Very very cute!Author's Response: Thank you, thank you very much!
Who is it???
This was great, I just want to know who it is! Is it Ginny? Is it Ron? Is it an OC??? I'm dying to know!
Good imagery, a bit hard to read at times, but got through it alright.
Tell me who it is!!! :P
KariAuthor's Response: aw thanks your review was so nice. and to tell you she was an OC. And if you could tell me how it was hard to get thought that would help me improve as a writer.
Thanks again! Report Review
Hey Steve. I know it's been a long time since you've updated. (a really long time) but was wondering if you still have this story in you just busting to get out? If so, I'll definately be here to read it! I great enjoyed your others as well!
Best of luck! Report Review
Oh, come on, you have to resolve that! No Ron, I don't really love you, it's been Harry all along. hehe, I'll keep watching!Author's Response: I wish!! But, I'm sad to say, I really don't know how I could.... Report Review
Well, I finally made it through the story. It was fun to read, but every single one of your characters were completely out of character. And I know that's fine and all, I was just pointing it out. I mean, could you have made the girls seem any more helpless? And what was with all the kissing? I'm sorry, it just didn't seem plausable at all. But I suppose it's the writers perogative. It seemed way too fast paced, and rather choppy, but I can't really say that I would have wanted to read any more of it. Wow, that sounded a bit harsh, but I didn't mean it in that way. I'm not trying to be rude, but you seriously should have gotten a beta. Anyhow, wishing you the best of luck in all your future fics.
utkari02Author's Response: Thanks. However, I would like to defend myself on saying that this story was my first and I had no idea what to write and how to do it. I just rushed it because of the actual feedback I was getting and still do. Anyway, if you wish to view my changes, read my newer plot. That is greatly improved I think. Harry Potter and The Four Heirs needs a little work on it, but it is okay. This story and its sequal WILL be rewritten to my new and better writing style. Report Review
Wow, great chapter! I'm not a big fan of Ron, so I'm kind of glad that you made his character rather shallow in the dreams. haha. And I'm liking how you're portraying Draco so far as well.
Can't wait to read more! Report Review
This is fabulous! This is my first story I'm reading on HPFF. I'm a big H/Hr Shipper, and did a search, and on the first page of results, yours was the only one that sounded interesting. I'm glad I decided to read it! I'm looking forward to finding out how this tale unfolds!
~Kari Report Review
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