Reading Reviews for Extempore, Chapter 7: Seven
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Review #1, by Harriet T Cauldron 

17th January 2007:
Wow. The end was slightly unexpected. I'm just kind of wondering, why did they send out Remus to do the shopping?

Author's Response: My feeling on it was that, given the upset and the unrest in the wizarding world, they weren't about to send the kids out into Diagon Alley, particularly not after they ran off in HBP. And, lets be honest, it was just a convenient way to get him out and doing something because more scenes in Grimmuald weren't really doing it for me.

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Review #2, by exoticdisease 

19th July 2006:
I won't lie and claim I've read the story, because I haven't. I read the introduction bit to the first chapter...that was brilliant! Bloody everyone uses Evanescence lyrics...and Malfoy turning all nice!! Jesus christ that annoys missed out the Ron/Hermione idea though. That has been so over canvassed that cliche doesn't even begin to do it justice..

Author's Response: lol! Well, i'm glad you enjoyed the authors note but I'm sorry to hear you weren't able to continue on to read the story.

I may have been a little cranky when I wrote it. There is something unnerving about being inspired to write a story for the sheer purpose of proving that you can write a story without all of the tripe that is so heavily relied on in fanfiction :)

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Review #3, by Confused 

19th July 2006:
I just found this story, and I quite like your style of writing. The plot is intriguing as well. Your interpretation of the characters is quite unique in some aspects, and yet they're all comfortingly familiar. Your diction is balanced well, also. Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you. I have to say, when I saw your username I was about ready to roll my eyes and close the computer because, at first glance, it looked like I was about to be reading another anonymous review asking why Harry and Ginny weren't happy, together, in love and expecting a baby :P I was pleasantly surprised to discover that Confused is your username, not your current state of being :)

I'm glad you enjoyed it. The plotting to this story can sometimes perplex me a bit. It has had such a disjointed life - three chapters written over the course of three days and then re-written a few days later when HBP came out to edit for the left-field surprise, only to be written on for a few more chapters and then abandoned for six months (really, the writing of it was abandoned for almost a year) and then picked up again. I hope that doesn't come through in the reading of it, though.

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Review #4, by DAC 

19th July 2006:
Newly found this story... But have overwhelming love for it none-the-less. You have ade me fall a little bit in love with remus Lupin. Thank you for that.

Author's Response: lol! Thank you! I think, in the books, he's portrayed as a bit too soft for my liking. The man is shown to have a saint's patience and to really treat the entire world calmly, but I don't think that one could feel that and do that without eventually cracking under the pressure - and, while i've tried very hard not to contradict canon with him, I wanted to take him out of the element that we've seen him in and show a bit more of his person, as I think it would invariably have to become.

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Review #5, by PhoenixStorm 

18th July 2006:
I don't suppose anything from gentle prodding to threats is really going to get you to post another chapter, but needless to say, I would very much like one :p . I had forgotten a lot of the story, but most of it came back when I started reading, and I htink you've managed to continue on with it very nicely. And aside from the usual grammar and maybe one or two not alltogether making sense sentences there is little I can fault :) .

I really loved that paragraph near the beginning where Remus was considering everything going on, and I especially loved the description of Tonks, it felt right for him to think of her as such.

I liked the the part where Remus thought of Prometheus, though the first line had me very much thinking of good intentions paving the path to hell. Somehow, I doubt that's the reason his mother told him the story ;) . It makes sense to draw parallels between him and Remus though, Remus is, after all, a good man, and one who suffers despite it, and still he goes on being so. Perhaps I don't see the point of the story anymore than Remus, but I liked the similarities.

I think my favourite part was the last bit, when Remus tended to Tonks and felt such fierce protectiveness and the depth of the feeling when she was hurt. That was very indicative of how much he really does feel for her, it made me smile, I wonder if he thinks it any easier for her to see him hurt after a moon or something. I think you're building their relationship nicely and you write them both really well. Great chapter, and I look forward to reading the next one :p .

Author's Response: I'm still catching up on reviews, but it should be noted that i'm a lot further than I was :P

I updated. I updated and it's all your fault. :P

I really do think that is how Remus would see her. She's part of his life that is completely inextricable. No matter how hard he tried to resist having her as part of it, she remained there - and not only there, but persistant. I think the thing that I try to write into Remus most is thatm no matter how hard he may try, he can't quite get things working the way he wants them to work - he really can't grasp control over his surroundings and his situation.

I'm grudgingly working on another chapter :P

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