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Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

30th March 2011:
I can't imagine losing my mom like that. It brings tears to my eyes just thinking about it

Great chapter very well written and now i'm off to the next one!

ONLY ONE MORE Hufflepuff chapter to go!!!

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Review #2, by 1917farmgirl 

15th August 2010:
Okay, wow. Just wow! I'm a bit blown away by this. Firstly, I haven't read many of the collab pieces. I haven't had the time and there are SO many of them, but I'm so glad I clicked on this one.

I love how you focus on characters we know, but also character that don't get much spotlight. (And I might be wrong, but do I sense a little bit of Hufflepuff pride coming out in those choices? Kudos to you if that's true, and that's coming from a died in the wool Gryffindor.) It is so easy to forget when reading about that Battle that there were more than just Harry and the trio and Weasleys and Gryffindor's fighting. It was truly a joint effort of everyone fighting who believed in freedom and such. Bravo on bring that point out.

I also liked how you didn't mince words about what would be happening in the aftermath of a battle like that. Ernie was happy they won, but also very aware of the cost.

The subtle touches of magic were great. You brought it in (conjuring the towel, etc.) which so many people forget to do, but you didn't draw attention to it. It was normal, which is as it should be for this setting.

I loved your background for Ernie. I'm not sure if that's canon or not, but it was wonderfuly thought out and very moving. Well done.

Finally, the twist at the end. WOW! Talk about shocker! Not much in these battle stories can surprise me as there's only so many roads to go, but you manged it. Heartwrenchingly so.

Thanks for writing a great piece.

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Review #3, by propertyoftheHBP 

15th August 2010:
I didn't see the end of this coming at all--I was very surprised to find out it was Ernie's mother, but I much prefer being surprised in a story than to know everything that happens, so good job there. I really liked this--I thought that all of the characters were in character, and Ernie's thoughts were as I'd expect them to be in that situation as well, especially his shock and hesitance at everything. I really like the title, as well. (I did notice a canon difference; in Chamber of Secrets, Ernie boasts that he's a ninth-generation pureblood when all of the attacks are going on, so the bit about his Muggle father is off. Regardless, as a slightly AU piece, I still liked the touch that it added and was something different to see.)

Overall, this was a great piece that I enjoyed quite a bit. Good work! :)

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Review #4, by DemetersChild 

14th August 2010:
Good grief. Chills all over. I really enjoyed this story, as sad as it was.

Some might expect him to be a bit more dramatic, but I think with everything that had already gone on, this was the perfect way for him to react. He knew that she wouldn't live so he couldn't beg for that. He just wanted her to know he loved her. Beautiful.


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Review #5, by AndrinaBlack 

14th August 2010:
This is a really sad story and you wrote it so well. My heart was just breaking for him at the end. What's also great about the story is that I wasn't expecting the end at all. I just thought that it was showing the confusion about his emotions. That was also very well done. Ernie is at the same time proud about his success and happy that they won, but he knows so many died that he feels that he should feel sad about that and then at the same time he is so confused that he has trouble focusing at the tasks he should do. (No emotions for a teaspoon :P) And then at the end comes the big blow, when I could really feel his hurt. I'm glad Hannah is there for him. Once again; you did a really great job with the story.

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