7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by lost_in_imagination 

16th August 2009:
You make it seem like Severus Snape loved Harry, that he always tried to save him. Yes, he did try to save him - out of guilt. On regular basis my impression is that he despised Harry for being the son of James and Lily, that on top of feeling like he robbed him of his parents, guilty towards Harry for that, and guilty towards Lily; for being selfish. Although this story is nicely written, it's a lot like a summary of the book's description of Snape's life and, I feel, that big parts of it is wishful thinking of the person you want Snape to be:s He did have internal feelings as reason for the way he bahaved towards Harry, yes, but he still acted the way he did. And when did he ever work for the unity of the houses? And it wasn't his counter curse that stopped Quirrels attack, it was Hermione's fire that distracted him!
Sorry about the round of critique there, it's just, that sometimes it can be risky when you're writing about what feelings a person really has when it is already a finished story and you didn't do anything that changed it. You see; people will have formed an image of this person, and to be able to just write that he really loved him, you will need to write more about it, go in detail as to why and how, because I certainly didn't feel the way about Snape that you obviously did. When I read it it almost provoked me because it felt like you said Snape was different than he really was. In my eyes at least... To be fair, though, the writing was good, just a few writing errors, and it was an example of unity. And your pen name is very cool!:)

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Review #2, by biko 

14th August 2009:
Beautiful. Snape was very well done which I think is pretty rare. Lovely bit of insight to his character, I think you got it just right.

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Review #3, by Pookha 

21st June 2009:
Nicely moving and artistically written. I would have liked to seen a little more than what we knew described from the canon. Your style flows and the short passages help to underscore the passage of time.

What I mean is that I would have liked to have seen Sev fleshed out and humanized a bit more even than he was.

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Review #4, by RonsGirlFriday 

10th June 2009:
I love Snape!

Excellent reflection on his life. :-)

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Review #5, by Celtic_Dreamer7 

25th May 2009:
Beautiful. Well done, indeed. I've always enjoyed reading stories with Snape being a good guy. I always knew he was.

Absolutely brilliant.


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Review #6, by long_live_luna_bellatrix 

25th May 2009:
Wow, that was excellent!!! I loved how you tied in everything Snape ever did or tried to do with house unity and love, it was brilliant. He was written really well, and I liked how he felt so strongly to protect everyone, not just Lily's spirit. Nice work!

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Review #7, by redherring 

25th May 2009:
Oh, that was just wonderful. Beautifully written, and so sad! Honestly, I just loved it. 10/10.

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