Haha, that small breaking moment for Seren was amazing. I loved it.
And Regulus being dumbfounded? Priceless.
I don't have too much to say about this chapter besides the fact that I'm falling in love with this story. :]
Alex.Author's Response: Hi again! Thanks so much for the review! haha, yes, all that sarcasm needs an outlet. It just built up with the frustration of that day and she popped. Also, Seren is usually the quite girl when in class so when she broke like that it's probably would have been a big shock to anyone except Aerona. Yay! I'm so glad you're loving it! ^_^ Thanks again for the awesome review! It's one of those ones that'll make me happy when I re-read it! Report Review
Haha, I think you have Regulus down to the 'T'! I love him as a character and to see other author's takes on him is a lovely treat. Which was why I was so excited to read this story in the first place.
Now, Regulus really doesn't like Serens friend. haha That sucks for her, unrequited love much? It would be hilarious if she ends up with Sirius instead of Regulus, whom she deems to be the best. And Seren is with Regulus instead of Sirius, who she deems to be best. I can see that happening.
Anyways, wonderful chapter. Didn't find any grammarical issues or anything of the like. Simply smashing! ;p And I have to say I love having this chapter in Regulus' POV.
Alex.Author's Response: Hi again! Thanks for the review! So glad you like it! I'm also really happy that people seem to like my Regulus interpretation. He's definitely one of my favorite characters and he's so much fun to explore since there's not much known about him. haha, That would be interesting. Very ironic which seems to happen to Seren quite often. :D Thanks again! Glad you liked Regulus's POV! Report Review
Haha, I can see a convorsation between Seren and Sirius. Sirius is all smooth and Seren stutters or something or the sort. That would be great. Oh - and then Regulus jumps in. Wow, I really want to hurry off to the next chapter instead of writing this review. But I'll write it anyways. haha :]
I like the flow so far. You have a steady pace, not too slow and not at all too fast. Your chapter lengths are fantastic as well. Well worth waiting for the validation process. Ha ha.
AlexAuthor's Response: Hi again! Thanks for the review! I love yours! Oh yes, Seren definitely loses all her cool when she's nervous. I'm not too sure if I'll have a convo between the two of them, but it does sound like a good idea. I can see it happening. I'm really glad you like the pacing. I tend to worry about that a bit. Always think I go too fast. I'm so glad I don't have to wait for validations anymore! Makes editting those little mistakes much easier. Thanks again! Glad you liked this! Report Review
Wow that would happen. haha Her BFF is in love with him and SHE is forced to be his partner. haha I really like the plot of this so far! Even though its only the first chapter.
I love the characterization of Regulus, or at least Seren's impression of him. And I think its cool how she describes Sirius. She doesn't call him the 'playboy' of the school like most stories do. That is just a theory anyways, JKR never actually said or described him as a playboy.
Anywho. I love the first chapter. I'm off to read more!
Alex.Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for the lovely review! I was a bit worried about that situation when I first started planning. Wasn't sure if it was too cliche or not, but, I'm really clad you liked it!
Also, I"m happy that you like my Regulus! I know he's a very complex character so I hope that shows. And I know what you mean about Sirius. I never understood where the 'playboy' characterization came from. I always figured that most of his attention is on his friends and possibly on his family issues. Thanks again! I'm really glad you liked it! Report Review
Oh my goodness why only four chapters so far? Haha, this has to be the most interesting story I've read in a while. And I really don't do next gen fics so the fact that this is so good is really awesome. haha :]
Anyways, wow I'm excited for the next chapter to come out.
I love your characterizations. Ted reminds me of Remus so much the way you've written him. (I'm having Remus withdrawl - I can't find any good Remus stories as of late! The world must be ending! haha) And you're writing is lovely!
Hope you update soon! Should I not review in the first couple days your next chapter comes out just re-request on the form for the chapter and i'll gladly come read and review!
Alex.Author's Response: The next story should be validated tomorrow (hopefully!)
I'll let you know :) the sixth chapter is also being betaed Report Review
Interesting idea you have here. I like where this seems to be going! Your characterization of Raven is nice, I really like her. She doesn't want to be dark, be this person she's become. But she has no choice. It's quite dark, I love it.
As far as grammar goes I didn't notice anything in this chapter. :] No tense lapses either, which is hard when you're using it like this. So kudos to you, because I couldn't do it.
Alex.Author's Response: Thanks! :D Report Review
Alright, so, basically I see NOTHING to be worried about with this story! It's magnificent. :] I adore it so much that I'm faving and making sure to check back for updates often! :]
Thanks for requesting my reviews! I'm glad I was able to give my thoughts on your story and get yet another lovely Marauder Era fic in my favs. haha
AlexAuthor's Response: :O Wow, I swear you're inflating my ego haha.
Thank you so much for all your praise and support, and for adding this to your favourites. Your reviews made my day, for sure :)
Thank you again,
Tilly Report Review
Oh my goodness shes adopted.
Clearly, I didn't see that one coming.
Haha, I was very very shocked!! haha But I adore the fact that I had no clue whatsoever!! Oh my goodness now I wonder what family she's from. This is an interesting turn of events. I wonder how Milla will take it... onward to find out! haha
Alex.Author's Response: Yes! The twist! I'm glad you liked it!
I suppose this is where I really wanted my story to start coming into its own. And you're right in that this is where the story will be headed from now on!
Thank you again for your charming review! :) Report Review
Haha, that kiss scene was amazing. I'd have been the one faking excuses and running away if I were Milla. That was just one impeccibly fantastic chapter. :]
Alex.Author's Response: Haha wasn't it awkward? I think she was in shock (well she was, I should know I wrote it haha)!
Thank you again for the glowing praise! Report Review
Mhm, I'm seriously loving the flow of this story. It's perfect as of right now. I think it almost fell over when I read that Sirius had to date Trelawney. Funny stuff! Anyways, I'm loving the bonds of friendship between the Gryf girls and the Gryf boys. Excellent job with characterization as well. I saw a couple grammarical errors but not too many to fuss over, I promise.
Wonderful chapter dear!
Alex.Author's Response: Okay, so I'd already rewritten this chapter (and chapter 3) so I'm glad the flow is good, because I sped it up! Such a relief to see you enjoy it!
And the characterization of my OC had been worrying me, so I'm over the moon you liked all the bonds and relationships!
Thank you for the lovely review! :) Report Review
Hey there! :] Okay, so since you're in the midst of making changes I'll tell you that this first chapter flowed very well. I don't think its off to a slow start in the least.
And I have to say that I like Milla's backround. The fact that she's muggleborn and thrust into a whole new exciting world, you seem to have grasped, is very challenging and nerve wracking so excellent job on the believability! :]
I'll probably be reviewing just about every chapter, just so you know. Since on the form I didn't specify how many chaps I review. haha :]
Nicely written first chapter!
Alex.Author's Response: Wow, I'm really glad you think it was believable! I've had a lot of criticism over the believability! But thank-you, I'm glad this chapter wasn't too slow, and you enjoyed the flow! :) Report Review
Wow, I like drunk Narcissa. haha
Okay so as far as I can tell, I really like Addie's characterization, and the characterization of the others as well. It's exactly as I picture the cannon to be like at Hogwarts. Save Rabastian. I figured he was the silent shadow behind Rodolfus. But I like this way better.
So, you have a wonderful story on your hands dear. :]
I'm adding it to my favs so I can be sure to see the update!
Alex.Author's Response: Alex,
Thanks for all the wonderful, thoughtful reviews and for faving! I didn't respond to each one, but I read them all very carefully, and I really appreciate hearing your thoughts. Hearing that my fic is almost exactly as you picture cannon Hogwarts is such a huge compliment--I really want to keep the story as close to cannon as possible.
I hope the next chapters live up to your expectations!
xoxo wenderbender Report Review
Geez, Rebastian is making MY heart pound. haha
I love his characterization, and the fact that Addie doesn't flirt back. haha its amazing!Author's Response: I'm happy to hear that the romance portions are going over well! That was one of the scenes I was most nervous about writing. Report Review
Awe, Remus is adorable. haha I feel bad that Addie like yelled NO. But in any case, I'm thinking it has something to do with her father.
Anyways, I'm seeing more and more personality shine through on Addie. I like her, she's no more a Mary Sue than you or I. Very believeable that shes getting crap for being a half-blood, and I like that you've keep what happened between her mother and father a secret all this time. Even though its slowly driving me mad. haha Report Review
Haha, forget Otto, Rabastian!!! Ha ha (Forget em all for Sirius ;p)
Anyways, excellent chapter, you're making me hate Alecto. I'm sure that's supposed to happen. haha Report Review
I like "Don't as don't tell."
So, I love your characterization of Sirius. It's amazing. And to be quite honest I'm finding this story a very good read. =] The flow is beautiful, not too rushed, no too slow.
Onward!Author's Response: Wow, "beautiful"? I'm blushing! ^.^ Report Review
This secret about Mr. Clarke is eating at my insides. haha I know most of my comments are on the plot, but I must say you have a wonderful one. :] I'll finish up the rest of the story in the morning!
For now, as far as characterization goes, I think you're doing pretty good! Is this your first story? Because if it is it doesn't really show.
I know that you said you wanted to know the thoughts on the later chapters, so I'll be getting to those first thing in the morning. :]
Well, if I have a sudden attack of insomnia I might do it in an hour or so but you get the point.
Alex.Author's Response: Oh dear, I hope it doesn't interfere with your digestion, but I'm very glad the mystery is getting to you. That's what it's supposed to do!
Good to hear about the characterization. Yes, it's my first fic, so I'm pretty nervous about it. I keep worrying that Addie is getting Mary Sueish! Thanks again for the reviews, they are much appreciated. Report Review
I forgot to mention in the last chapter review that having another Clarke running around is an EXCELENT twist! And that I'd like to know what happened to Mr. Clarke himself?
As far as this chapter goes. I love Addie/Kim more and more as I read them together. It seems as though Kim and Addie get along so well. Ha ha.
And I feel really bad for Snape. :/ But that's how it was for him, so Kudos to you!
Alex. Report Review
“Or a constipated horklump."
“I don’t think horklumps can get constipated.”
Had me at "Constipated" I tell you.
Since we are now in sixth year it seems to me as though Addie has become the silent type, save when with Zuz and Kim?
Great chapter! I enjoyed it. And I hope to see a short lived romance between Addie and Otto, only because I'd much rather see her with one of the Marauders. haha In any case. you've got a good story on your hands here!Author's Response: Oh yes, the Marauders do make an appearance...though I see you've read ahead, so you know all about that. Thank you again for all the wonderful reviews! Report Review
Okay I scrolled all the way down to write this: Whatever is going on between Mrs. Malfoy and her daughter is driving me batty. haha I wish Persephone would just curse her mother and get it over with. Though that wouldn't exactly be a good thing now, would it?
And right now I get the impression that Addie is one of the silent types? Well see. Back up to finish!
A few minutes later:
Okay, yeah, I like Addie's personality more when she's with people her own age. And Kim had be laughing. :]
Good job with chapter three!
AlexAuthor's Response: Oh I know, Persephone's passivity is annoying, but sadly I'm not sure things will change...truthfully, I rather like Gran Malfoy, so I think she'll win in the end. Woohoo for evil old ladies!
I'm glad you're liking Addie better. I think she's a little wary around adults, given her family situation. I never thought of her as the "silent" type before, but I like it...d'you mind if I borrow it for a later chapter? Just got a mini plot bunny...
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I believe, my dear, that you've gotten all the Pureblood personas spot on! haha :] Convincing and fantastic job on those uppity people. I loved when Addie met Sirius and she thought "Well he's a charmer... and he knows it."
Lovely chapter. :]
Alex. Report Review
Hey there! It's Aligiah from the forms! :D
Alright, off to a solid start! I like that you've made Addie into a Malfoy, and provided a glimpse into her character. I really want to know what the issues between Addie's mother and father are to the point where Mrs. Malfoy stepped in. However, it was indicated that Addie's father is muggleborn, in which case there wouldn't be much care on Mrs. Malfoy's part about taking her child and grandchild away.
Anyways, I'm off to the next chapter! Not much I can say about Addie's character at the moment. haha
Alex. :]Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I do love writing about the Malfoys and other pure blood families. They have the best (read: wierdest) names. Glad you picked up on the mystery surrounding Addie's father! That's a continuing theme throughout the story, so I can't promise you'll find out the truth any time soon... Report Review
Aww, the sorting was cute. I knew she was going to be a Gryf. lol
Good job!Author's Response: Cheers! :) Report Review
awow this is different. I've never read something like this. Is it a crossover?
I really like the way you formuated this chapter. I can understand some of what is going on. Other than that I also love the characterizations and the dialouge flows nicely with the characters and the descriptions.
Alex Report Review
I like Bianca. She's got a nice attitute to her, she reminds me of an irishwoman. Though we haven't seen her temper yet. I do like this plot line so far. Its nice.
George and Little Bee are like the perfect match. I can see it in real life. I can see George stunned by Bianca in Rome. lol. I can see his face, its priceless. Anyways.
All in all I like this so far. Good job with it. Feel free to re-request a review whenever the second chapter comes in.
AlexAuthor's Response: Thank you. She and the rest of the Gasparo family are my proud OC's. She pops up in a couple of stories, notably Worthy and Wedding Jitters. She gets him good in WJ and shows him that is only a novice at pranks. Report Review
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