6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by MalfoysCarolinaGirl2010 

30th March 2011:
Way to go Neville! summoning enough courage and bravery to be able to retrive the sword of Godric Gryffindor and killing nagini. great chapter very well written and now off to the next chapter

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Review #2, by momotwins 

18th August 2010:
Hi there! I don't think I've ever read anything of yours before. You know, I don't think canon ever addresses what happened to Neville's gran, so I'm really glad you wrote about it. You really got inside Neville's head, I'm very impressed - his characterization is wonderful, the writing is so powerful, and the end scene is just brilliant. Amazing!

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Review #3, by melian 

16th August 2010:
Yet again, a collab story has reduced me to tears. This was really lovely, how you had Neville going back over his life and his family and making sense of the way things have turned out. I particularly liked the difference between Order members and Death Eaters - Order members have honour. It's a great way of making the distinction, and we can certainly say that Frank and Alice had honour. You're right, of course, in that no one deserves to be reduced to what they've been reduced to, and if they had died there would at least be closure. It's a sophisticated concept but Neville had matured enough to this point to make it sound fairly simple.

And the hourglass again. You Ravenclaws!! :)

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Review #4, by ericajen 

14th August 2010:
You know, this collab has really been making me a big Neville fan. And this fic certainly helped the cause. I thought you wrote Neville exceptionally well. The way he felt about his parents, the snippet about photographs, and about his Gran. That was really touching. And then how you incorporated the snake slaying into it was a nice touch to add. It WAS an honorable battle, wasn't it?

Well done.

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Review #5, by propertyoftheHBP 

14th August 2010:
I think you've got Neville's characterization spot-on. :) I think that his thought process would be much like you've got here, and the last two sentences really describe everything well. If there was one thing that doesn't set too well with me, however, it would be the stiff-ness of his inner monologues. The lack of contractions and the general wordiness just seemed...too formal for the situation. Of course, that's just my opinion. :)

What I really like is how there's only a sentence or two to a paragraph in the end. I don't know if you did that intentionally or not, but it keeps the pace moving fast and it gives the impression that thoughts are flying.

Overall, this was a great piece! I liked it. :)

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Review #6, by long_live_luna_bellatrix 

6th August 2010:
"As I look at the group of dead bodies as I gently place my charge beside them, I wonder if honor is worth it." This, for me, was such a touching line. This was a detached telling of two stories: the story of the battle and also a telling of how to let go. Neville's thoughts on his parents, the way he connected them to his job, made incredible sense I would never have thought of. His thoughts were so despairing and logical, they really got to me. Neville's inner strength was so apparent in this story, you did a nice job giving him the numb honor I can completely picture him having. Great job, and nice reference to the hourglass.

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