me how your mind can come up with such twisted, clever things, and make me actually invest emotions in them. Not going to lie -- they scared me a bit, and I don't think I'm too far wrong in supposing that was at least one of their intended effects. BRILLIANT. Truly -- I loved that bit.

Narcissa and Lucius need babies in the next chapter, please. :)

AND CLIFFHANGER LIKE WHOA. You'd better have a good next chapter planned, one worth the wait, since you are MAKING me wait. WHO WAS IT. I must know!!

Amazingamazingamazing. I need to come and seek you out in person just to shake you and yell praises at you, for then maybe you will understand the depth of my love for this story. CONTINUE SOON. Or I shall send the nargles.




That french fry is cold.
There are toys in the training potty.
Some mulch can look like mold.
Chicken pox makes you spotty.


I LOVE YOU SO MUCH!!! Your reviews are amazing and I want to hug them.

-le squish-

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Review #5, by academica 

6th July 2011:
I really enjoyed this chapter. Your description of Lucius through Narcissa's eyes is perhaps the best example yet of your exquisite talent for imagery, and I am impressed with the way that you saved it until this point in the story instead of just giving it away at the outset. It's touching to watch the two of them slowly growing to trust one another. Great work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I figured that I should start getting them the friendlier stages, and I hope you like how it continues from here!

Thank you once again for your very kind reviews, and for consistently reading this story. I always love hearing your opinions about chapter updates.


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