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Review #1, by girly1393 

12th May 2011:
The Dark Mark has come around.

Bravo to you.

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Review #2, by spangles 

14th February 2010:
So the Dark Mark appears. I never really though much about how it was made and when people started to use it, but I liked how you did it. But of course, what do you do that I don't like? 10/10

Author's Response: I considered that it might have first started showing up earlier, when they were in their school years, but decided against it. I don't think the war really peaked until 1979-1981 anyway. I'm glad you enjoyed the way it turned out here!

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Review #3, by Casey 

23rd January 2010:
Poor Remus. Trying to cope without his friends. They spent alot of time together in school and outside of it. I can see it being so hard for him when he has to go on without his rock (rock being the Marauders and sorta Lily). And his mum, goodness, its sad all around.

That battle was so bloody intense, I was ripping out my hair and making myself try to read faster in order to see if anyone was hurt. It was epic as a friend of mine would say. You really are great at doing those transitions. Lol. Hopefully there will be many more to come. It seems as though they can never have peace for too long (like I said before).

I can imagine people avoiding those houses with the dark mark over them like a plague. Its a shame because maybe someone might still be alive inside and perhaps waiting for assistance isnt the best thing. Then again its also a good thing, wouldn't want to take on 5 Death Eaters with no backup.

Author's Response: Remus is a lot like Sirius, I think, in the way they come to depend on friends more than they realise. Like Sirius has replaced his family with friends, Remus has become used to having them as his support system, and suddenly that isn't there anymore.

Your reaction to the battle has me walking on air. These battle scenes are so much harder to write than I had anticipated, and for a while I was afraid I'd gotten in over my head with this story. I feel the same way about them having peace. Sometimes I worry that it's too up and down, but then I just figure that they're very actively involved in the war, not much else can be expected.

I think the whole Dark Mark idea is terrifying, and I love that JKR did it.

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Review #4, by allie_0608 

21st July 2009:
Ooh it's getting more interesting :]

Author's Response: haha, pretty bad that it took me so many chapters to get somewhere interesting ^.^

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Review #5, by bill 

22nd June 2009:
please update faster i luv this story 1010

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing - expect an update soon, possibly tomorrow, the next chapter has already been in the works for a few days.

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Review #6, by auror_snape 

14th June 2009:
Wow. You really now how to write. That was spellbinding. And the Healers finding the Mark on the guy's arm, that fit so perfectly. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much. It was tough to write, the first "action" scene. I'm not entirely pleased yet, but I'm glad you like it. Hopefully I get better at them!

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Review #7, by Moonylupin 

13th June 2009:
Poor Remus. His reaction was written brilliantly, like not caring about his friends seeing him cry (in my fic he's never cried yet, so that was interesting to read). I felt so horrible for him. He was actually starting to feel like something was getting done and then he finds out his dad is dead. The way you wrote his friends was amazing as well, James and Sirius's grief and Peter disappearing from the mirror completely. I could completely see him doing that. The way Remus just stopped caring if the mission was a success was perfect, I could never see him staying there when he felt his mother needed him.

Speaking of his mother, that bit with her was great. The way she didn't know what to do with herself. I can't imagine anyone knowing what to do when their husband of twenty years is found dead. The way she shouted when Dumbledore told her was great. I also really liked how, when Remus came in, she knew who it was at once. She must be relieved that her son is home.

Then the chapter became slightly lighthearted, with the exception of Petunia being a jerk and refusing to tell Lily she was getting married. Lily's Christmas traditions sound nice. I'd completely forgotten they would be having Christmas soon, they must not have any time to celebrate anyway, unless for once something doesn't happen. I love that Moody's Patronus is a grizzly bear! It's so fitting. And the way Mr. Evans was scared by it was perfect. A Muggle wouldn't know what to do if a silver bear appeared in their home.

I was kind of wishing Remus would appear at the meeting as well, but obviously he wouldn't. He can't leave his mother now that he just got him. The fight was really well-written (I'm afraid of writing battles in mine and I'm not pleased at all with the first tiny skirmish I wrote, so it's great to see yours. It really came out well). The way that this was the first time they saw the Dark Mark really added to the effect of it all and the way that they just learned it was on the Death Eater's arm. Excellent chapter! Can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Remus's part came out really easily, so I'm glad you liked his reaction. I don't normally have such an easy time with things like that, so I'm not complaining! I was trying not to make it this huge sob fest or anything. But I'm glad you agree with him leaving to go home. I was a little worried about that - its always been said that sacrifices must be made, and I wasn't sure if people would agree with him leaving so soon.

Remus's mother's bit, I cheated a little. I tried to remember how my stepmom reacted when my dad's friends came around and admitted that my dad had died. I can't imagine it either, it's a very unreal situation. But yeah, considering she doesn't even know about Remus's new "job" (or she'd probably react the same way james's mother did), she only knows he works for Dumbledore, she's definitely glad to have him back.

Wow, I forgot about Lily's family in this chapter. That's what I get for responding to reviews right after waking up. I'm excited for the holidays approaching them :) I wanted to include more "family life" too, because so far they've only been to Lily's once. Hehe, I thought for a long time about what Moody's patronus could have been, and almost chose something else.

Sorry - I almost wrote Remus in, but after thinking about it decided he wouldn't go running off in a war right after getting home again, right when his mother needed him. Gah, writing fights is so hard. I'm glad you found it well written. I hadn't realised you'd written any battles yet in yours - what chapter? Obviously I haven't read them all, but I did scroll down the chapter list and browse chapter summaries and its something I can't recall seeing.

Anyway, I just opened OOTP and stared at the last few chapters, trying to find something JKR did to make it all so awesome. But she really didn't do anything special. Just Harry being chased and shooting spells. I don't know how she gets them to turn out so well and interesting, so you hang on every word, but when you really study it her battles are really simple. So that was no help haha. DH battles were pretty much the same, with the exception of the last one, in which buildings caved in a bit (and we didnt even get to read much about that last one, for instead we followed Harry to the Shrieking Shack and Forbidden Forest.)

But I'm glad you liked it - it was important for the things you pointed out - the Dark Mark. Thanks for the excellent review :D

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