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Review #1, by x3CherryWatermelonx3 

23rd December 2009:
Again, your writing is brilliant. Even though you said that the dates and such are off, it's really not that noticeable with your writing. It's great. You're an amazing writer:)

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I really appreciate the read and review.

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Review #2, by Laugharama_llama 

6th July 2009:
Haha you have a funny typo:
-"He was sturdy, thickly built, with wide shoulders and strong arms. His skin, fair and freakily by birth, was perpetually tanned and flushed, as if he had just stepped inside from a long run on the beach." (I think you mean freckly haha)
-“Because it good work,” he replied, sounding slightly defensive. (it's)
-“Ginny’s playing profession quidditch, if you can believe that.” (professional)
-Anyway…you liked like you were going to say something?” (looked like)

Alright, i just wanted you to know about those before I continued reading. I'll do a story review at the next chapter for the whole story so far :)

Author's Response: Oops, thank you so much for pointing these out. I fixed them. Guess I didn\\\'t proof this chapter very well *blush*

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Review #3, by RemusGal 

23rd June 2009:
Another really intersting chapter. I can't tell if Kate and Charlie were a couple in the prologue or just good friends ("this wasn't just some old acquaintance", "Why did you leave me"), but it's so interesting how different people react to seeing someone they last saw years ago on awkward terms. I don't want to say it's a male/female difference, though that's how you've portrayed it here. Charlie acts like she's an old friend and there's no nervousness that he might have behaved badly in the past, so she might not be glad to see him. Kate is much more tentative (though we obviously see more of her feelings since you write from her POV). I liked how Charlie blurting out the news of Freds death deterred her from asking the hard questions she wanted to ask. That rings very true. I am guessing it was the attack on Bill that made Charlie leave Romania, but I'm sure if it's important it will come up later. Thanks for the author's note. I was confused about the timeline without it. Keep writing, I'm really enjoying your work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, RemusGal. I'm glad the author's note helped. I was worried it had gotten confusing. I hadn't really thought about the male/female dynamic, but you're right, that does fit the scene. Their varying reactions to each other will be addressed pretty completely in chapter 7 (I hope!). I'm glad the way Charlie tells Kate about Fred felt realistic. I just couldn't see him telling her in any other way. Thanks again. This review totally sparked an idea for me too. I bet you'll notice it come chapter 7 ;)

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Review #4, by TheForestAgain 

17th June 2009:
AH finally, we meet Charlie. Looks like they have a complicated past. Will things start to get romantic soon? I hope so! Great chapter!

Author's Response: Yes, romance in many forms to follow. Maybe in chapter seven...? Thanks for the R&R!!

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Review #5, by RonsGirlFriday 

14th June 2009:
Well, you've definitely got me wondering what happened that made Charlie leave Romania. He took off in the middle of the fire, though? That is very strange.

I definitely didn't expect Charlie to be working a Ministry job, but Auror doesn't seem too terrible. Auror work always seemed to be one of the jobs that involved the least amount of paper-pushing -- they go out and do exciting tasks -- but if Kate really is anti-establishment, I guess I can see her reacting this way. Maybe a lot of her reaction is the lingering resentment over Charlie leaving? -- like she feels as if he abandoned them for a more cushy existence?

I was a little confused by her reaction to the pub they went to, because it seemed like the kind of place she would like, judging by what I know of her so far. But it occurred to me that maybe it was just the totality of the circumstances that was bothering her -- seeing Charlie again and everything.

I liked the contrast in their personalities as they "caught up" with each other -- with Charlie being super friendly and asking questions, and Kate being reserved and not wanting to give out any personal details. And Charlie seems happily oblivious about what's really bothering Kate, which is a little bit maddening because it makes me wonder whether he really has no clue how upset she is, or whether he intends to give her any explanation -- he's just going along as if it were old times again.

Also, I enjoyed your description of Charlie in the beginning of the chapter, especially this part:

"Looking at him was like looking at an old stone house, built to survive and protect, whatever the elements might throw at it."

The physical description was very much what I expected from what we know of him in canon, and I had always imagined him as a warm person, and you took it a step further in describing him as someone safe and secure. It's a little ironic, considering what he used to do for work -- working with dragons is adventurous and might not make a person seem like the epitome of stability -- but it's a nice character trait that rounds him out and adds depth, I think.

I'll be watching out for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for such a detailed review!! Kate's reaction to Charlie's job has a lot to do with her disappointment that he isn't the man she remembers, a person (who like herself) could never be happy working at the Ministry. Maybe I should have come out and said that more clearly. But you're right, it's also just the emotion of the whole situation too. She's overreacting to the wrong things.

You make a good point about the pub. I didn't write that part as well as I should have. Kate would like such a homespun, humble place. Her reaction was more ironic, in that such a shabby establishment would be described as "great," and her sensitivity to wizards looking down on muggle establishments. You're right though, SHE wouldn't look down on such a place.

Thank you so much for commenting on Charlie's description. I plan to return to that in the future chapters...her seeing him as a constant, steady protector. I really wanted to go beyond the cliche of him being a super attractive ladies man, but I still think a person with such a physical job would be larger and fit, and none of the Weasleys are ever described as unattractive. I also wanted to contrast it with another traditionally handsome character, who will make a return in future chapters.

Thank you again for all your reviews (have I said that enough yet :P)

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Review #6, by daydream_it_to_life 

13th June 2009:
Hmm, this chapter makes me so curious! Why is Charlie acting like nothing went on? Why DID he leave? That budgeting group seems so mighty suspicious to me! Once this queue opens up again, I certainly hope you'll have another chapter just waiting there! =] Still in love with your story, keep it up!


Author's Response: Thanks, dd. You're reviews always make me smile! I'm already working on the next chapter. Hopefully I'll get it up soon.

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