7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

31st March 2011:
Aw so sweet great chapter now off to the next one

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Review #2, by theelderwand 

20th August 2010:
This was a warm tale, desperate but warm. I'm wondering if its AU, if Harry actually lost and is really dead. If so, the moment between Cho and Tony is all the more heartfelt. Actually, I think I prefer to think of it that way.

Great story!


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Review #3, by maskedmuggle 

19th August 2010:
Awwh. This is such a sad story :( It's very well written though.

Great characterisation of all the characters in the story. I'm sad about Ernie, and it was great that you mentioned Hannah as well. Susan and Anthony sound like a good pair, and the goodbye kiss was a sad, but nice touch to the fic.

From the way you were describing, like "He was leaning over the body of someone, holding their hand. "Sh," he was whispering. "Youíll be alright, I promise." I thought Anthony would be comforting, like, an underage kid who'd come back to fight. I didn't think it would be Cho, and I don't think Cho really fits. I just can't picture Anthony promising things to Cho. I think it would have been better to choose a younger kid or just someone anonymous.

However, apart from that, I loved this, so well done :)

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Review #4, by Capella Black 

18th August 2010:
The one thing this collaboration has really made me appreciate is stories where the main character commits to a hopeless battle, and this one captures that concept beautifully. I love how she accepts her (hopefully mis-predicted) fate, but also has enough fight left in her to claim one last kiss, one last bit of living, before she risks it all.

The minor characters of potterverse are often either ignored or underrated, and so I'm grateful to this story for bringing another such character to life, and making her one we can care about and be happy for. Great writing!

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Review #5, by momotwins 

18th August 2010:
I've always really liked Susan. I'm glad you decided to write about her. She and Anthony were very sweet. It's hard to write a convincing ship in under a thousand words, and I think you pulled it off well. It's nice to see the more obscure characters paired up sometimes.

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Review #6, by Ronsgirl29 

16th August 2010:
Aw, Susan! I love her, but there is hardly any stories about her. I think the romance of her and anthony is such a cute idea, and I loved their kiss. It was sad that they thought it would mean goodbye, but we know that Harry wins in the end (:

Great oneshot!

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Review #7, by ericajen 

14th August 2010:
My only critique for this would be that I would have liked to see more conveyance of emotions from Susan when she was telling Anthony about Harry. I just feel like she would have been more upset than that.

Other than that minor thing, I really liked this. I love the way you brought some minor characters to life and put them in the spotlight, giving them an opportunity to show themselves. Very interesting.

All in all, you did a good job.

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