Nice, but now... well it seems more like DH then your story... sorry but that;s just how I see it, I'll still read it but I think you need to make a few more minor changes k? ^_^Author's Response: ok, well what i'm trying to do is make it like DH but different. so at the start it will be really similar but as it goes on it will be different. you dig?
for instance bobbie is going to have a huge impact on the story line (like how they get things and stuff) and there will be a lot more of the secret agent-type espionage and stealth things (which bobbie will do because she knows how from working with her mum.) there might also be a couple of schooling things like the trio (mostly hermione) teaching bobbie because she was sort of home-schooled and didn't learn all the things that they did.
i hope thet helped you. Report Review
haha I love Asher, nice character and she sounds like me espcially being slightly clumsy ^_^ Nice strpry line I can't wait to read moreAuthor's Response: I try really hard to make it so that the characters are related to someone whose normal, not one of the girls who is extraordinarily gorgeous with long legs, super-model thin... she's got everyday qualities which I think is why she is especially like-able. I hope that you continue to read, and thanks for the review! Report Review
that was so sad, so meaningful, so brillant and well writtenAuthor's Response: Thank you very, very much! Report Review
Nice chapter, I hear a plot begining lol ^_^ can't wait Report Review
LMAO sorry it was so darn funny lolAuthor's Response: thanks! Report Review
love the story so much, it's very well written and so exciting, I can't wait untilt he next chapter ^_^Author's Response: Thank you!
~LB Report Review
hmm. welll that was quite interesting, I like how you caught the BLack's, very well ^_^Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! - Jenn Report Review
hmm... no don't stop there... aww I was intersted lol, I can't wait for the next chapter, the story s very captivating.Author's Response: Aw, thanks Innocences Shadow! I'm pleased I have you hooked - the next chapter should be up either late today, or early tomorrow. Report Review
ah excellent chapter, so much emotion I love it, very well written Reggy ^_^Author's Response: aw, thank you. :D
Reggy, looks so funny to see in my reviews. haha. Report Review
well that was extremly interesting and well written, you've portayed the Black's very well if I say so myself ^_^ love the story can't wait until the next chapterAuthor's Response: Thank you! I will try to get around to it sometime soon, balancing three stories is a bit of a challenge but I couldn’t help myself. I am just so fascinated with this family. Report Review
nicechapter,I like how you keep giving her a new edge but never really changing her, it's really interesting, also I like how your plot is good and solid unlike mine lol, can't wait until the next chapter ^_^Author's Response: Awwh, don't put your stories down!
But thanks so much! Report Review
nice, now I really want them to fiqure it out, I want them to KNOW who Price Charming/Mr. Night is ^_^Author's Response: and they will... why sirius will find out in the next 1 or 2 chapters... excited??? Report Review
wow that was so sad and beautiful, I can't wait until next chapter, I really like your style of writing Report Review
Wow what'll happen next? Really good chapter ^_^ Report Review
wait what is that in the prteview! uhoh, I'm gonna be on the edge of my chair waiting for your next update : P
Great chapter, 'Not even a pony?' lol you had me frightened for a secondAuthor's Response: hehe. thanks so much Report Review
can't wait until n ext time, I really want to find out what will happen next you know? Report Review
must... stop... laughing... lol, loved this chapter, very funny...hmm ... what will happen to poor Sprout? can't wait to find out.Author's Response: tee hee, yay *giggle*
idk what happened to her, but it can't be good. Report Review
Yes another chapter LOVED IT! lol keep up the good work I reallly really love this story
Author's Response: thankyou. took forever to be validated with formatting issues and such but yeah. next chappie (entitled one tequil, two tequila, three tequila floor!) has been submitted so fingers crossed for a quick validation. Report Review
oh dark and spooky chapter, LOVED IT NEVER COULD HATE IT MwahAuthor's Response: hehe yay! *muah!* Report Review
Excellent chapter, I adore this story, and I love Sirius/Jane go them Woooho
Mwah ^_^Author's Response: TYVM Innocence:) I'm up to chapter 14 on it now, but I had to make much shorter chapters, which I HATE doing.
hmm. cool story, it needs more action though, you know?Author's Response: Tally: Yeah, it's just more diffucult with two people. Plus I'm having fun giving eileen mini-cliffies to work wiht :D
Eileen: Be patient, its coming. . .I think. . . . Report Review
Nope, nothin is wrong with your grammar or spelkling, poor you science? I've got the first ff today but until then I'll stick to this computerAuthor's Response: yep. science. bah. and it was my choice! mine!!!
whyyyyyyyy!???? Report Review
Well isn't that sweet, I can just see her with pigtails hugging Sirius, cute!
I think that if you make it longer instead of just speech it would be alot better, but I still like it anyway,
^_^Author's Response: Thanks!
I know I have a lot of dialog, eh?
Thanks for the advice, you're the best! Report Review
..three hours later
excellent chapter, I couldn't stop laughing, I know Wakanda in my hero now,
Author's Response: tee hee...laugh away...just as long as it doesn't turn into *MANICAL LAUGHTURE* muhahahahahahaha *cough cough*
Wakanda...my Report Review
Wow that was so well written if you wanted me to tell you how to improve it I wouldn't have a clue it is perfectly done, I think you are talented, incredibly in fact, you have a gift with words if you ask most people
WOW!Author's Response: Oh wow thank you SO much shadow!! Report Review
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