5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

30th March 2011:
I can't even begin to imagine life without my brother let alone if i had a twin. Great Chapter well written and now i'm off to the next one

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Review #2, by Northumbrian 

22nd August 2010:
This is heart-wrenchinglly well written and very well observed. George's grief is raw and real and his final words, "We didn't have a plan for this you idiot!" are so true to the twins.
There are a couple of typos but no major errors that I can see.

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Review #3, by In The Shadows I Dwell 

22nd August 2010:
This was a very emotional piece, I'm rather teary now as I'm at the end of it and I can barely find words to describe what I have just read but I will try my best to write some form of review if I can.

George, well he was perfectly in character. I've read several fics about Fred's death from George's perspective and each one brings something new to the table, something about it that is unique. This of course was no exception. The emotions in this piece were very raw, and very heartfelt. It was almost as though you'd plucked them from George's mind himself. I particularly found the line: "When he opened his eyes, Fred's body, the last piece of his twin that he had, was gone." To be particularly brilliant as it summed up the piece entirely and in the end it was the line that had me in tears. (I did always love Fred)

However, it was the brilliant writing which allowed this to be as emotional as it was. In all areas it was brilliant, flow, grammatically and style wise there was nothing that distracted me or made me feel that it was anything less than brilliant! Well done on a fantastic piece. :)

Keep up the great work!
- Ashlee

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Review #4, by Capella Black 

18th August 2010:
This is really great. I'm finding it hard to be more eloquent than that, as the emotional upheaval it put me through means I'm now practically dead inside, but yeah; really great.

I love how you've interlaced the present, where he knows about the loss, and the scenes of action in the battle. Sometimes this can ruin the surprise of it all, but as we knew what was coming anyway, it just added to the build up, and made it all the more poignant when he finally discovered what had happened. I also love how you've mixed second and third person points of view - again, while this can normally be confusing, yours somehow uses both and yet never leaves the reader at a loss. Just a great piece of writing all round.

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Review #5, by theelderwand 

14th August 2010:
Sad. Very sad. But exceptionally well written. A fine tale. You've got George perfectly in character, right down to his bitterly funny line about Fred being killed by a wall.

Great flourish about the bond between siblings being insignificant to that of twins. Very poigniant.


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