7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by DougA 

27th September 2017:
Not bad for the first chapter of your first fan fiction.I did think it felt a little rushed, with a lot going on in a short span. I imagine the quartet having a lot more injuries then just bruises and scratches. Harry in particular should be pretty banged up. He had been up since Shell Cottage, had the whole bank robbery and escape incident, then the battle, which included him being "killed" and having the cruciatus curse used on him several times, with his body being tossed in the air.

Still, it is a good start, although I feel you should have taken a little more time with it. And Ron letting Ginny into the Boy's Dorm, without so much as a peep, or visible injury/bat bogey gives a pretty good indication that he is OK now with the idea of Harry and Ginny together.

Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I always appreciate feedback, including constructive feedback! I realise that this story is rushed at the beginning. This was obviously a while back and I was just getting into writing. I hope you will continue reading this story as it does improve! (At least in my opinion) ;)

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Review #2, by FriendofMolly 

2nd August 2012:
I was very excited when I read the preview. I found a couple of things that bothered me. Your spelling and other grammatical errors take away from the story. The end of the chapter. You have Harry and friends lowering themselves to Riddles level of cruelty. I wonder if Harry would rather just cremate the remains after having select group of trusted people to verify Riddles death. But this is your story. I'll read some more.

Author's Response: Thanks FriendofMolly.
I realise the ending was cruel so I will change that soon and I think your idea is a bit better. So thank you for reviewing and the criticism.

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Review #3, by PotterBlack7201 

1st August 2012:
Very interesting thoughts on how to get revenge.Can't wait to see what is next.

Author's Response: Thanks PotterBlack7201. I am not sure if 'interesting' is good or not. :) If it is bad don't worry i'm going to change it. thank you for reviewing.

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Review #4, by Holly 

24th January 2012:
The part about Voldemorts body was a bit much, but I liked the rest of it.

Author's Response: Thanks Holly,
Yes after I wrote it I decided it was a bit much too. But don't worry nothing will ever happen with that.


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Review #5, by Billie Joe <3 

6th April 2011:
OMG!!!I Love this story most ppl have harry gush his feelings out in like 20 paragraphs but u make like able to understand him and get the piont acrosss and still b harryish:) keppp it up:)

Author's Response: thankyou. I will get the next chapter up ASAP. I hope I can continue to keep it so you can understand him. :)

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Review #6, by Lilly 

5th April 2011:
i loved it really good!

Author's Response: thankyou i appreciate it.

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Review #7, by That_Nerd 

5th April 2011:
Well, this is definitely a good idea! There are really good parts (in the death room), but then there are some spelling errors. It has real potential! Keep writing, I'm going to check for the next chapter!!

Author's Response: Thankyou. I will try to fix the spelling errors. And I will probably get the next chapter up today or tommorow. :)

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