6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by In The Shadows I Dwell 

20th August 2010:
A very interesting account of the affects of the Killing Curse, the fact that your unnamed narrator remained on but for a brief while following their experience with the curse is interesting, as I'd assume each person is different.

However, despite not knowing who exactly this person is we are able to gain a sense of what the curse itself actually does, yes, it kills, but what it does between that moment it is released to the moment it actually snuffs the life from another human being. I must say that your take on this was very interesting and intriguing and made me wonder about the others who experienced this also, and how really barely anyone could have prepared themselves to face such a curse.

This was a well-written piece that really provided a very different take on the curse we think we all know, but in the end, barely any of us know what it truly does to a person, whether it hurts, whether it doesn't. This piece provided a unique insight into what one of these answers could be. Keep up the great work!

- Ashlee

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Review #2, by maskedmuggle 

19th August 2010:
Wow. This is amazing! There's a sense of mystery because we don't know who this person is - i would love to know. But it fits in with the story.

The idea of your story, "Until The World Stopped" is great, and your ending lines were really powerful.

I love the way you write, it was fascinating to read, made me engaged, and made me want to know more. It's just really well written. I really enjoyed this! :)

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Review #3, by theelderwand 

19th August 2010:
I liked this OC, Lunalike, but so much more fragile, brave, but delicate. Such a horrible thing the way she died, but couldn't move on and became a ghost.

I really liked the wistful way you wrote the begining, with you OC's discussion of how much the killing curse hurt. She almost spoke of it off-handedly. I liked that; it was a great flourish.

Good work!


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Review #4, by propertyoftheHBP 

14th August 2010:
This was really interesting. I like how we don't know who she is, it adds to the mystery and tragedy of it. What I found cool in the beginning was how the Killing Curse was described as far from painless. It's an interesting concept, to say the least. (Because, really, your character brings up a good point. How would they know that it's not painless?) I also like how she's telling this as a ghost--that's what she was, right?--I haven't seen it before in the collab, it's definitely original. The entire piece was a really good description of how an inexperienced student would feel in the battle, I really really liked that.

I liked the whole piece! It was well-written and very enjoyable, if sad. (Which is, I'm sure, what it's meant to be. ;])

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Review #5, by witch_in_training 

14th August 2010:
Nice idea to throw out there that maybe the Killing Curse isn't so painless. No one would ever know, would they? All the victims, save Harry, aren't exactly able to talk about it, and he was a baby the first time he felt it. Both times it did hit him, though, we saw that he had an injury as a result -- first a scar, then his chest was aching.

I like how the title appears in the text, followed by the words "For me." Also, it's kind of sweet that she couldn't bring herself to blame him for killing her in the spirit of the battle. I wonder if some of the characters did feel that way, like it was inevitable and whoever cast the final curse was just doing what they had to.

This was a nice little piece, I'm glad I read it. :)

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Review #6, by Northumbrian 

14th August 2010:
And so Hogwarts gains another ghost. the question that intrigues me, however, is who? are we supposed to be able to guess? Bushy hair is mentioned, but this is not Hermione, the words "Nope, still here, too bloody cowardly to move on" prove that, so who? The girl everyone snubbed - Eloise Midgen. Please tell me I'm right.

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