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Review #1, by celticbard 

3rd July 2009:
Hi morgana!
It's celticbard, from eHPf, here to review as requested. ^_^

Well, the rising action in this chapter is positively wonderful! I found myself sitting on the edge of my seat while reading. Everything is really coming together. Draco is starting to prove his loyalty and Harry, I sense, is finally getting closer to one of the Horcruxes. The appearance of Snape and Trelawney really worked so well in this chapter. They were both perfectly in-character and I simply love what you've done with Snape. I could just picture him working quietly in a Muggle bookstore, retiring to his quiet apartment at night to listen to opera and drink fine red wine. You certainly have him down-pat. And Trelawney's drunken ramblings were hilarious. Poor Harry, he's having quite a rough time stuck with her in the Room of Requirement.

Draco has continued to earn my appreciation in this chapter. He really is trying, isn't he? Good for him!

As always, it was a pleasure reading this chapter, morgana. Out of curiosity, how long will this fic be? Do you have any more chapters planned out? Please feel free to drop by my queue again and request another spot. I can't wait to find out just how Harry escapes Hogwarts. ^_^ Take care and have a good weekend!


Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much. I\\\'m quite flattered that you find I\\\'m still maintaining the intrigue. Draco well, he seems to be moving in the right direction but he will really be put to the test later on.

I\\\'m particularly pleased that you like the Snape scene. I tried quite hard to imagine him in a Muggle context. He\\\'s an important character in this story also, although his allegiance is hardly a mystery now. Trelawney\\\'s presence in the Room of Requirement is relevant to the plot but she won\\\'t be a central character overall. I had a bit of fun describing her in such drunken state. Poor Sybil! I wonder if you have any ideas as to who might have sealed the room. Hopefully, not the most obvious.

I think this story is going to end up being a very long one. I\\\'m currently working on chapter 32, in which I have been stuck for months. I decided on the ending before DH was published and will stick to it. I have several plots worked out but not the whole thing. In a way its harder now after DH because when it comes to the points I haven\\\'t had planned for ages, often I don\\\'t know whether to follow canon or to depart from it. Yes, the quill is important however Harry still hasn\\\'t got a clue as to where it is. The message is also very relevant and complicates matters a great deal. I plan to include some European locations when it comes to the Horcrux hunt.

I\\\'m so pleased you are enjoying this! Thanks sooo much!

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Review #2, by SpringTime 

16th November 2008:
Ah a quill, I really like the idea of that, better than the diadem. Love the little clue et behind. I also like that Draco is now behaving like a man, even if he still is a bit of a jerk. I hope everything will work out okay for them.
It was a good chapter, and interesting that he should be caught with Trelawny. Wonder if anything more intersting will come of that.
The dialogue is much improved here, I know that for me sometimes me earlier chapters aren't as well written as the ones that come after I get into my writing stride.
see you next chapter. :)

Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad you like the quill idea! Draco, well both him and Harry seem to have a tendency to get themselves into trouble so there will be further developments.

I'm so glad that you think that my writing improves as the story progresses. I'm so glad that practice has made me improve because when I started this story I hadn't written for years.

Thanks so much for sticking with such a long story by the way. It is very much appreciated.

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Review #3, by Joanne K 

25th October 2008:
I definitely reviewed this chapter before the review crash, and since I wanted to refresh my memory of this chapter before reading your new chapter I figured I may as well leave another review to replace the one that was lost.

Your development of Draco's character is very well done, I particularly liked his interactions with Hermione, they were very believable in the way you had them speaking to each other.

Father Sean, of course I just love your development of his character.

I thought it was great how you included Hannah Abbott's father as the new owner of the pub, now that we know that JKR intends for her to become a pub owner herself in the future - it was a nice little tie in.

I thought you POV changes worked well and were not at all confusing to the reader.

How exciting that Harry now knows the object belonging to Ravenclaw!!! Using the Mirror of Erised was a great idea. I can't wait to read the next chapter and see what happens.

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Jo, for re-reviewing this. Yes, it was such a pain to lose all these reviews, although my sympathy goes to the authors who lost all of theirs because they stories were newer.

I'm so glad that you thought that the interaction between Draco and Hermione was realistic. Hermione is the practical type, so getting the job done is her main concern. Now, Draco, to me, almost feels like he needs to justify to himself why he is willing to help Harry, almost as he is slightly ashamed of being the good guy and starts saying to himself that he needs Harry's help and that for that reason he needs to help him in turn.

Father Sean is proving very popular which makes me extremely happy because I love this character.

As the story progresses, I'm "borrowing" more and more elements from DH. I had the outline of my story worked out before DH was published but not all the details. I'm finding it particularly hard to decide whether to depart completely or to accommodate canon elements which I couldn't have known about when I started. When I do accomodate them they are normally just for details of the story rather than for the main plot. I thought that since Rosemerta had been under the imperius curse, she probably wouldn't be trusted, plus she could do with a rest and then I thought, that's it, Hannah's father would fit into this well.

I'm glad that my many points of view don't come across as confusing. A lot of people prefer one point of view alone but I decided to use the third person omminiscent because of the freedom that it gives you to cover the thoughts of various characters.

Ravenclaw's quill yes. By the way, when you first reviewed this chapter you were surprised that I used a "quilt" lol This was in fact a typoi and I was in stitches thinking about something like a patchwork ederdown or something. Of course, Harry now will have to process the information that the book has given him in terms of working out who is trying to help him. It's pretty obvious but he can be very stubborn too, so let's see if he will come to his senses eventually.

Thanks so much for this.

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Review #4, by Labby 

10th October 2008:
It's nice getting to reread this and remember just exactly what happened in the last chapter. I love that Draco's the one that has to save him and that eventually Snape is as well.. finding the final solution. I love what happened between Hermione and Draco, trying to work together to save Harry. Of course trust is being questioned the whole time, but it seems like now Draco has proven he's trustworthy.. at least for now. I guess you never know with him.. his loyalty could always change. But I really enjoyed this chapter and I hope you get the next one out soon!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for re-reading and re-reviewing. I'm sorry is taking me so long to post the next chapter. I promise to try to finish it soon. Yes, Draco well, I keep turning the tables a bit, don't I? Voldy could probably forgive him if he handed Harry over to him, but well, he also killed Narcissa, so... Hermione is the pragmatic type, so yes, she will probably try to leave aside their differences, for now at least.

Thanks so much!

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