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Review #1, by Jane_Volturi 

5th August 2009:
I'm slightly frustrated at the moment because i just tried to post a review on here but it had been so long that i'd automatically logged off so here i am writing this review again lol.
I'll be completley one hundred percent honest in telling you what i think because i find that is the best way to let the authors know what a fraction of the audience are thinking.
To start off with i've never actually read a fanfiction from Kendra Dumbledore's point of view but as this chapter progressed i became increasingly interested in her character, and by th time the chapter had come to an end it had quite an unusual impression on me.
Firstly your characterization was absolutley phenomenal, there was a pinpoint accurate balance of personalities in here which i think is considerably important to have in a fanfiction. Kendra Dumbledore was very easy rto relate to, i could really step into her shoes and place myself straight into her position. You showed such a troubled side to her personality, it was different yet ever so realistic. It showed the harsh realities of life some people have to experience which in this case is the unpleasent fate tha awaits poor Kendra. Reading this really shines a different light on the whole Dumbledore family History, and i think you described beautiful Kendra's true feelings and emotions. And her grandmother, i loved the way you included her in there in such a way she was a symbol. Yes, i understand it sounds ever so slightly crazy but i really think that her grandmother's character symbolised doubt, she was the reason for Kendra's constant doubt and sense of insecurity, she told her never to trust anyone, she could only trust herslef. And Percival, he sort of symbolised escape, the way he showed Kendra she could trust him, that he loved her and cared for her. So yes, perfect characterization in my opinion.
The plot, the plot wove so deeply into the Harry Potter series, i was considerably shocked by the amount of fact you placed in there, enough to be considered a missing fraction of Albus Dumbledore's history, but also original at the same time, in a way you made it your own if you get what i mean.
The Grammar, Spelling and Punctuation were all perfect (no other word for it) and your descriptive writing was spot on, the detail and description this chapter required you managed to carry out both professionally and realistically, brilliant job.
My overall impression consists of many things. Firstly shock that i was actually intrigued by a character i didn't care much for. Then i was also mildly depressed because after placing myself in Kendra's shoes i realized she was leading a life os misery and woe. I also found it very enjoyable in an upsetting kind of way, it's a difficult one to explain which proves you have brilliant writing skills if you're able to do that.

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Review #2, by ButterflyRogue 

7th December 2008:
I know I've reviewed this before, but since the reviews were lost in the crash, I wanted to re-read all of the entries and review them again.
Even now, while re-reading every chapter, I just can't help but to be amazed with the quality each of them is written.
This is absolutely amazing! I always enjoy reading about minor characters since it's the fanfiction authors that give them soul and a character based around the name JK provided them with.

Your portrayal of Kendra was amazing! You've described a proud, strong woman whose cold character is a consequence of her unfortunate life. She changed for the better encouraged by Percival's love - a lovely metaphor with the "locked door of her childhood", however, another tragic event took him away from her and with him, her faith in people and the world itself.

"She felt herself being forced back behind the locked door of her childhood, and her heart clawed toward freedom inside her. Her entire soul trembled with this decision to return to a life of solitude and loneliness. Turning to take in the soft curve of her daughterís cheek in the moonlight, she steeled herself to her choices. For the safety of her daughter, she would be the prisoner again." - She made the ultimate sacrifice, trading her happiness for the well-being of her daughter. She knew she had to become the cold woman she used to be in order to endure the trials that were to follow.

The transitions you made, from the flashback of her lonely childhood, the feeling of not belonging anywhere, of being misunderstood by everyone; to the happy days with Percival who had taught her to embrace love and happiness and the abruptness of that kind of life ending were wonderfully done. It's almost ironic how it takes a while for a person to open up, but just a moment is enough for them to close back into themselves again. And once it happens, it's so much more difficult to get out of that shell ever again.
"Percival vanished into the bright morning sun with the wizards who were intent upon bringing justice to the world." - beautiful...

Wonderful chapter, you've done an amazing job with providing Kendra Dumbledore, a character no one really paid much attention to, with a life and a history. You've made her real, you've made me feel with her pain and understand her actions.

Thank you, it was such a pleasure reading this.

~Vedrana (Rosie Nymphadora at eHPF)

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Review #3, by Labby 

16th October 2008:
What a beautiful story here. I really feel like I'm repeating myself, but the stories here are just amazing. I think you just did a wonderful job bringing Kendra's character to life. I love how it was done in two different times, the present and the past, and those two times just caught up and made a lot of sense at the end. The flashback was really nice and gave some good insight into Kendra's character. I love the way she met Percival and how you even added in some troubling parts of her past that worked nicely with what happened in the main story. I really love how you did this story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! At first I was slightly worried about taking a character that we knew so little about, but I found that actually freed me up to be more creative. Once I got the inspiration, I really enjoyed it. I hope that the emotion I wanted to portray came through well. I am so glad you liked it!

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Review #4, by Girldetective85 

15th October 2008:
Shanon I remember being so thrilled that someone had written about Kendra Dumbledore! Now there's one character I've always wanted to know more about. I was even more thrilled when I saw that you had written it. This was such a bittersweet story. I feel as though Kendra took the whole arrest as a kind of punishment for having loved Percival so much :( It's so unfortunate that her Abuela had her heart broken and warned Kendra against ever loving freely, which kind of poisoned the love she had for Percival. My favorite part was where Percival tried to convince her that love was good, that risking your heart is what life's all about. This was heartbreaking and beautifully written. 10/10

Author's Response: I am so excited that you liked it! I am such a fangirl of yours! I really found that not knowing much about Kendra freed me up to be more creative. The thought of the Spanish Inquisition entered my mind, and then Abuela actually began to haunt me! I knew I just had to write her into it. I really wanted to show how an Aberforth and an Albus were both created, and who had a hand in making each of them who they were. I really enjoyed writing them, and I think I may revisit Kendra and Percival someday. They remind me a bit of Tom and Merope, as they are both doomed couples. Thanks for the review!

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Review #5, by evil little devil 

9th October 2008:
That was amazing! It was so interesting to read about Kendra, seeing it from her mind. Your description was stunning, you had me bawling at the ending. It's really sad that she decided not to ever trust love, the touch with her grandmother was really great. I really loved reading this, it was brilliant :)

Author's Response: I appreciate your kind words so much. The idea of Abuela came to me, and then the story just kind of built itself around that thought. I wanted to show how much the love of Percival changed her, and how Ariana's attack forced her to retreat back into the sad girl she had been before. I also tried to depict the parents that created both an Albus and an Aberforth. I think you could see bits of Albus in Percival, just maybe not as naive about the world after having that open joy tempered a bit by Kendra's doubt and distrust. Aberforth, being younger, had less exposure to his father and more of his mother's attitude. I am glad you liked it. Thanks so much for reviewing.

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Review #6, by long_live_luna_bellatrix 

9th October 2008:
Wow, I loved this! I never, ever dreamed of reading a Kendra fic, but this was great! I loved seeing the world from her eyes. Learning of her past was also very, very interesting.

It was really cool, the way you had Kendra's grandmother come back to haunt her. I loved that. It made me wonder: Why don't a ton of people do that? I know, they want to 'move on', but I'd think Abuela's choice would've made a lot of sense to a lot of people.

Anyway, that was great! I loved it! Every time I read another chapter of this collab, I'm reminded why it's on my favorites!

(Oh, and it's killing me that only one person besides me has reviewed here since the crash. You'd think this collab would appeal to a lot of people, who would want to come and give back reviews.)

Author's Response: I think most people, wizards, are ready to go on to the next life when they leave this one. Only those with unfinished business or great fear of death choose to stay. The bitterness that Abuela harbors for those that hurt her in life leaves her with the assumed job of protecting her daughter, and then granddaughter, from the same fate. She feels she cannot pass while that threat is there. The fear of her family being destroyed as she was is greater than her need to pass on. So, she stayed, much to the detriment of Kendra. She loved her, but she really warped her mind. Think what may have happened had she been a different woman! But, we wouldn't have had the brothers Dumbledore the way they were, either. Thanks for the lovely review!

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