5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by celticbard 

6th June 2009:
Hi morgana!
It's celticbard from eHPf, here to review as promised. I must say, I've been reading this story for such a long time now, but you still manage to surprise me! ^_^ This chapter had a strong sense of rising action...I was on the edge of my seat the entire time. The situation has grown quite perilous. Harry is trapped at Hogwarts with almost no contact with the outside world. Thank goodness Ginny was astute enough to notice her bracelet.

Also, I love the way you outlined Bill's approach to the Gringotts break-in. He was very methodical. And Draco's chat with Father Mckenna at the beginning was absolutely brilliant! McKenna is just a wonderful OC and I commend you for his originality. He definitely is a convincing priest and I just loved how he was able to figure out the complex nature of Draco and Harry's relationship.

The last paragraph really left me anxious for more. Will Draco help Harry now that he is in trouble or will he fall back on old habits? As always, I truly enjoyed reading this, morgana. Please feel free to drop by my thread and request another review. I hope you have a great weekend! Take care!


Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much.

Very encouraging review. I'm so pleased that I got you intrigued.

Ginny is a very resourceful person in my view, so she will be an important addition to the team. Yes, the situation for the Order as a whole is getting worse by the minute.

I'm very glad that you think my Bill works. We don't know an awful lot about this character so I often find this canon minor characters the hardest to write. I went for logical and methodical because that's what he sounded to me like in DH and maybe because of his job.

Now, Draco and Father Sean. This OC has been quite well received by readers which is very, very encouraging. Some people imagine all priests very formal but the background story I have given him would make him a lot more involved and in touch with the community. He has been around teenagers a lot and I see him as someone who can grasp their psychological make-up pretty well.

Draco, well, that's the question, isn't it? His circumstances are pretty different to what they were in canon, so it may well be in his interest to help. However, he's a very cunning type and no he doesn't see Harry as his best mate by any means. An ally possibly... I have a trick out of my sleeve with him.

Thanks so so much. Your reviews are always very much appreciated.

Have a lovely weekend also. x

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Review #2, by SpringTime 

16th November 2008:
very interesting developement. I wonder if the tiara will be a horcrux in this? If not then I guess it is okay that he didn't grab it. I liked how well the conversation went with Bill, all of the bank security ideas were great. I can't wait to see how the break in is going to go.
I also loved how Draco got a nice dose of reality and hopefully he will now be able to act like a human being towarsd Harry :)
Good chapter.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked this chapter. No, the tiara has no significance in this story, since I decided to go with my original ideas from before DH.

I thought that including elements from Egyptian mythology etc could be interesting, especially since Bill did train in Egypt.

Draco, well, no matter how much he dislikes Harry, has little choice but to see that he is helping him, which is more than can be said for the Death Eaters but I wanted him to change slowly rather than turning nice overnight.

Thanks so much again.

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Review #3, by Joanne K 

10th June 2008:
Oooh great cliffhanger!

I'm so silly, when I started reading this chapter I thought, "Hang on, I've already read this." Then I checked the reviews and I hadn't written one, so then I thought, "I can't have read it." But it just seemed so familiar. Then it hit me, I had already read the first part because you had sent it to me to check over before you posted it lol. I'm a bit slow today :P

Fantastic chapter, we got to see a lot happening and you left me on the edge of my seat wanting to know what happened to Harry. I did get a little confused though, because one moment Harry is climbing into a trunk and the next he is in the Room of Requirement and I was thinking "Did I miss a bit?" I finally realised that the 'trunk' he had climbed into was actually the cabinet. (Did I say that I was a bit slow today? lol)

I loved all the conversation with Bill, I look forward to seeing how they get into the bank!

Author's Response: Thanks so much Jo. Yes, I did sent you the draft of the first scene first to see what you though and the cabinet is the vanishing cabinet, I'll go back and try to ensure that this is clear enough, though, because sometimes I rely too much on my readers remembering everything from previous chapters too, and let's face it, it has taken me ages to post, so it's not really fear on you guys!

The ending yes, I wonder whether I'm beginning to rely too much on cliffhangers though but I thought it would be a good place to end this chapter.

I'm glad you liked the conversation with Bill, because there isn't much canon about him and his circumstances are different here, so I wanted him to be a little paranoid, though not to Moody's level.

The breaking is still only outlined in my mind but I just thought that if they train code-breakers in Egypt, it seems to make sense that they have used elements from that civilisation. I did try to read about about it, the snake goddess for instance is part of the Ancient Egyptian pantheon and so forth.

Thanks so much for your review and for keeping up with this very, very long story! x

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Review #4, by Labby 

9th June 2008:
Wonderful chapter! You've really left us hanging with the ending there. Now Harry has to depend on Draco? Wow.. that's quite a chilling thought there. I really liked Draco and Father McKenna's talk at the beginning. Father McKenna can really interpret Draco well, can't he? It seems as if McKenna has been able to teach Draco a bit about himself and accepting others. Maybe that will motivate him even more to help out Harry.

I really liked the conversation between Ginny and Bill. It's so nice to see them interact. We rarely got to see the older brothers in the whole series, and it's just nice getting a bit of a feel for them. I loved the whole explaination about Gringotts and what it's all like. It's so elaborate and carefully planned how you described it. You really went into detail there and brought Gringotts to life.. if that makes any sense. I thought you did an excellent job with that, and I'm really looking forward to the whole breaking the wand out of Gringotts. I love the planning involved as well.

And now Harry is trapped. I wonder how you're going to get him out of that mess. That didn't exactly go as planned, but things never seem to work out completely. Anyways, I loved this chapter and I'm looking forward to more!

Author's Response: What a wonderful review! You really have cheered me up.

Yes, the tables are reversed, again, in the opposite direction. I guess Draco could chose to betray Harry and hope for the Dark Lord forgiveness but would he really do that? After all, he killed his mother and Harry has been relatively nice to him, even if they argue constantly. McKenna can read him like an open book, yeah. I always thought that the main problem with Draco re Harry is that he's jealous of him, although yes, Harry hasn't had a particularly blessed life, but there you go, he is famous and popular.

It took me a while to figure out how I wanted to write Bill because, as you said, there is no much in canon about him. I guess the scene at Shell Cottage when he's advising Harry about the goblins is the most we've seen of him. I thought that, after what happened at the wedding, he may be worried about his little sister going out with Harry, because yes, in short, a lot of people he cared about have ended up dead, but Ginny is too determined and she does what her heart dictates.

I'm so pleased that you liked the advice re Gringotts. I took quite a bit of time, trying to think how to go about things, to the point of attempting to get to understand how hieroglyphics work only to realise that they are more complicated that it meets the eye. The plan is not set in stone yet and there are too many things that can go wrong...

Harry, yes, he's trapped but I'm not going to kill him off at this stage in the story, of course, so there will be a way.

Thanks so much for the very uplifting review. x

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Review #5, by hanoverpretz01 

9th June 2008:
dun dun dun
update super soon

Author's Response: Sorry it took so long. I left this with a cliffhanger so I must start the next chapter tonight.

Thanks so much!

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