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3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by BL33DiiNxH3ARTZ 

9th April 2011:
Good good goood!!! A little rushed but I like it, try to slow it down and it'll be perfect(:

Btw mind reading my story, Getting Away with Murder? I'll read your next chapter after I'm done with this...If you read my story tell me what you think thanks so much!!!(:

Lexie xxx

Author's Response: Ok i'll try to find it. :)

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Review #2, by Victoria LH 

5th April 2011:
Too bad we can't really do that! Enjoyed the story! 8/10

Author's Response: thanks. I wish we could do that to.

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Review #3, by Ali 

5th April 2011:
i wanted to like this story but could not do it. the writing really needs work because right now your story is VERY rushed, if it continues at this pace it will finish by chapter 3! i do not want to bash your story entirely, the idea really is appealing, but i think there are quite a few areas you can improve in. i think it would be best to start with spelling Gryffindor correctly! i think your writing could improve dramatically by allowing your characters to have emotions and not just be happy or sad. an example of this is when harry was dying and the only word he used, concerning his feelings towards friendship, was happy. this is all i have to say for now, but i hope my criticism is helpful and you understand where i am coming from.

Author's Response: thanks for the advice! I hope the next chapter will be up soon and that i will get there fellings across better. and that I can spell gryffindor right, I think i was spelling it right, but my spell check said that it was not right and that was what it changed to so sorry about it.

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