36 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Marshal/Scooterbug8515 

28th April 2017:
Okay I knew that this was AU as Lily and James didn't meet before the Hogwarts train but this was still very cute. You did a nice job hitting the child like innocence and the silliness of children. However my one minor critique is that Petunia is older than Lily. It is an odd complaint but that was the one thing that threw me off.

Still I love how James and Sirius wound up ignoring Lily and forgetting that she was there. I also love some of the lines that the characters say such as "you are going to want to date my best mate!" so true and so cute! I did enjoy this story it was such a wonderful magical moment trick-o-treating!

I also love the costumes that you picked for the kids in a lot of ways it was well placed particularly Lily and Petunia. I also like how you decribed the character not jut the main ones but even Petunia and Vernon. I also find it interesting that Mrs. Evans marks that Vernon is normal and that Lily shouldn't go with normal. It makes me feel a little bad for Petunia though as it feels like there is a favoritism toward the sisters. It happens and it works for the story and I'm thinking outside of that but still good work!

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Review #2, by rosehedwig243 

28th April 2017:
Hey hey hey Mistress!

Here for the finger-gruelling CTF!

As I get into this story, I am intrigued already by the title, Innocence for Candy.

I love this glimpse of a young Lily and Petunia and their mother; as well as their home life in their youth.

Lol the costume choices! This is where I applaud you as an author, the irony (i hope its irony, i still confuse situations where it is irony and when it isn’t almost daily) of having Petunia in a witch costume when it is Lily who ends up being both a witch and the metaphorical apple of their parents’ eye is just superb and funny.

Good witches yay! There are always good witches! And Lily grows up to be a very good witch (to the disappointment of her eventual husband)

“See, Mum? I'm cute and shy!" Lol Lily you certainly dont grow up to be that. I mean, she became a Gryffindor ofc she’s not going to be shy!

I love your take on Mrs Evans! She’s not a flat character at all and she seems to have a great sense of humour!

“An hour passed and, because of her innocent tecniques, Lily's pillow case was nearly full.” Spelling error I noticed - you’ve missed a H in techniques.

OMG JAMES! I lovove him! He’s so cute! Can I steal him forever? Lol

Aah they’re all so cute!

Great plot and great humour!

Thanks for an awesome read,


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Review #3, by roxyroxtheworld 

30th July 2016:
Lol never read a story like this where it's before Lily and James go to school lol great story! Of course Lily gets the most candy! Lol love it!!!

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Review #4, by ginerva_molly_weasley 

14th July 2013:
This is so adorable. I had never imagined Lily meeting James before they had actually gone to Hogwarts least of all James trying it on with her at a really young age. Fate happens that way sometimes right! Well in this case it obvuously does because they work so well together.

I can just imagine her with her beautiful princess dress on walking around with James and Sirius who are the cheekiest little boys you could imagine and you show that with their confidence first in asking for candy and secondly by asking Lily out even though they had just met each other. Sirius seems to fit right in with James even there.

Its just super sweet. Fate has spoken once again.

Love it

Author's Response: Ohgosh! I think I wrote this in 2004... 2003? It's definitely adorable going back to it and having a look. thank you so much for reading!

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Review #5, by Bailey 

26th June 2013:
Aww! That was adorable!

Author's Response: Thank you :) Cute little story I wrote years and years ago.

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Review #6, by Manga_girl 

24th October 2012:
Aww, this was so cute! I did, however, notice a few grammatical errors but I think that this is an older one shot!

It is so sweet though, imagine if Lily, James and Sirius really did meet like that! Awh! :') 10/10

Emma xx

Author's Response: Yeah I wrote this several years before I even posted it on here. So probably somewhere 2002? Maybe before? thanks so much for the review!

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Review #7, by MoonyistheBestMarauder 

10th November 2011:
Oh, that was so cute! Really, I loved it! Great job!

Author's Response: Haha, thank you so much!

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Review #8, by MagicallyClumsie 

28th March 2010:
awe thats just adorable(: haha i love how sirius endend up in it too.. and how mrs evans and mrs potter knew each other..thats just adorable(:

Author's Response: I love this story. It was one of my original short stories for fanfic. Thanks so much for the review!

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Review #9, by Bookworm045 

26th February 2010:
That was officially the best story I have ever read. I loved it so much, and laughed a lot. :) Thank you.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! Sometimes I forget it's there, but I really love it when I look back at it. Thank you!

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Review #10, by magicalmess 

21st January 2010:
awh. (:
that was adorable. (:

Author's Response: I keep forgetting about this story. It seems like ages ago...I actually wrote it several years before I even posted it on the site. Thanks :)

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Review #11, by Cassandra Evans 

27th November 2009:
i love this story
lily was the cutest thing ever
i thought i was going to cry

Author's Response: Aw, I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you so much!

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Review #12, by sreduaram 

19th June 2009:
that was so cute! adorable little james and sirius :) 10/10

Author's Response: god I wrote this so long ago I completely forgot about it. Thank you so much for the review!

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Review #13, by marinahill 

8th October 2008:
hi there :) merry review a thon!

This was extremely cute!! I loved howfamiliar characters kept cropping up and the trick or treat competition! Really adorable and very true to how kids behave!!

CC: sometimes I felt lily sounded older than she was, in some of her dialogue with her mum... I don't think they'd openly talk about their dislike for petunia...

Other than that, really lovely one-shot :) 7/10

Oh and a side note: "Holy cricket" hasn't really been used in england since 1950 or so... It made me giggle to see James say it so sincerely. May I suggest "crikey" instead?

Author's Response: haha I wrote this story years ago so I'll have to go back through it and see what you were talking about. I always thought James would be a bit goofy and actually use "holy cricket" because he thought it was silly.

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Review #14, by theblack_knight 

31st May 2007:

Author's Response: Thanks, it was fun to write

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Review #15, by Fleur Delacour Potter 

29th May 2007:
young sirius and james haven't changed a bit, have they? funny.

Author's Response: Thank you, I can't remember when I got this idea but it was so much fun to write!

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Review #16, by nazozink 

4th April 2007:
Omg i was talk into the real diamond on the phone and she was all READ IT so I was all okay and so i did.i like it. I think boys are now bad witches!

Author's Response: Aww thanks! I'm glad you liked it

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Review #17, by the_real_diamond 

4th April 2007:
yo dizzle? i am confizzled. never mind.

anywhos, cool story. it was pretty cool.

Author's Response: I wrote that entirely too long ago. Thanks!

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Review #18, by Lucarichi 

15th March 2007:
wow! that was good! ... I WANT MORE CHAPPIES!!! PLZPLZPLZ!!??.TWINKIE!!!. AH! IM TURNING INTO AMANDA! SAVE MEH!!!... im random O_o

Author's Response: Amanda? Haha, it was a one-shot :) Thank you!

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Review #19, by someone 

14th March 2007:
Yo dizzle!

Fo shizzle ma nizzle!

Author's Response: yes, that's the general idea, haha. Thank you!

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Review #20, by lilyflower1022 

12th March 2007:
aw that's so cute!! i really liked it


Author's Response: thank you so much!

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Review #21, by Chestnutsumo85 

9th March 2007:
Cute and fluffy ... perfecto!

Author's Response: I think every once in a while we need a bit of fluff :)

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Review #22, by Blackheart09 

5th March 2007:
awee, how cute, lol
hope another update is comming soon! later for now

Author's Response: Aww, it's a one shot, I'm sorry. But you can read my other stuff if you want! Thanks so much!

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Review #23, by wildharrypotter01fan 

4th March 2007:
Lily doesn't kno what she's saying Kames andher are going to lived happy ever after!

Author's Response: Of course she does, Kames is adorable :) haha thank you for the review

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Review #24, by xxx weasley xxx 

4th March 2007:
that was pretty kool but u said it was at a party where was the party huh huh well gtg bbbye

xxx weasley xxx

Author's Response: haha thanks for the review

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Review #25, by al3x 

4th March 2007:
lmfao yo dizzle! haha...LOVED this story, it was FAB. lily was so cute bless her, and James wiff the no kissing...The way yu worded it was great. Its an interesting thought actually...thats probably what would have happened if they met when they were young ^_^
Alex xx

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! :) I bet it would have happened when they were younger ;)

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