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7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by lost_in_imagination 

14th August 2009:
Hi!
I really like the story you chose. I never would have thought of it for this, but it's actually a very good exaple of uniting! Not only is it Death Eater joining the 'Good guys', - it's Slytherin uniting with Gryffindor. They just don't know it...
I did find some, but very few writing errors. It's probably just mix up's as result of fast writing, things that are easy to overlook. Well, here they are anyway:
I tried focused my mind (focusing would've been the better form here)
If I win this fight, I won it for her (I'd choose one form here or 'would win')
And last, but not least, hihi; I don't think Snape's WANT would do him much good against Miranda's WAND;p But, seeing as her WANT was brought out into the open as well... *hawk* I think you might have misspelled wand xD
Okay:D So... I didn't quite feel the constant anxiety that I would imagine one would around the presence of Lord Voldemort. But, seeing as it is Snape, he can get away with it;p He already knows he can fool the Dark Lord, question is exactly how certain he is about it... I'd sweat my robes off if I were him xD hihi
Well, I liked this story and it's well written! I'll leave it at that:)

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Review #2, by biko 

14th August 2009:
The descriptions are really good, especially emotions. There's a few typo's ('want' instead of wand, etc.) that I noticed. Characterization is pretty good, the interaction between Snape and Minerva seemed a bit OOC to me though, but I imagine that would be a VERY difficult thing to write and you did very well considering. Voldemort Snape interaction was great.

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Review #3, by RonsGirlFriday 

10th June 2009:
I like how the unity here is something that Snape is aware of but McGonagall is not. Nice angle!

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Review #4, by CelticGoddess81 

3rd June 2009:
I thought you did a grand job. I like the end, "Our motives may be different, and how we go about achieving what we wanted was certain different, but at the end of day we had a similar goal in mind. We would both fight to the end." That is just too true for many things in life.

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Review #5, by Pookha 

3rd June 2009:
Severus had the hardest job of all the characters. Forever doomed to not be recognised until he died for his bravery. Never to have his love returned, living only for vengeance or at least the memory of his love. This piece captures the dichotomy between Sev and Minerva and shows that while they differ in why they're fighting that they don't differ in how long they'll fight.

A fine example of unity without each of them knowing it's unity.

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Review #6, by Celtic_Dreamer7 

18th May 2009:
Very well done. I enjoyed it. I've always loved reading stories centered around Snape or Slytherin. Very enlightening as to his mindset upon hearing the news of becoming Headmaster. Good job.

~Celtic~

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Review #7, by Alexa_The_First 

18th May 2009:
Firstly that was a great insight into Snape's mind. So simple but yet so conclusive with the different sides of his personality. I loved the subtle reference to Lily with "it was my punishment for not being there to protect someone so long ago." I thought this worked really well and that was the driving force behind everything he did. I also really liked the hatred between Minerva and him. I thought his statement about them fighting for the same thing but being on different sides of the table was very accurate.

One point though is the first paragraph it says "I tried focused my mind on other things". I'm not sure but should this be I tried to focus my mind on other things? That's all I picked out though.

Once again great job for Slytherin!

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