I adore seeing things through Crabbe's eyes. Where the skies are 'an interesting shade of yellow vomit.' All in all - well done.Author's Response: Aww, thanks :* Report Review
Aw, there goes my hope of her doing Lupin...
I SO KNEW she'd get it!!!
Okay, I so hoped she would, but that's practically the same thing.
About the job, I mean.
I want her and Ollie to like make babies and have a happily ever after and all, but I also want Lupin to give her some sign of attraction, you know... Not something dirty and complicated, just like acknowledging her in that way... You know?
(Ach, sorry for ranting.)
Anyways - WHOO! Keep on keeping on, you rock, etc. :DDD Report Review
There's something perfect about the way you write dialogue, it's like - when I read what Suzie says to Denise, etc. it actually sounds like something a teenager would say to her best friend, and anything that is profound or witty has a NATURAL feel to it, unlike other authors who either write to make themselves feel smart and it comes out stiff and formal, or the type who get too familiar and the conversations sound unreal because they lack social boundaries. Somehow your characters seem to actually have THOUGHTS.
Does that make sense? Report Review
So, I was a wee bit confused by the last chapter, it seems like the plot turned to another direction, one I wasn't exactly expecting.
I hope him and Annette work this all out.Author's Response: what don't you get? maybe I can clarify it in the next chapter. Report Review
I'm loving all the Marauders wrassling scenes, all we need to add is some jello.Author's Response: Haha, wrassling! I'm not sure about the jellow, though, I think they'd look better just all sweaty and dirt-streaked. Too bad it never happened that way for them. Report Review
I really love your writing style, you developed a strong voice in the first paragraph and managed to keep it throughout the rest of the chapter. :)Author's Response: Thank you! And thanks for taking the time to review. Report Review
Yay, update! We want to hear more about her mum, and we want to see Bliss again!Author's Response: Lol, i know, i know! I'm working on it! Tehe. Thanks for R and R! Report Review
Hah, well good on Lily, they do need a bit more drama in their lives.
(Sarcasm)Author's Response: haha i know really huh? Report Review
AW! Yay, they looove each other!Author's Response: Well, Grady loves Annette lol we'll see how she feels... thanks for all the reviews! I enjoyed them so much and I'm glad you liked my story! I should be typing the next chapter right now, but I'm taking a holiday. I think I deserve it, all those chapters in a month and a half is pretty good. Report Review
Hah, he's a clever boy. I enjoyed his fierceness over the prank, it was a low thing to do of them.Author's Response: yeah but when do weasely's fight fair? lol Report Review
Tha was absolutely adorable. His disapointment with Rose and his jealousy helped balance the large romance in this chapter. :) Report Review
Oo-er! Annette can be so cute, and Grady so stubborn. Loved the chapter.Author's Response: Finally someone likes Annette! everyone hates her for some strange reason but I absolutely adore her. Report Review
Poor boy, he feels left out.Author's Response: if i was in the weasley family, i would too. Report Review
I'm glad she touched his hand, I was sad for him, I wish that his family knew him better. Report Review
Hah, Petra and Fred, that's cute. :)Author's Response: FINALLY yes! yes! aren't they cute? I think so. Report Review
Grady's really growing on me, I'm surprised at exactly how easy you make it to relate and adore a boy. :PAuthor's Response: hehe i know i wish he was real, he's adorable! Report Review
That's cute at the end, I like how he can go from proud to modest. Report Review
Omg, he's so cute and obsessed! Report Review
Ooh interesting, why'd she do that, I wonder? Report Review
I love how into Annette he is, it's cute. Report Review
I can hear Grady's voice clearly, thanks so much... I do love having auditory hallucinations! But no, really - I love his character, he has great depth, most authors don't like to show their creations in all forms of light, you seem to do that and keep them consistent without being predictable. :)Author's Response: ahh i try, I can literally see grady in my mind and the weird thing is, he's not based off anyone. I just made him up completely where as the main character in my other story is slightly based off one of my friends. But all the characters in this story are completely made up, well except for Annette's appearance, I got the idea off of one of my classmates she's so tiny and her bf is so tall it's really funny but sweet at the same time. Report Review
"I debate on whether to leave or go," aren't those the same thing? :PAuthor's Response: lol yeah they are... i think it was a typo... but I'm not sure I'd have to go back and read it, he might have just been sarcastic, but I have to read it in the context. Report Review
I like Grady, he seems interesting. Report Review
I was about to ask when he'd show up! :)Author's Response: Tehe. Who doesn’t love Teddy?! Report Review
I have such goosebumps, I'm worried about James.Author's Response: Ooo, was it really a goosebump chapter?
SWEET! You have yet to see what happens with young James! Report Review
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection