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Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

1st April 2011:
Great Chapter i enjoyed reading it and now off to the next one

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Review #2, by Capella Black 

21st August 2010:
Another great entry to the collaboration! I particularly like the way you deal with the action sequence of Stewart's apparation - the reader is pulled into believing it's going to end in horror, and then only little by little do we realise it's gone ok, largely at the same time as Colin does. This really adds tension to the story, and so makes us all the more relieved when he comes out of it unscathed.

Final line is of course wonderfully ironic, in the saddest possible way. Still, it's nice to think that though Colin didn't make it, he did help save these other kids, and did go down fighting.

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Review #3, by melian 

20th August 2010:
You darn Ravenclaws, always promoting your House in this collab! Joking, joking. Though, where was the hourglass?

House rivalries aside, I thought this was a great depiction of Colin in the battle, and I'd like to thank you for not showing us his death. I've read that far too many times already. Instead, you focused on what he'd learned from Harry, and that conversation in the Hogs Head would of course be something that someone like Colin would remember, even though I'd forgotten it completely. When you worship someone you remember everything they tell you.

Stewart (Ackerley?)'s Apparition I thought was hilarious, how he assumed he'd splinched himself because it was all so uncomfortable. I won't ask how he managed to do it at Hogwarts when the bans are supposed to be up, because I have a feeling that all those bans and wards were nullified during the battle for some reason. :) A nice touch too that none of the kids knew how to cast a Stunner. Small, but telling.

Great job, Penny. But you don't need me to tell you that, do you?

cheers, Mel

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Review #4, by propertyoftheHBP 

15th August 2010:
Oh, it's so nice to read a piece about Colin where he's not killed. :) (Of course, I know he is at some point in the battle, but at least not in this little snippet of time.) I really liked this. In most pieces I read about him, he's usually portrayed still as a little boy, but here you've really showed his growth as a person in five years' time. I love how he was elected to leader of the group, because from what I can see here he really deserves it. I loved the part where Stewart basically performs a miracle, it's in the true spirit of the DA.

I loved this! Fabulous job. :)

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