6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Jane_Volturi 

5th August 2009:
Wow, defintley my most favourite chapter so far.
There was just one teeny tiny problem i had with the characterization. Bellatrix was fine, you explained well her devotion to Lord Voldemort, how he intrigued her. Voldemort however seemed a tad out of character. It was just some of the language he used, the way he spoke, or more accuratley his dialogue, no matter, i still liked the way that you wrote him.
The plot was also very interesting, easily woven into JK's stories, i could really relate to Bellatrix and step into her shoes, brilliant job there.
Grammar, Spelling and Punctuation were all perfect.

You have a very promising writing style but i think with a tad more practice you could make your writng even better, still, there was a good amount of description in there, everything was easy to read.
Overall i really enjoyed this chapter, great job.

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Review #2, by ButterflyRogue 

7th December 2008:
Hi Barbara!

While reading your chapter again, I just can't stop marveling on how you've managed to characterize Bellatrix so fully. She is a bit different here than in the books, but I rather like your description of her. You've introduced a younger Bellatrix, a before-Azkaban Bellatrix who is still fairly "innocent".
It's amazing how in a sole sentence you've managed to compare her with her sisters and show how she always felt above everyone else - how she longed for someone worthy of her, but somehow never managed to find such a person. That is, until she met Voldemort. I liked how you made her devotion to him be a direct consequence of her admiration, of her joy to finally find someone as worthy as she considered herself to be - maybe even more worthy than she was. She finally found someone she had to prove herself to.

There's a tiny part of her character that didn't really fit my vision of Bella. You've mentioned that she never killed or tortured anyone before. I kind of see Bella always having that violent streak - maybe torturing the family cat in the back yard as a kid or something like that, but hey! It's your story and I respect your characterization of her fully! :) You did an amazing job.

One more thing, you really have a knack for writing in the first person! I never really got the hang of it, I always end up being overly subjective, but it seems to come so natural to you.

Great chapter! I really enjoyed reading it!


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Review #3, by Labby 

16th October 2008:
I really love how Bellatrix hates her husband here. I don't know why I never thought of it like that, but it's a definite possibility because of her liking for Voldemort. I love your explanation for why she is so intrigued with him too.. because he's the first one that's stronger than her. It really makes sense that way and I love that she's able to pick up on that from the moment she sees him. I guess Rodolphus can't be too bad since he introduced her to Voldemort. I really loved your take on Bellatrix here!

Author's Response: Thank you!
I think that later, when we see her, she doesn't hate him anymore...she just doesn't care for him at all. But when she met Voldemort for the first time, I think she really would hate Rodolphus for being bound to him.
And I always saw Bellatrix as very strong, so yes, I think Voldie would really be the first one significantly stronger then her.

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Review #4, by Girldetective85 

16th October 2008:
I really, really like this Bellatrix story. Very few people can capture her character so well without making it seem flat, one-dimensional, and just pure evil, but you've managed to make her seem like a real woman with feelings and a personal agenda. The way she treats her husband is hilarious and sad at the same time - although it makes a ton of sense that Bellatrix would consider all men beneath her. Actually, she probably considered EVERYONE beneath her until she met Voldemort. She senses a challenge in him that no one else can offer, and this challenge becomes emotionally and sexually charged too. The scene where they walked in on that couple was frightening and really well written. This was great, Barbara - I've begged you before for a Black sisters story and I still think you could write an outstanding one. 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you! I just came from replying to that review of yours, too. :D I agree she saw everyone as being bellow her - I'd only say that with the exception of her sisters. I probably will be obliged to write it, really...:D

I already knew you liked this story from the pre-crash review, but it's good to read it again. :))

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Review #5, by evil little devil 

9th October 2008:
I just love the way you captured her feelings for Voldemort, how she admired him for his power, and for being the first man who was not afraid of her. You wrote Bellatrix very well, i especially like that she wasn't hesitant the first time she killed someone. She doesn't seem like the hesitant type to me. Really interesting chapter, I loved it :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm very glad you liked my characterization of Bellatrix...I'm very fond of her - in a strange way, of course, I don't like her torturing people, but I think she's fascinating as a character.

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Review #6, by long_live_luna_bellatrix 

9th October 2008:
That was amazing! Bellatrix is one of my all time favorite characters, and you DEFINITELY did her justice. This chapter was SO perfect. You caught her love for Voldemort in just the right way. I loved this so much.

This was very interesting to read, to see Bella's first test. I never thought she would do it that way, but it worked out great.

I loved this! 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm especially glad when someone who 'likes' (one can't really like her, can one?) Bellatrix appreciates my story.

As for the way she passed her test, I don't see her as a sadist as such - ejoying causing pain just for the pain - but as liking causing pain because she knows it pleases Voldemort...and I think this is where it started.

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