6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Happy 

12th October 2010:
Did Ron and Hermione have some sort of split up? Because they are never around each other.

Author's Response: No, Hermione and Ron are together. They have had the odd argument at times but they are pretty much a couple. I guess the main plot in this fiction is not centred on their romance, more on Harry/Ginny, but good point, I will try to include their relationship a bit more in future. You will she more of them two together once the three of them move into the apartment Harry is buying in London. This should happen from chapter 34 onwards (not yet posted I'm afraid). Thanks so much for your review.

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Review #2, by Labby 

6th March 2009:
Oh boy.. I guess Draco's really coming to see more of Harry's side of things. He gets to view Umbridge in a not so pleasant manner, as well as having to hide something for the better of everyone else. I think they could eventually crack him.. but I'm hoping Harry and the others will get to him before all of that happens. Or at least Percy.. maybe Percy will come through. I forget if we ever get a mention of Percy being good or not, but I'm still hoping his Weasley goodness will come out soon. I just have to say that I think you've done an excellent job of Harry's character throughout this whole story. It just seems spot on to the character that JKRs creating.. just reading about Harry wanting to help and Kingsley holding him back is such a great example of your ability. Of course Harry's going to try to get involved, even if it's not for the best.. hurting himself in the process. He's the hero, he wants to do it. As always, I look forward to reading more. Excellent chapter!

Author's Response: Yes, I thought I give Draco a taste of what's like to live Harry's life. Evil me! They will find out that the phone is Harry's though. Percy, well... interesting observation. As the story stands at the moment, I know it is extremely long and it's impossible to remember everything, he paid a visit to Voldy in chapter 21 at his ice castle...

I'm so pleased that you like the characterisation, especially Harry's since so many people find him very hard to write in character. I do try and I just love him to bits, so hopefully I can get into his fictional head! lol I'll try not to take so long writing the next chapter. I had serious writer's block on this one and it took me months. x

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Review #3, by SpringTime 

4th March 2009:
Umbridge is absolutely horrible! Of course we already knew that, but really really horrible in this. So I am here as promised, and you didn't have to remind me or anything. It has been a while, but thankfully I can remember most of your story as it was very enjoyable (still is). I really feel for Malfoy and hope that they are able to rescue him soon (along with Harry's invisibility cloak). I hope Percy gets smacked in the face as well, or maybe killed, either one would make me happy.
Sorry that this review is not very detailed, I think I might be a bit slap happy today. Anyway, great update and I look forward to you letting me know when more are coming :)

Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much. Umbridge, yes we love to hate her, don't we? I'm sorry I took so long to update. I was pretty stuck on this chapter for some reason. Well, the phone is also going to cause some problems and the cloak was very unfortunate. Umbridge will get her comeuppance though, eventually. Percy, well... cannot reveal too much...

Hopefully I won't take quite so long to update. x

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Review #4, by twixie 

26th February 2009:
I've waited a long time and it was worth it! Poor Draco-and what is Percy doing?!!! OMG-you nailed Umbridge! I just loved the whole chapter!!! Well worth the wait!!! I hope Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny can get him out of there!


Author's Response: Oh, I'm so sorry about the wait. I had the most awful block ever with this chapter. I'm glad you are still keen on carrying on reading.

Percy, well he is Umbridge's right hand but watch for possible developments. Bear in mind that in chapter 21 he went direct to Voldemort...

The trio, Ginny and the Order are trying their best but they have no leads so it should be, well, interesting (hopefully!).

Thanks ever so much. x

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Review #5, by Bella_Portia 

25th February 2009:
First of all, I think you got Umbridge exactly right. Candy-floss pink draperies -- ugh!

I was so impressed with that Order meeting/Grimmauld Place scene -- specifically, with how you managed to balance all of those characters and all those POVs, while remaining true to each. Arthur compassionately empathetic (arenít you identifying yourself with him too much ), Moody suspicious, Molly pragmatic, Kingsley slightly imperial -- I think you did a great job with this, while getting out the information you needed to get out. ("Draco in Malfoy Manor! What were you thinking, boy?")

But the best scenes were the ones involving Draco, Umbridge and Percy. I thought the interrelationship between Dolores and Percy was especially interesting -- how oddly deferential she seemed, even while seeming to be in charge. It seemed like an indication of her lack of confidence.

I liked the way you handled Dolores' character. She was smart, in her way -- like a politician. She was also as unscrupulous and cruel as we know and love her.

This was most certainly a leading question. -- I would say a "loaded" question, although it's not quit that. A loaded question has an incriminating assumption (Are you still beating your wife?). However, a leading question implies its answer, which this question does not.

Overall, this was a fantastic chapter, well worth the wait. Once again, I thought your handling of Dolores and Percy was just terrific.

Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much. I must get to your new chapter very soon too.

I'm so pleased you liked my Umbridge. I was convinced I couldn't capture her at all, possibly hence I was so scare of this chapter. You were very observant on the Percy/Dolores interaction. Yes, she is almost relying on him for advice and he is getting promoted really quickly. There will be more on Percy of course.

I was also worried that the scene with the Order was going to turn out boring because they are brainstorming over ground that individual members on their own have covered before, like Hermione knowing who sealed the Room of Requirement and why etc.

Now, the "leading" question, I think what we seem to infer from that expression in the UK is a question that force you to go where you didn't want to, in this instance that whether or not he knew his mother had died would force him to indirectly admit whether or not he had been in contact with the wizarding world during the period he's been "missing" but I may very well be wrong. I'll try to check that one out.

I'm ever so impressed that you enjoyed this chapter. I thought I would never get it finished.

Thanks so much! x

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Review #6, by Karkaroff 

25th February 2009:
Excellent idea and I hope Draco can escape from Umbridge and her lackeys. Please write more as I am enjoying the story.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review and for reading the whole story and I glad you enjoy it. Well, I can't quite disclose if he escapes or not. Umbridge is not all that efficient but things aren't looking good for Draco...

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