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Review #1, by Jane_Volturi 

5th August 2009:
Well, despite the fact this chapter was quite uneventful i still really liked it. I couldn't help but feel sorry for poor Remus Lupin. You described well his feeling of being an outcast and how miserable he truly felt. I really like the way you stuck to the facts yet made it into your own story, you delved deeper into his thoughts and emotions and i could really understand how he was feeling, really place myself in his shoes you know.
I didn't like his father, John seemed like a terrible father to be quite honest with you, but i still enjoy the balance of personalities you showed in here, it's always good to balance the chapters out.
The plot, again, you wove it so cleverly into the Harry Potter series, i really enjoyed the way you layered it through the years you know. You did a geat job at that.
your grammar, spelling and punctuation all seemed spot on, and your descriptive language was phenomenal as always, brilliant chapter, i really enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad to hear you liked it... :)

I based most of my description of Remus' father on what little we knew about him from canon - that he had said something to offend Fenrir Greyback thus provoking him to have his vengeance by biting his son. From the moment I heard/read that, I imagined him as a proud, dominant figure that couldn't admit a mistake and couldn't quite handle the consequences his actions brought. So, I don't quite see him as the worst father out there, but he wasn't likely to be voted father of the year either... :)

As for my grammar, I owe it all to the amazing reallyginny who beta read this chapter.

Thank you so, so much for this wonderful review. I appreciate it immensely! *hugs*


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Review #2, by Bella_Portia 

27th October 2008:
I was struck at the beginning by the choice of the Borges quote.

There was an excellent conciseness about this tale; a way it went right to the point. The choice of moment was a bit unexpected -- it was in some ways a mundane choice, and yet it was absolutely perfect. It was a catalyst that tied together Remus memories and the parts of his personality.

On this rereading, I was impressed by the way you really captured a personality. It was himself -- very true to canon; and yet you gave him a history, made him an extension of his parents.

You gave a picture of someone with the courage to rise above a tragedy, who honors what has been granted him, and who values the gift of teaching.

As I read these stories through again, I am so impressed with the extraordinary quality of them. This was a fantastic piece of Lupin's life.

Author's Response: My deepest apologies for taking me so long to respond, I was certain I have already done it...

Heh, I was reading Borges that week I spent plotting this chapter and this quote struck me immediately as the one to use as a prelude to this story. :)

It was very hard for me to choose a moment in Remus' life to write about. The moment of James and Lily's deaths, Sirius' imprisonment and Peter's presumed death would have probably been the most obvious choice, and probably the most defining moment in his life, however, I have already written a one-shot on that particular moment before. So I eventually went with this one... :)

Thank you so much for your wonderful review! I appreciate it so much!
And once again, I'm so sorry for not responding sooner... :(

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Review #3, by Georgia Weasley 

19th October 2008:
This is so beautifully written, I don't even know where to begin. Remus was always the noble character, even though a bit too noble for his own good at times. Now we know from where his desire to be good flows, and the reasons behind his transformation. How horrible that his father's pride and arrogance marks Remus as an outcast for life. His search for redemption, salvation, and purpose is so heart-wrenching. I adore Remus's character, and you've written him brilliantly here. I loved how you didn't come out and say who the letter was from, but let us figure that out on our own. This is an excellent contribution to the collaboration.

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much for your kind words!
I really wanted to provide a true motive for Remus to be such a good and noble character we all know him to be because I believe it can be really hard at times to deal with all the hatred and prejudice he was faced with. The character of his father is mostly based on the canon fact that it was his insult of Greyback what made him bite Remus. It just shaped my opinion of the man, and I can't seem to picture him any other way but the slightly cold and proud man.
As for the letter, an earlier version of this chapter actually had Remus reading it at the very beginning of the chapter... :D

I adore Remus as well and I'm so happy you liked this chapter! Thank you for the wonderful, encouraging review! :)

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Review #4, by Labby 

16th October 2008:
It's sad, though all of us know Remus's history, but just to think that he was turned into a werewolf because of someone else. It wasn't his influence at all, yet his father's and he had to suffer because of that. That's just the fact I kept thinking about when I read this, and I think you did a good job of showing that and showing how good of a man Remus is. He never liked what happened to him of course, but he didn't seem to go entirely into blaming his father about what happened. I really like that you show his background, but then you show the moment which he is more sure of himself and he decides to teach. It's a beautiful moment and you captured that really well.

Author's Response: Hey!

Thank you so much for the lovely review!

Yes, we all know the basics of Remus' history, but I've tried to put the emphasis on the little piece of information saying that he was bitten because his father insulted Greyback. I expanded my version of his background around that and it influenced my vision and description of Remus' father a lot.
Remus is one hell of a person and I wanted to show that he really had to have great strength of character to overcome all of the misfortunes he had to endure and become such a kind and gentle person. He could have allowed bitterness and rage to consume him, he could have become as spiteful as Snape, even turn into someone as horrible as Greyback, but he didn't. He chose to stay human in the eyes of the world, even if most of the world didn't want to see him as one, and that's a marking of a true hero. That's what makes him my favorite character.

The moment to choose as "defining" was very difficult to me. I've written about some of the more important moments in Remus' life already so I wasn't quite sure how this one was going to turn out, and I'm so glad you think it was a suitable moment to choose.

Thank you, again, for your review. I appreciate it immensely!

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Review #5, by Girldetective85 

15th October 2008:
Vedrana, you already know how much I enjoy reading all of your stories about Remus and Tonks. This Remus-centric fic is no different. Reading this piece, I get the feeling that you know your character inside and out, that you care about him and understand him, which is the hallmark of a truly gifted author. I've read stories where it was painfully obvious that the author didn't really know the character they were writing about, resulting in a kind of fractured profile - but you will never, ever have that problem. I felt so deeply for Remus in this story. At such a young age he already has to learn that he will be forever different from everyone else, feared and even hated by people who didn't even take the time to get to know him and his gentleness and kindness. It takes a very strong man to come out of that childhood and take a stand for himself, without ever feeling bitter or self-pitying, and Remus is exactly that. He's one heck of a Marauder and an even more amazing character, and you've given him the tribute he deserves. Brilliant writing as always. 10/10

Author's Response: Hi, Jules!

I'm so happy to hear that you think I captured Remus' character well. From his very beginnings in the book, I've felt a strange kind of a connection to him and I'm glad to hear it came through my stories. I love writing Remus, exploring his thoughts and the sides of his character not seen in canon and I can't say how happy it makes me to see it well accepted here at HPFF.

It indeed takes a strong man to become a person Remus was, generous and kind, without showing bitterness towards the others, that's another reason why Remus is my favorite and it's so nice to hear you think I did him justice.

Thank you so, so much for this amazing review and your constant words of encouragement. It means so much to me...
*hugs you*

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Review #6, by evil little devil 

9th October 2008:
That was gorgeous! You wrote him so perfectly. Your writing was amazing, it really captured me into the story. His thoughts were just how I would've imagined, it was all very realistic and completely amazing! Great job :)

Author's Response: Hi!

Oh, I'm so glad you liked the way I wrote Remus. It's a great compliment to hear you liked my style of writing.

Thank you for the lovely review! I'm appreciate it very much.


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Review #7, by long_live_luna_bellatrix 

6th October 2008:
Wow, this was so great. I loved it SO much.
The writing was beautiful, I have to say. It was enchanting, it dragged me in. I loved it.
I loved looking into Remus's thoughts: They were exactly as I would think they would be. You definitely did him justice.
So great job! Pat yourself on the back!

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I'm very glad you liked my description of Remus' thoughts. He's my favorite character and it's nice to hear you think I did him justice... :)

Thanks for the wonderful, encouraging review! I appreciate it very much.


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