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Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

31st March 2011:
AW this was so sweet :) I Loved it:)

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Review #2, by Capella Black 

18th August 2010:
So yeah, I'm sitting in my bedroom, crying. Thanks for that!

Really beautiful and poignant piece. I twigged pretty early on that the main character probably wasn't of the living any more, but I didn't see it coming that it was Colin until we saw the body. I love how you gradually revealed both of those things, so that we start off simply wondering who we're following, and then start worrying that he might be dead, and then move on to worrying when he's going to discover it himself. By the time he does, we're already feeling for him desperately, and then bam! You have him reaching out to Luna one last time before everything fades away. Really moving. Really sad. Really well written.

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Review #3, by momotwins 

18th August 2010:
It was definitely confusing - I had to go back and read it again when I got to the end to see that he was having an out-of-body experience and not a ghost. Poor Colin, it was so sad. I can see him and Luna together, they seem suited to each other. Good job!

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Review #4, by propertyoftheHBP 

14th August 2010:
Aw, that's so sweet. I love how you worked in the "I wish I'd been in Ravenclaw" line--it really fit in and was great for the situation.

You know, Colin and Luna being in the same year never crossed my mind. I can really see him liking her, she seems like his type. I didn't realize the state of body/mind he was in until it was said, though I was confused--in a suspenseful, good way.

I really liked this story--you did a really good job! (All of your pieces for this collab are great, I enjoy reading every one. :])

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