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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Singularity 

14th August 2011:
This whole story has involved that push and pull between the little bubble of safety at Hogwarts and the growing tension in the outside world, but no where has that been more apparent than in this chapter. They go from being completely absorbed in worrying about their N.E.W.T.s to this blatant wake up call about what's really going on in the outside world, and the back and forth continues all chapter. It was brilliantly done, and I think you did a wondrous job of capturing what it must have been like to be a student at Hogwarts at this time.

I remember someone in canon (I want to say Sirius) talking about how a lot of people thought Voldemort had the right idea until they realized how far he was willing to go to get there. That seems like exactly what's happening in this chapter. The Ravenclaws are being awoken to Voldemort's true intentions and they realize that isn't what they want for the world.

I really enjoy this story. It's absolutely amazing the way that you've captured Molly and Arthur at this time in their lives.


Author's Response: The murder of Twyla's parents really comes as a slap to everyone - brings the war home in a way they hadn't really felt before, and it escalates things as well, because her father wasn't Muggleborn. It takes them from the childhood worries of exams straight to a reminder that shortly they'll be grown-ups, and in the same danger as everyone else.

I think it was Sirius who said that, yeah - most people didn't really take Voldemort seriously, not until he started killing people in retaliation or merely for sport. The Ravenclaws are starting to get it here. And now everyone realizes that really NO ONE is safe.

Thank you so much!

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Review #2, by Harry and Ginny 

21st May 2010:
i'm so sorry i only got to review now but school has been hectic! anyway, things are getting pretty serious right now with the death of Twyla's parents. it shows that the wizarding world isn't what it was b4 and that it's no longer safer. reading next chapter now!^_^


Harry and Ginny

Author's Response: I haven't seen you in forever! Thanks for coming by to read and review. Yes, things are definitely progressing in the war, heading toward danger.

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Review #3, by Kristin 

22nd March 2010:
Creepy chapter! I especially liked the part "It was far beyond a broken heart. It was as if someone had just destroyed her very soul." - it describes the contrast between the "tragedies" formerly known to Arthur & co, and the really bad things in life ... The ending was a bit more optimistic but we all know what's coming ... Great work as usual! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! Yes, their definition of tragedy is going to have to change. No more fireworks incident, now there's real war and death.

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Review #4, by theelderwand 

21st March 2010:
As with any chapter/story, its always the ending that sparks the most thought. I know Arthur's sojourn in the Ministry can't end well given the canon, so I'm assuming his job with Cecilia's father will likely end in his death and maybe Cecilia's too. Tragic. But excellently set up.

Your writing of the stresses of NEWT's and how everyone dealt with them differently has the strong taste of realism. Well done that.

The murder of Twyla's parents was a great piece of writing, very unexpected. The fact that her father was a half-blood went a long way to show how the heat has started to be turned up on the conflict. I can feel the explosion building and am most curious to see how you write it.

Once again, an enjoyable chapter. I wait, impatiently, for the next.


Author's Response: You are mighty perceptive. Yes, Arthur's sojourn in Mr. Fletcher's office won't last to the end of the summer, unfortunately. The Weasleys would have had a much different life if it had.

It's been a few years for me since I finished my master's, but I remember the comps at the end of it. Youch. Comprehensive exams suck, so I had them in mind writing about NEWTs. I'm glad it turned out all right.

Poor Twyla. But someone had to be the sacrificial lamb to the war. The first of many.

Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm sorry it took me so long to respond, I'm usually better about that.

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Review #5, by Hermione528 

20th March 2010:
Beautiful, heartwrenching chapter. I love how chapter by chapter, you inch closer to the war, and still manage to add brief moments of lightheartedness. I look forward to the next chapter! :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I hope to have the next part finished this week. It's partially written. It will be an epilogue, then the story will continue in a two-part short story. :)

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Review #6, by Margravine 

19th March 2010:
And yet another stellar chapter! I'm coming out of my lurking ways to say again how much I am enjoying this story. You write normal, believable relationships and realistic, nuanced characterisation beautifully. It's quite a feat, juggling as many supporting characters as you are, but they all remain quite distinct in my head.

I particularly like how you've woven in the war and prejudice over the last chapters, it's never too much or too little, and you map out people's reaction - reactions which may make them unlikable, but are understandable and realistic -perfectly. The entire work is not just refreshingly original but also really shows a sophistication and maturity which, regardless of author age, is not overly common.

And - possibly the highest compliment you can give around here - I could forget this was fanfiction and believe this was J K writing the Molly years. Excellent job!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm totally in love with this review, I almost don't know what to say.

I really like writing ensembles. These characters are alive in my head, so I don't feel like I'm juggling a lot of them, if that makes sense. I tried to show with the different reactions the variety of ways that people respond to this sort of issue. They're not always noble, even when they're good people at heart. It isn't all black and white, unfortunately. Prejudices can run deep.

Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it. *blushes*

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