5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by In The Shadows I Dwell 

20th August 2010:
It's interesting that the choices one makes can define them so greatly in the Sorting Ceremony, yet we see examples of this all the time, just because you are necessarily family does not mean you have to be in the same house and I liked how this tied in with this story and how the narrator's sister was placed under the pressure to be the perfect Slytherin where as he was placed within Ravenclaw. I particularly liked how this did not define them or affect them, the worry he feels for his sister is rather sweet.

She too seems to be a rather interesting character her strength and determination seems to be a real strength, however she is fighting for good rather than evil which was a really interesting point. If their parents saw them as two ready made servants to the Dark Lord it's interesting that they would so openly oppose this. Interesting seeing the bold side of her that leaves her with the desire to defend her home so strongly despite being underage.

This was a very interesting piece which raised and answered many questions in regards to where one's loyalties lie and I really enjoyed reading it, the writing was perfect for the characters, well thought and perfectly organised for the impact it had.

Keep up the good work!

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Review #2, by maskedmuggle 

19th August 2010:
I really liked this! I wonder who you had in mind when you narrated this. It was really well written, and a very enjoyable read!

The only thing I don't get is the ending. The narrator saw his/her sister, fighting, so why did he keep on examining the rubble? Apart from that, everything was really clear, and the story flowed really well. I really love this. It's just a whole different perspective, and it's really well written! :)

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Review #3, by theelderwand 

19th August 2010:
Sad, very sad. It never ocurred to me that there must be many many more students who had Sirius' problem. Students who were thought to be destined for Slytherin, but found an escape to one of the other houses. This would've been exceptionally hard for them once the Battle started, especially if their parents and/or families were part of the attacking army.

But worst of all, it seems the only family member you OC could relate to is the one who's body he's now searching for: his sister.

Striking tale.


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Review #4, by propertyoftheHBP 

14th August 2010:
What I really liked about this was how we were never explicitly told--or did I miss something?--who the main character and his sister are, if they're even canon characters. I thought that the scenario they had found themselves in was extremely realistic, too, with their parents expecting them to be Death Eaters but they're not, being in Ravenclaw and being an oddly matched Slytherin, and such. I also liked how the end wasn't cut-and-dry clear, it left things up to the imagination.

Overall, I think that this was an original piece that you wrote very interestingly and well. Good job! :D

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Review #5, by Northumbrian 

14th August 2010:
I love this story.
I'm going to reread it to try to figure out how you give so much information in so few words. Two well-rounded characters portrayed quickly and easily, the Ravenclaw and his Gryffindor sister who are obviously a disappointment to their family.
Ah - I'm reading these stories from the last submitted and working up. your next story is a sequel. :(

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