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Reading Reviews for Extempore, Chapter 11: Eleven
  
6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by arien043 

12th July 2007:
Dear BitterEpiphany,

I like your story so far... your writing style is really engaging. Remus is one of my favourite characters and I've read a few stories from his PoV, but this one is by far one of the best. You don't make him out to be a saint, or the Wise One, or a sap. He's so human. pardon the pun!

There is, however, a sentence that I couldn't quite make out:

"Still, the sight of Harry – alive, well and notably, without the presence of a battle scar or a troop of Death Eaters on his heels – made more than enough to quiet the terror all of the informed had felt for the past 48 hours."

Is there something wrong with that sentence, or am I just a little dim?

Great job, overall. On to the next chapter! *Rubs hands in glee*

Author's Response: :) Thank you!

I do have a tendancy to write very long, very rambling sentences and with little regard for anything else. Usually people survive them but once in a while...


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Review #2, by PhoenixStorm 

2nd March 2007:
So I've finally made it one chapter along from where I was, and it wouldn't surprise me if you'd forgotten who I am, the amount of time between reviews *rolls eyes*. I am sorry I haven't been the most reliable reviewer recently, and doubly so for having been this far away from what is undoubtedly the best chapter so far! ;)

I did really love reading this chapter, and you made me laugh at several points, Remus was just delightfully written here. You went through such a varied array of scene and emotions with him and everyone rang perfectly true to his character. The scene with Harry right at the beginning was wonderful, and you managed to make it poignant without going overboard. You kept a nice balance in the scene with bits like Taking a few cautious steps forward, you tried to think of something to say that wouldn’t betray your actual impulse – taking his wand and rendering him immobile. I really really do think this is my favourite chapter and I wonder if you can top it :p . I must also agree with Remus’s views on order, lol.

Kingsley has also stepped up a notch in my estimation of great characters. You played that scene with him very well and I liked the interaction between him and Remus.

The whole part with him going to visit Tonks’s parents just made me grin the entire way through. You had to sympathise with him and yet delight in his predicament. I loved how real it seemed with bits like It occurred to you only hours later that they might have taken your presence in the house to mean some ill had befallen their only daughter. In the moment, however, you could only imagine that they were aware of what you were about to ask and dreading it as much as you were. Of course the world will seem to revolve around something you’re dreading because that’s all you can think of and so naturally everyone else sees it in you and thinks it too; I love that you write things like that into your stories, in all likelihood without thinking about it, but still very effective. You wrote his panic brilliantly and kept it amusing without detracting from an accurate portrayal of his character. So I completely enjoyed reading this chapter and will try not to be so long before I read the next! :) .

Author's Response: I told you I wasnt ignoring you ;) Just...putting you off, perhaps :P

I love Kingsley. I do. I loved him more before JKR made him Minister, but I still love him anyway and, much as my policy has always been, you can't hold a character responsible for the awful things an author may do to them :) And, as for writing a paniced character...well, i have some first hand experiences with panic, so i can't say its ever particularly far off from my own mind ;)


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Review #3, by onepound13 

19th December 2006:
SWEET

Author's Response: Thank you :)

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Review #4, by Lupin4Tonks 

19th December 2006:
that was so cute!!! And funny hahahahahahahahahahaahahahahahahha *rotfl*

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it :)

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Review #5, by DAC 

18th December 2006:
This story just keeps getting better and better. Remus is wonderful, and I thoughly enjoy the 2nd person telling of all this.

Care to take odds on whether Hermione or Ginny is closer to a nervous breakdown? Loved that line...

Wonderful as always, and please update as quick a possible, becasue I might be a bit addicted to this story.

Happy Holidays!

--DAC

Author's Response: *smods* Okay, you're making me feel better about writing this :) I'm glad you're enjoying the story. It's good to have a regular reader again :)

Updates are forthcoming :) Thanks for the review!


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Review #6, by Leia Arletta 

17th December 2006:
no. I've reached the end of the updated stuff. I really like this story even thought it's way confusing and jumps around a lot. Usually, I hate that, but there is something here that has got me stuck. Anyways, I know you said you don't update often (and I don't blame you - I've basically given up on my stories), but I'd like to let you know that it *would* be appreciated. Thanks for helping me procrastinate for my Ancient Greece test!

Author's Response: Well, have no fear, I seem to be updating quite a lot lately. I've been inspired to work on this story and I've not only written all of chapter twelve but chapter thirteen is pushing 1600 words :)

Good luck with Ancient Greece :)


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