6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

31st March 2011:
horray Rose survived! Great Chapter i enjoyed reading it and now off to the next one

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Review #2, by Northumbrian 

22nd August 2010:
A nicely drawn young Original Character and a nicely written peice about the confusion of the battle. The only this I'd say is that, in my opinion, Hermione would introduce herself as Hermione Granger, and she would not bother mentioning that she's a Gryffindor.
Otherwise, very good.

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Review #3, by Capella Black 

20th August 2010:
Awww, I'm so glad she made it! This is a really bittersweet piece, as she finally makes friends with Owen, only to lose him, and then his final words are actually the saving of her. I love how you take this completely minor character (is she even mentioned other than during her sorting), and make us care about her.

This is also a original concept in that you don't have your main character actually fighting in the battle. While for an older student, this might seem cowardly or weak, for a younger one, it is enough of a battle simply to try and survive, and so we don't begrudge her the actions she chooses. Nice choice of topic, and well written too.

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Review #4, by propertyoftheHBP 

18th August 2010:
I really liked this, especially because it was centered around minor characters. Both Rose and Owen were written well, character-wise, though I have to admit that I was always silently grumbling at Owen because he'd made fun of Rose because she was a Muggleborn...yes, that bothers me quite a bit, but it was a good choice for his character on your part. It's always nice when I can dislike a character because s/he's more like a real person than a Sue/Stu. The enchanted ladder idea was utter genius--I can definitely see something like that being at Hogwarts and it boggled with my mind as well as Rose's. :) And what I loved most of all was how Hermione found Rose--could her future daughter's name have anything to do with that? :-) I really liked this, it was an original idea with a lot of original things within the story!

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Review #5, by theelderwand 

16th August 2010:
I never would have thought of the battle from the perspective of one of the kids that got left behind by mistake. Rather terrifying actually. Poor Rose.

The ladder was exceptionally creative, I really liked that flourish. But the best touch has to be that this Rose must've been Hermione's inspiration to name her daughter Rose. I liked that alot

Good work!


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Review #6, by CornishPixie 

16th August 2010:
Wow, how interesting to see the fight happen from an OC's perspective. And someone who hadn't WANTED to be left behind like that. You'd think that the teachers would want to be a bit more careful about making sure they got all the underagers out to the Hog's Head, but they really hadn't that much time, had they?

I really enjoyed this chance you gave me to see the kind of comaraderie that comes about in a time like this. These two kids hadn't even liked each other, and then they were battle buddies. And how touching to have him give up his life for Rose! Another thing I really liked was how there was still the mention of characters that we DO know, just from a different perspective. And, was that mention of the last fight of the Lupins in the middle of that?

Well done!

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