6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by dirtydeedsdonedirtcheap 

25th May 2012:
It moved like water, tinkling in my ears and drowning out the rapid clicks of the grandfather clock's pendulum.

^ OH. Your description is just so moving and riveting and just WONDERFUL. Everything Narcissa describes I can see. Well, everything you describe I can see. It's amazing how you write her. Her thoughts, her action, her fluidity. Everything is just perfect.

I was terrified when we met Lucius, the description of him, how he acted. He didn't even appear menancing to me but just for that one moment when she first laid eyes on him I shudder.

And then window, throwing the chair! So Narcissa! And yet so not Narcissa! I can't even say who Narcissa is because I think she'll do one thing, say one thing or act a certain way and she goes in the opposite direction of what I was expecting.

Oh this is beautiful. I literally want to save this in my google docs so I can read this story forever.

Author's Response: Narcissa's a bit of a wild card. She's clever, but she thinks she's a whole lot more clever than she actually is, so it tends to lead to trouble. She also has this thing where she thinks that if she just tries hard enough, she will always get her way.

Lucius is creepy. Definitely not a looker.

Eee, saving it in your google docs. That is such a lovely compliment! It might sound strange of me to say that, but it just makes me very happy to hear.

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Review #2, by x3CherryWatermelonx3 

30th December 2011:
As always, a wonderful chapter! Lucius Malfoy, the same as always. I cannot wait until things change, and they begin a romance! :)

Author's Response: Romance is in the air! ~ Tis coming soon, I promise, although you already know that because I'm answering your reviews all in one go one month later.


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Review #3, by halfbreed 

9th September 2011:
Oh, I so love him. And it makes me very, very happy that he's not all furry or a wolf-bear-whatever-thing because I always thought that was a rather obvious take on "beast." I like yours much better.

I think you've done Lucius very well and OH I just remembered how much I absolutely adore the piano bit. Holy toast, can you say moving? Your writing is so emotional already, but that scene was just... phenomenal. Seriously, I cannot describe how utterly fantastic it all was. The way she was drawn in was especially superb.

And I love that he's rejecting her right off the bat saying "It is not this one" and being all stubborn, like he thinks someone better has to come along eventually. Narcissa's got her work cut out for her, hasn't she?

As a random side note, I bet this story makes other fairy tales cry because they could never be this awesome.

Author's Response: Lol, the last line of your review made me laugh. And squee. And also itch to write a new chapter. Woo!

Ha, Lucius, you're such a fail. NO ONE ELSE IS COMING ALONG. I mean, this guy's been waiting for ages for a woman to stumble along and break the spell, and now his pride's all I SHALL REJECT HER BEFORE SHE REJECTS ME. -___-

Sigh. Men.

The glass piano was something that popped into my mind and was only meant to be a minor detail. As you know, it grew in importance. I think it's amusing how my plot points seem to work that way - tiny details snowball and eclipse other plot points I added here and there that were supposed to become meaningful but were somehow left behind. And because of that, I have several foreshadowing bits that will turn into loose ends. I'll have to do a mass edit of this story when it's all finished and posted...

Yeah, I'm not a fan of furry beast. I think he can be every bit as creepy as a bear-wolf-thingy while still being human. Undead-looking Lucius is freaky enough to still be categorized as a beast, so I'm satisfied with it.

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Review #4, by TenthWeasley 

23rd June 2011:

So, Lucius has now officially become my favorite character in this story -- simply because of the inventive way you have spun him. I didn't expect him to take the form of the Beast from the original story, but neither did I expect him to take the form you've given him. His skin, his eyes, his teeth... I could not have come up with a more beastly and frightening character myself, and he more than meets the requirements you need his character to serve. I thoroughly congratulate you on that -- that is just GOOD writing, plain and simple.

Another thing I really commend you (and I've done before) on is just how different this story is. Yes, it's taken bits and pieces from numerous fairy tales - Beauty and the Beast, Rapunzel - but you have sprinkled your own web of story-telling over these timeless tales. It's as though you've meshed right along with them, adding your own bits. The glass piano, for example - one of my favorite scenes yet in the story. And you still keep elements of JK Rowling's world, too, like the portraits - I can imagine that's not easy to do. You have an incredible literary balance here, and it casts a magic of its own.

You've hooked me deep into the story, and I'm only sad I'm about to reach the end of the string of chapters you've set up for me. I am curious as to how you mean to get Lucius and Narcissa together (for indeed, they have to be together!), for at this point in the story I cannot imagine a more unlikely pair.

I'm trying to find new things to comment on, and not keep repeating the same old tosh in every review, but I just can't get over certain things. Every time I click onto the next chapter, you surprise me in more and better ways, and that's a real treat as a reader. This story deserves way more attention than it's been getting, that's for sure! I cannot wait to go on to the next chapter, and after that, wait impatiently for updates.

Love you!! This is truly incredible - I've said it before and I'll say it again, you have enviable talent.

Author's Response: We have arrived at the point in time when I can only respond to your ultra-lovely reviews that mean so much to me with poetry.


Why'd it take so long to see the light
Seems so wrong but it seems so right
What a lady, what a night.

Okay, so I can't take credit for that because it's a song that I'm listening to.

It was either that or Taio Cruz.





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Review #5, by academica 

6th June 2011:
I simply can't get enough of your story, and I'm especially excited to continue reading now that Lucius and Narcissa have finally met one another. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you!! I'm quite excited to begin the Lucius/Narcissa, and to tell his side of the tale.

Thank you for reading. :)

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Review #6, by TheHeirOfSlytherin 

4th June 2011:
*In answer to Lucius' last words* Yes. Yes, it is. ;)

I love this story more and more every time a new chapter is up. This is amazing; so well written and true to character. Or, at least, as true as you can have it... This is AU, isn't it? I don't remember.

Not that it really matters. Can't wait for the next chapter!


Author's Response: Yep, this is sort of AU. Or rather, it is a different way of telling the same story. Sort of. It's confusing.

Thank you for saying you think it is well written and true to character. That is a huge relief to know you think so! I wasn't exactly sure how to write Narcissa, and she is starting to grow on me, but I wasn't sure what the readers would think of her.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate it enormously. :)

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