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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

1st April 2011:
Great Chapter i enjoyed reading it and now off to the next one

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Review #2, by melian 

21st August 2010:
Well, that was an interesting perspective. While I've read the POV of people from Hogsmeade before, never have I seen one that had the person deciding NOT to go and fight. I think she was wrong in that she would have been welcomed, her role in Dumbledore's death notwithstanding, but if she really did feel that way and that her role was to provide food and drinks and shelter for the survivors, then I can accept that. I liked the moving tapestry idea, too - reminded me of the Bayeaux (sp?) tapestry from 1066 though with your own flourishes. Excellent job!

cheers, Mel

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Review #3, by Capella Black 

21st August 2010:
I love the imagery of this piece - the entended simile of the tapestry. And that's saying something, because I'm not the biggest fan of extended imagery unless done very well. But this works - the concept of how some faces would change, while others would be "frozen" - a great choice of word by the way; it really captures the concept of those lost without being melodramatic.

I also like how you discuss her guilt - having her logically aware that she should forgive herself, yet unable to do so. This whole story is wonderfully complex in its treatment of the issues the character would be facing, but never more so than in looking at her guilt, and how it holds her back.

Lovely choice of POV, and nicely written one shot.

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Review #4, by the odd one 

15th August 2010:
Cool I love the tapestry idea reminds me of the one in Xanth Very well written

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Review #5, by ericajen 

14th August 2010:
I like your take on Madam Rosmerta. Her emotions were kind of like a sequence and it flowed easily throughout the story. The entire thing was well written and enjoyable to read. Her thoughts were intriguing and captivating. The guilt she felt for the things she did while under the Imperius curse was tangible.

Job well done to you.

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Review #6, by maskedmuggle 

14th August 2010:
Wow. This was so very interesting, and so well written!

The images of the people, how some change, and how some stay still, and others still, are unknown to her was a good touch. It's so sad that she feels guilt :( I liked how you ended it. "They all had their parts to play, and this was hers." A nice ending.

I don't have any criticisms, and its hard to describe exactly what about your story makes it so good. But your story is good!

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