Awww; that was just so cute!!! I love it!!
Congrats; 10 out of 10!!
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Ooooh; i love it. I like the idea, i think it's going to be great; update soon.
I can make you a banner, if you want. Email firstname.lastname@example.org
xxAuthor's Response: thank you sooo much! im glad u like it! Report Review
So, firstly, congrats on all your high school stuff.
Secondly, I really like it. I think it's started well, and it's new. Tatyana sounds like a pretty funky character.
A couple of questions though:
How can she fly? Like, does she just jump or something, and she doesn't come back down?
Surely if she could fly, she'd have worked out something was going down?
And at the beginning of chapter one, did you say her parents were flying, cause that too would indicate she must know something was going on.
Anyway, I like it. Update soon. xAuthor's Response: Ok, first of all, thank u for reviewing. I love that people are taking a positive outlook on this story. The flying's are 2 different flyings. When I said flying for the parents I meant in their private helacopter. I should have been more clear. When she flys she just consentrates on being lifted up and then she is flying. Since them going away is a fairley common experience she thinks that it's just like the other times. Since she's seven she doesn't think that flying is really weird persay. Thanx for being interested enough to ask questions though. Report Review
I really like it, it's new, and I don't think I've read anything like it in ages.
I love stories that show Lily Evans in a different light than this perfect, clean, angel.
The only thing is, the chapters are very short.
Well done though!
xxxAuthor's Response: Yeah, sorry about that, but thanks Report Review
Wow, I really liked it. I like the way the song is written in, and the way you've gone back in time, as such.
Cathy.xxAuthor's Response: Thank you :)
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the plot, and the cliffhanger are very good. I like the idea, and the way you brought all the ideas into it, in the first chapter.
However, there is a lot of speech, and not as much description, and putting more description in would help bulk the story out, and stop it from seeming so short. It would also help people imagine whats going on.
But other than that, tis good.
P.S. Email me at email@example.com and I'll make you a banner :) Author's Response: Thanks for the review Report Review
I wouldn't normally Review halfway through validated chapters, but I'd like to say, Blaise sounds hot, i'd do him ;)
And I wanted to congradulate you, for calling Grand theft Autumn, one of my favourite songs, by it's real name, and not, as people seem to do in England, "Where Is Your Boy tonight" Which annoys the hell out of me :)
So yeah, well done :)
xxxAuthor's Response: lol, i would too.. :P
that annoys the hell out me too! lol, i had to reread that sentence like eight times, cuz, with the way you worded it and me being kinda out of it today, i kept thinking you thought it was called "Where is your boy" and i got confused..lol
thanks for reviewing! :) Report Review
Aw; this chapter is so cute! I like the way you've kind of thrown the marauders in there, but they aren't hugely important to the story. I love the way you decribe the way they act, and the little thing about flowery curtains.
Another Chapter Soon Please?
xxxAuthor's Response: Thank you, and dont you just hate flowery curtains ??
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I really like it, it's very descriptive, and i almost felt I was there. I like the way the sentences are split between complex, and simple, sentences, and the way you've written about the character, Markku. And what an amazing name, Markku!! I love it!!
Author's Response: Thanks Alot Soph :)
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Oh, I like-y.
It's nice, I like the length it's at, I don't think it needs to be longer.
I want to give Sirius a hug!
Soph xxxAuthor's Response: Well, thank-y! Lol. Thank you very much for replying. I appreicate the email and yes, I think everyone would like to hug Sirius, even if they don't know it! /D Report Review
I read this one before it got posted on here, because Cathy was nervous about posting her first Story, and i wrote, on a scrappy piece of paper, my review, and this is what i've put...
"wow, it's different. I love the way you've written Lily in a different light, because normally, people make her seem like a goody two shoes angel. But I like the idea of her being abit bitchy. No, in this story, alot bitchy. She's almost like a chariacture. No, I don't know how to spell that. Can you tell?
Anyway, I love the idea, and it's very well written, and believable. Congrats sweet!"
Love Soph xxxAuthor's Response: Thanks Soph. And, yeah, I do love writing about Lily being something other than perfect, it so much more fun :)
Cathy.xx Report Review
Want to know my honest opinion? It's rubbish.
No, I'm joking, obviously. I think its actually pretty good, i mean, it's a brilliant beginning, and I'm sure this story'll go great, and stuff, and Everyone will love it. It is, honestly, really good. And this is the story your putting Lyric in then. Lyric is Cathy's favourite name, she wants to call her first daughter Lyric.
Anyway. Just mind your spacing.
Love Soph x
Author's Response: Thanks Soph...
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This has amazing potential. I love it. You can actually understand how the comment got escalated into an arguement. And I think you've described the characters from the shell that we know into a group of friends, really well.
I don't think I can wait a week!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm really glad you think so! Report Review
I think I'm actually in love with this story. It's amazing!!
I love the way you've made it go along with the events in POA. And just shown it from another point of view, and only occassionally bringing Harry Potter into it. It's brilliant. Update soon.
Author's Response: Reviews like that make me feel so bad about not writing. Oh God, I'm sorry! :( Report Review
This story has great potential. It starts very well, and you've really got the child's perspective on a divorce, a brilliant discription. I also loved the way you've described Draco and Lucius, you got their character down to a T.
Update soon, ok?
E-mail me at firstname.lastname@example.org and I'll see about making you a banner. =)
Soph xxxAuthor's Response: okay! thanks heaps!!! I really apreciate your review Report Review
This story is really good. I'm hooked. I love Kay; she's such a beautiful and strong character. She has the potential of being a Mary-Sue, but you seem to write that out of her, making her seem much more humble. I love her! And I love the pace of the story... sometimes stories can go too fast, or too slow... but this goes at a nice pace. And 4am lessons with snape?? Poor girl!! Update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot :) it means a lot to me!! Report Review
I love it. I lvoe the way you write, you're really talented.
Oh; i just wanted to give Draco a big hug... And i can't say that with a lot of fics that try to make Draco out as being helpless and sweet and stuff. But it's so... Ohhh. I loved it.
Pleeease update soon. Please?
WEll I'm off to read Second Chances.
Author's Response: Thank you!
You know, I have also read a lot of fics that show Draco as a real softie. I try to incorporate that in here a bit, but (hopefully) not to the point where you can't believe it. He's rather like a hard Klondike ice cream sandwich, in my opinion: cold, hard, and dark on the outside, but soft and light on the inside. ^_^ Report Review
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