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Review #1, by girly1393 

12th May 2011:
Poor Remus, but I know he wants to be useful to the Order.

I'm glad Sirius got a simple party.

Bravo to you.

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Review #2, by spangles 

14th February 2010:
Oh dear, poor Remus is about to find out what happend to his dad. :( I loved Peter's present though, it shows how much he valuse his friends. Ah...why does he have to betray everyone? 10/10

Author's Response: Yep, poor Remus. I liked Peter's gift, too - it was a surprising moment of thoughtfulness from him! And I have special plans for Peter - which doesn't make what he did any more forgiveable, but perhaps more understandable and not so evil.

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Review #3, by Casey 

23rd January 2010:
Such a depressing note this started on. I hate funerals and wakes, anything which involves the dead. I feel so sorry for them.

Although it did make me giggle when Marlene said 'Mr Black' so formal compared to how he's usually talked to. I did love Marlene's talk, she is like a wise older sister who has been there and done that and will tell you the truth. Ugh, I'm still pained by her death, it would have been great if she survived and lived to see the Second War.

I loved the bit with Remus, it was great to see what was going on with him. Haven't made up my mind about Ulfric, he seems like a decent enough person but I guess, just have to wait to find out more.

I loved the end even more though because of the 'lightness' and Sirius getting some presents. They really seemed like a family, it was extremely heartfelt and great to read. I like those moments when you forget about the war.

Also I hate cliffhangers. LOl

Author's Response: I hate funerals too.

I like Marlene a lot, and wish I had had a chance to play with her character more. I ended up having her die so soon, but I think I liked it best that way. But she did seem really likeable, and I think 'older sister' is a great way to describe her.

I'm really happy you like Remus's parts. I was really doubtful about including his mission at the time of writing it - not sure if I liked what I'd done. But now I do. And I hope you decide you like Ulfrik, because he's pretty much my biggest and only OC.

Glad you liked the end, it's always nice to include some happier moments in this story lol.

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Review #4, by Moonylupin 

10th June 2009:
Oh, come on, cliffhanger?! Just when I'm all caught up it's a cliffie! Poor Remus, he doesn't even know his dad's dead.

That was an interesting conversation between Sirius and Marlene at the funeral. I hoped Sirius would understand that they've all had to kill, but they're not proud of it and he shouldn't feel any different. But then I can see where he's coming from. He probably feels like he's going to become like his family if he keeps at it. He's already got Regulus and Bellatrix as Death Eaters, he doesn't want to be like that.

Ulfric doesn't seem like too bad of a guy. He keeps Remus safe from the others, so that makes me like him more than the others. That has to be horrible, sitting in that tunnel all day and having other werewolves sneak up on him. It was funny when Ulfric pointed out that Remus was starting to smell, I can't imagine Ulfric smells all that nice himself (though probably a bit better because he's allowed to bathe). It's a good thing that they have Remus working, it's keeping him from getting any more on their bad side.

Yay, some happiness in all this gloom - Sirius's birthday! That was a nice scene, just friends celebrating even with everything that's gone on. I loved Lily's present to Sirius - tools to fix his motorcycle. I wonder what Remus is going to tell them. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Muahaha. I'm really not very good with cliffhangers. I know, it must be terrible to have somebody in your family die and you don't even know it for weeks.

I mostly added the conversation between Sirius and Marlene because, as I said in a response to another review (not sure if it was yours or someone else's) I feel like I need to include the other Order members more. This story is in late November now, and nothing is known of anybody. I might even have to go back and try to edit in little snippets here and there just to make it look like they actually exist. So anyway, that was the main reason Marlene was there :D I think it was good, though, to have another person tell him it's no big deal and they've all done it. I don't want to downplay the fact that they have to kill (but at the same time I kind of do just because they never mention doing such things in JKR's books, and I don't want it to seem out of place)

You have Sirius nailed, though - that is exactly why it bothers him so much. especially since finding out the vampire was innocent and wasn't going to do anything.

I'm glad you like Ulfric. I'm trying to show the werewolves as real people and not monsters, and I'm trying to make them likeable. I don't know why I want to do it, I just feel like it will make a bigger impact. They're really not evil savages, they're just like Remus, it's just that (unlike Remus) they have been cast out from society and are forced to live a certain way. When Remus finally leaves them, I want readers to be sad about it, and find it a shame that they're treated as they are by the Ministry. The prejudice has always been a big deal in JKR's books, so I want to include some of that here, too.

I included Sirius's birthday solely because I felt like a lighter chapter was needed! I'm glad you enjoyed it and that it did what it was meant to do. Things are about to get dark again in the next chapter, so enjoy this while you can! haha. And I'm glad you liked Lily's gift, as I told you before, I hate trying to think them up.

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Review #5, by Gorillaz4Life 

9th June 2009:
Wow, I seriously cannot get enough of this. You've turned it into such a beautiful story, I genuinely feel for the characters and I don't think I'm being far-fetched in saying that JK Rowling would be proud of your story!

Author's Response: Wow, that's a heck of a compliment. I hope she'd be proud, for I've tried to stay canon (though I'm not sure if she'd approve of some of my foul language. But I do think they'd have talked like that!) I've recently realised I need to include the other Order members a bit more, so I'm working on that now :)

I'm happy you feel for the characters - its wonderful to hear that people can react to this story.

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Review #6, by drownzer 

9th June 2009:
great dude! waiting for more
when do u post?
i mean in a week or not fixed
10 out of 10

Author's Response: I'm really glad you enjoyed it, and thank you for leaving such positive reviews! :)

I used to try to post once a week. Then I needed to take a break and I actually didn't post for a few months. But now I'm back and I am trying to post once a week again :) I already have maybe 25% of the next chapter done, so its already being worked on :)

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Review #7, by auror_snape 

7th June 2009:
Peter's gift really was thoughtful. But around this time I've started to wonder if he only gave such a thoughtful gift to cover his tracks while he plots their murders, and I hate myself for it. It must be really hard to write the treachery of a friend, but it's easier to write their redemption, as I've found in my own story, Hidden Agendas.

Author's Response: I was really happy with Peter's gift idea. I always have a really hard times thinking up gifts for people, especially for a bunch of boys their age. It's not like they're super into music like the typical guy today.

I actually really like Peter. But in this story, he's not treachorous yet :) He's got a long way to go, and he doesn't even have a thought about joining the dark side at this point.

I actually think it would be harder to write their redemption!

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