5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

31st March 2011:
Yay for arthur and his role in the battle. Great Chapter i enjoyed reading it and now off to the next one

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Review #2, by Northumbrian 

22nd August 2010:
Arthur the quet man turns into Arthur the leader, Arthur the Paladin. Gread title by the way. I have visions of "the once and future king" in this story. The way Arthur takes control seems so natural. His orders are to hold for as long as possible, and we know that he will.
I'm really impressed by this story, because so many stories make arthur a bumbling buffoon. As he once told Harry, 'you're talkign to the man who raised Fred and George.'

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Review #3, by Capella Black 

21st August 2010:
Aww, Mellie, you sure can write! This piece is excellent - tense, real, and compelling without the use of major plot twists.

In particular, I really loved your use of dialogue in this piece. The short, clipped, often emotionless phrases really amped up the tension, while the occasional aspect of what they clearly didn't say showed how strained they all felt, and how responsible for the younger individuals fighting with them. I also like how you used said dialogue to evolve the battle plan, with the parents and teachers being the ones to recommend every student leaves, while the younger adults and tacticians push for wider inclusion. That was exactly right for the story, and helped to capture the conflicting pressures perfectly.

Great stuff!

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Review #4, by theelderwand 

17th August 2010:
Now, Mel, somewhere in my travels, I seem to recall you saying that strategy and the like wasn't somthing you were able to write. After reading this awesome lost moment from DH, I beg to differ.

You know action/adventure is my game and this was one of the best strategy pieces I've ever read, and I've read a lot.

That said, the heartfelt moments contained within were just great: Arthur being so happy that the family was back together, tempered with the realization that, of the 10 of them, at least one might not come back. Wrenching.

And at the end it all seems so hopeless. They're outnumbered six to one and being attacked on two sides. Arthur show's his Gryff courage, remaining steady before the hammer falls.

I loved the ending: "We wait."

Excellent stuff here!


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Review #5, by ericajen 

11th August 2010:
Amazing, Mel. As always. You really got inside Arthur's mind for this one and I think you captured his character brilliantly and brought him to life in this piece. It was a pleasure to beta it for you(:

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