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Review #1, by LostmyheartPermission: Start Running

14th July 2016:

I just wanted to drop by and give you a Hot Seat review!

I thoroughly enjoyed this, it was so much different than from any other one-shot story I've read. It was difficult for me to pinpoint who the narrator was, but my first initial thought was Barty Crouch Jr. (?)
It was pretty dark and intense, how angry the narrator was at Lucius, the betrayer and the "fake" Death Eater. I loved how he was bad at acting/pretending and bought his way out of trouble. A coward.

It was a great story and I love your writing style!

- Avi

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Review #2, by LostmyheartWith Love & Hope : Chapter 1

30th April 2016:

I saw on the new edition of the Parseltongue Prophet that you've recently posted this story, so I wanted to drop by and say hello.

I actually felt lucky, because I looove Dramione, so it was interesting to see where you'd go with this. Especially since it was so short. I really liked the way you wrote it, it felt like the most important parts of their relationships were highlighted, those that showed us where they were in that particular time of their relationship.

It was short, maybe too short for my taste, because I really liked it! I hope you'll write another one like this, just longer, because you do it so well. I really liked the ending, where he finally asks her to marry her and that he does it with a trembling voice. It really shows that he cares for her, and he was definitely nervous for her answer. So sweet.

- Avi

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Review #3, by LostmyheartBroken : Why Did You Break A Perfectly Good Heart?

30th April 2016:
Wow, Angie.

This was a really intense, short read. I didn't expect it to be so angsty, but you did it SO WELL. I am loving your writing style, you've developed so much these past few months, it's incredible.

Especially that opening line:
His harsh whisper washed over her like a broken melody, one that had been so beautiful at one point of time, but was now merely a shell of what it used to be.


I love how you captured Hermione's feelings, she's so conflicted and the way she wonders in the end is heartbreaking.

It seems like you thrive in these dark stories, and I love them because you write them so beautifully!

I'm so glad I stopped by and I'm looking forward to new stories from you!

Love and hugs,
- Avi

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing.

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Review #4, by LostmyheartFlatline: One

11th April 2016:

I'm finally here for our review swap :) And I've got to say that I am so happy that I picked this story! I actually didn't know what I was going into, I didn't read anything about the story and just started reading. It was a fantastic start, I love those kind of mysteries/surprises - at least that's how it felt to me - and it was such a nice twist right at the beginning. The wife didn't even know of his daughter, and it seems like his sons didn't want to speak about it. Something must've happened since father and daughter became estranged?

I loved the both parts, the POV of the young wife and the POV of the man's daughter, Dorcas. They were both really interesting in their own unique way and I love your writing style! It's so nice and easy to follow, yet it has this sort of quality over it. I don't know how else to describe it.

I might plunge right into the second chapter, because this first one is so good!
Thank you for swapping with me.

- Avi

Author's Response: Hi there, and thanks for the swap!

I'm happy you picked this story too. It didn't get much notice. I suppose that not many people are into war stories with minor characters. But I was compelled to write this one for the challenge.

I hope you were able to read the rest of the story. It explains a lot of things that I left open in the first chapter.

Thanks again for the swap!


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Review #5, by LostmyheartA Marauders' Tale: September 1, 1971

5th March 2016:
Hi there! I'm Avi, and I'm Lostmyheart in the Forums as well.

This was such a lovely start to your story. I liked the different POVs, all the Marauders were included and getting to see how they were before starting their first day at Hogwarts :)
They all come from different households and it was odd to see Peter as a half-blood. I had to go check but I couldn't find anything about his relatives. And poor Remus, it must've been hard to start a new life at Hogwarts and having to hide such a huge part of himself (the lycanthropy).

I like how you portrayed their thoughts and feelings, it's their first time leaving home, of course they'd look at their homes and think of their families. Though Reg was only a year older than Sirius was, he'd leave for Hogwarts as well on that same day :) And I was a little surprised by the fact that James is related to the Blacks? Though distant, as you wrote. I wonder how... So I look forward to see what you'll come up with there :)

I'm excited to see where this goes and what you'll come up with!

- Avi

Team Ouroboros
"The End is only the beginning"

Author's Response: Thank you! I love the Marauders so much and I feel like we are missing a huge chunk of the story not knowing what happened while they were at school and not knowing HOW/WHY the things that we do know happened came about. They are definitely my favorite characters to write about. However, I do have to politely disagree about Regulus being older than Sirius, he's a year younger than Sirius and would start Hogwarts during the Marauders second year. I did double check before replying to you though in case I was remembering the information incorrectly and needed to change it. Again, thank you for your review and the current plan it to submit a new chapter every Tuesday.

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Review #6, by LostmyheartAt Least Once : I Had To Do It

18th February 2016:

I'm here for the Slytherin Hot Seat thread :D

Wow, this is such a sweet story! Despite the slapping and name-calling :b But seriously, it was sweet and funny. I liked how the punch she made in third year changed the way he looked at her. I imagine he must've thought things through while trying to get that red handprint off his cheek, haha.

Of course she's in the library, she always is, and I've always pictured Draco as a smart boy - so it seems likely that he'd hang out there as well from time to time.

I really feel like you've stayed true to Hermione's character, though people might say otherwise because he kissed him back, but you really did in my opinion. Teenagers are unpredictable, I certainly liked and disliked the class bully, so it wouldn't be surprising if she did too. (just sayin').

It's been awhile since I've read a Dramione, I think... I really should start reading more. I miss it :) So it was definitely a good idea to start with your story, and I hope frankie05 liked it!

- Avi

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Review #7, by LostmyheartForbidden Wanderings: A Surprising Encounter

18th February 2016:
Hi Nix!

I'm here for the Slytherin Review Tag thread. I can't believe I haven't read this before! It's just my kind of story, involving Draco of course, but that he isn't that evil boy he seems to be.
This is exactly how I've imagined him to be, a boy who is being forced to be the way he is in the books, hating mudbloods and Harry. Instead he's this more thoughtful character who wants more to his life than hating.

You wrote this so wonderfully well, and I love his thoughts about the Thestral! Even comparing himself to the creature. And I laughed at the comment about the bloody Hippogriffs! Haha :D So nice!

I really enjoyed this short story of yours!

- Avi

Author's Response: Hi Avi! So glad someone finally revived the Slytherin Review Tag! I do love Draco and I really enjoyed the idea of this story but I still don't think it's as great as it could have been. But I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it and believed he was realistic. Thank you so much for this lovely review!


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Review #8, by LostmyheartHitched: Act I

13th January 2016:
Hi Penn!

Thank you so much for such a wonderful story! I loved it!
It was so well-written, are you crazy? Especially the beginning, wow. You're extremely talented. I liked the way you described their situation, their feelings, how Nymphadora felt throughout the whole story. I could connect with her so easily, and with Remus too.

I can't remember the last time I read a Lupin/Tonks story, so thank you! It was refreshing and I can't believe it's dedicated to me!!! It fits my preference; sad stories. Because we all know what's going to happen later, and ugh... the happy ending you gave this story was so bittersweet at the same time.

LOVED IT. And again, thank you!

- Avi


Author's Response: Thanks Avi for the review. Great to know that you loved the story so much. Another chapter shall be coming up soon so be on the look-out. :)

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Review #9, by LostmyheartThe Serpent of Slytherin: Mother

12th November 2015:
Gee ;___;

My heart is breaking, you did wonderfully well with writing a story about the Basilisk and even one that almost made me cry.
Crying over a basilisk, oh my god. That's something I never thought I'd come close to!

It was a weird thing for it to call Salazar a Mother, but then again - it does not know any better. And I love it's logic thinking, why would Mother tell it to drink the tainted blood? Mother makes no sense. It sort of shows that it isn't evil against the mudbloods by birth.

And then it waited all those years!!! That's what made me so sad... it still longed after Mother, to rest and feel safe. I love how you describe the life it's had in between Salazar and Tom, it seems like time just flew by and it didn't notice it itself, and just kept on waiting.

Gee, I love your writing and this was really a wonderful read! I can't believe you managed to make something like the Basilisk seem so innocent and lovable.

Only you can do it. 10/10.

- Avi

Author's Response: Avi! ♥

I really don't feel bad for the feels, you've made me feel worse :p
The Basilisk is quite pitiful under this perspective, indeed. Although a more "canon" one would have the creature be evil, I went with the fact that it's a hunter, blood-thirsty yes, but only because it's carnivore. Snakes aren't evil :D

Animal instinct reaches out for the mother as soon as birth (who knows, maybe even more); this usually applies to warm-blooded animals like mammals. Motherly instinct and whatnot. I know most snakes don't have that but anacondas, for example, have been shown to protect their offsprings during the first months.
But I also know that a "mother snake" is a myth, as they are born fit for survival and won't have a grown-up snake there (except maybe for rattlesnakes that sometimes eat their young), nursing them.
I just went with the fact that it's a world of magic and if there can be a three-headed dog named Fluffy, I could get away with a puppy-like Basilisk, hehe :p (crediting: puppy resemblance was pointed out by Rose [toomanycurls] at some point in the past)

Yes, I also really enjoyed writing its thoughts that way. It'd make sense that an animal wouldn't differentiate "tainted" from "pure" blood, as those definitions are based on birth status and it would mean wizards and muggles are different on a biological basis. And that would mean Muggleborns are what, mutations? As I'm writing this, I'm thinking of superheroes like Superman and Spiderman. Actually, that's a pretty fun trail of thoughts, I might need to write it down.

Well, I actually left out a bit of exploration of the Lake and the actual encounter with the Squid, it felt unnecessary and just prolonged the read. Other than that, it's not like the Basilisk had much to do beyond exploring the caves and waiting to be released again.
I've often been jealous of parseltongue and I think it's silly that a huge, monster snake was left to wait down there for so long. Not that I'm saying releasing it on students was good, but you know, the responsabilities of having a pet imply taking care of it. In a better, more fitted habitat (omg, Basilisk habitat. Need to write that down!).

Coming from you, Avi, this is a serious compliment, thank you so very much ♥

Much love,

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Review #10, by LostmyheartTom. : Ginny.

12th November 2015:
I nearly cried at the end!

Oh god, Erin. You. Are. Brilliant.
I've always wanted to know what it was like for Ginny to be so obsessed with a diary in her first year, and your version of it is so, so sad. I can almost relate to her feelings, who are you?. And then to have someone like Tom, whatever he is in that state, see you, hear you, listen to you... that must have been so nice.

Poor Ginny, what has Erin done to you? And to my poor heart. *sigh*. It's okay, it bleeds anyway whenever I come near Erin's writing.

This was amazing, Erin. I can't believe I've missed out on so much while I've been gone.

- Avi

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Review #11, by Lostmyheartturn to dust. : five.

12th November 2015:
Erin, you magnificent writer!

Five short stories into this chapter?? And with so few words??? Omg. You're incredible.
They're so well written and intense at the same time, I really can't see who's who when I'm reading them and I sort of don't feel the need to know who they are.
They're so sad, most of them I think, and I nearly swooned from reading the first story. I've missed your writing!!!

Love you, and happy Hot Seat week!

- Avi

*throws the 10/10 after you*

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Review #12, by Lostmyheartlow tide: a meditation

11th November 2015:
Hi Kristin!

Thank you for swapping with me :)
This story was so sweet and heartbreaking. Ugh, I don't really know where to start. It seems like George finds it hard to move on? But at the same time he seems to enjoy life, just not in the same way as he used to do. He thinks about Fred a lot, which is understandable, and for a moment I thought he'd do something drastic. But then Angelina and Lee came, which was a very sweet moment.

The ending, it gave this sort of 'life moves on' kind of feeling. Is that right? With the tide thing.
I wish it was longer, because I would love to know what George has been through and I wonder how long it's been since he lost Fred.

A truly heartbreaking story! It always is, when it's about George missing Fred. You did very well!

- Avi

Author's Response: Avi! Thank you, I'm so glad you thought this was a touching story. And yeah, there is a definite element of George struggling to move on, and also the beginning of his acceptance that life will go on. But I did leave it kind of abstract intentionally, so that readers can connect with it in their own way and draw their own conclusions. I like your interpretation of the end and how you decided that. :)

I'm glad you liked the moment with Angelina and Lee, too - I think that, as two of Fred's best friends, they'd be suffering a lot too, albeit in a different way from George, but they've still lost a lot and they all share a lot of memories together.

Thank you so much for the swap and for your kind review! ♥

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Review #13, by LostmyheartLivewire: Jolt

11th November 2015:
Hi Kaitlin!

Wow, this story is amazing *_* like... wut. You write so exceptionally well, it's so easy to imagine everything you type. I love how damaged they are and yet still capable of loving each other. It was an intense read but I liked it nevertheless. And now that I think about it, I'm not sure who's who, but I get this idea that it is Dean's thoughts we follow.

I really enjoyed this one-shot! And I love the pairing, always have, and you wrote a very lovely piece about them!

- Avi

Author's Response: Hi Avi,

Thank you so much. I'm glad that you were able to imagine what I was talking about. It might sound morbid, but I really enjoyed trying to write a balance of damage and love.

It's so interesting to see what each person thinks in regards to who is speaking. In my mind, this is Seamus, but really there is no right and wrong at all.

Thanks again for dropping by!


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Review #14, by LostmyheartThe Department of Spectral Affairs: Darkness

25th October 2015:

I'm sorry I'm a little late with this, but it's still October :b
I LOVE this story! It's so beautifully written, I am obsessed with your descriptions. 800, you are a very talented writer. I just can understand how you made this so soft and yet it's so tragic at the same time. It's such a sad ending for Regulus but you made it seem so peaceful to him - despite the coldness - and then to end it on a positive note still. Wow.

I love this, I absolutely love this and I wish it was more than 3,000 words! Like, I could just gobble up your writing forever and ever.

- Avi


Thank you so so so much! I had to look around and check to make sure you were talking to me about enjoying my description because usually, I am SO BAD at it. So that really means a lot *hugs*

And there will be more of this story I PROMISE. As soon as I find the time and energy to write regularly again...

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Review #15, by LostmyheartScars from Tomorrow: Scars from Tomorrow

17th September 2015:
Nix! Oh my god, this story was so sweet and intense at the same time.

I feel like crying.

It's been YEARS since I've read a Drarry (that's what it's called, right?) and I absolutely loved this story of yours. To read it in Draco's perspective was really great, since he was the one holding information from Harry. My heart nearly broke when Harry realized what he meant with stopping what they were doing, that Draco didn't mean to stop hiding but to totally stop it. Poor Harry!

I love how Harry is so persistent, so stubborn - like he is in the books. I've always thought Draco was a bit TOO obsessed with Harry, so it sort of fits with a hunger for one another :P

I loved this story, I enjoyed reading it so much and suddenly I was at the end (it wasn't very long to begin with but you know what I mean - hehe)

Enjoy your week on the Slytherin Hot Seat!
- Avi

Author's Response: HI AVI! Aww, don't cry! I'm glad you enjoyed the Drarry, though! Yes, that's the correct name. I love writing Draco so it was so easy tapping into him again, and I really enjoyed writing this story, even though it's so sad. I wanted to keep Harry and Draco as canon as I could while still making it seem like this relationship could actually happen. I think Draco and Harry both are very obsessed with each other which is why I totally agree with you that the pull is there!

And don't fret! I do want to write more of them, prequels and sequels to this one-shot, so hopefully you will see them again! It just may take a while...

Thank you so much for this lovely review, I wasn't even expecting it! But I very much enjoyed reading it!


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Review #16, by LostmyheartForgetting: Exquisite

30th August 2015:
Wow, Angie, this is VERY different from what your usual style!

It was very gripping... I had no idea, no feeling of how it would end and then BAM. There is was.
I'm still a little confused though. It seems like, if I understood it correctly, that she liked him, told him and then he rejected her? Not feeling the same or something like that.
It's kind of a dark story (obviously) but you've kept it light which I really like.

I hope you had fun trying a different writing style! It's really good.

Lots of hugs,

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much for the lovely review!

I'm glad you found it gripping and that the ending caught you by surprise. I'm sorry you were confused but you seem to have gotten it perfectly as that's what happened =) I went back and smoothed over some bits so hopefully what happened would be a little clearer now.

Thank you!

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Review #17, by LostmyheartTurbulence: Prologue

30th August 2015:
Hi Erin!

Our lovely Penny from the pit recommended your story in my status, so here I am.
This is a really interesting start, I've never really learned what bipolar is so this is very intriguing to read about. I wonder what you'll put Astoria through in America, she'd probably never hear about the Dark Lord's return when she's a teen.

I love your writing as usual, I could totally picture little Tori run around screaming "Ana!" She did seem a little weird just running around all the time like that, but to diagnose her with mania? That was surprising. I'm really excited to read the other chapters, which I will do later since I have other stories to read today.

You're doing great!! 10/10

- Avi

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Review #18, by LostmyheartFirewhiskey: Chapter 1

29th August 2015:
Hi Kaitlin!

Oh. My. God. I can't believe you managed to write this pairing, and so beautifully. I have to be honest, it was almost cringe-worthy in the end, NOT BECAUSE OF THE WRITING but because of the pairing. She's so old and she has seen him grow up since he was eleven, so to imagine her kiss with him is a little unsettling.
Seriously though, you did amazeballs. I always love your writing, your way to describe things are so natural and I love their conversations.

Thank you for such a sweet read! And I believe it's the first time I've read a Charlie story, post-war. It was really nice.

- Avi

Author's Response: Hi Avi!

Thank you so much for dropping by to review this.

The pairing is indeed a little bit cringeworthy, but I tried to make it as realistic as possible. The kiss is definitely meant to be confusing.

Yay for first time Charlie post-war!


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Review #19, by LostmyheartConstant Vigilance: Nymphadora

29th August 2015:

As short as this was, it was incredibly well-written. I loved it!
I just didn't see that ending coming. I thought it'd be Remus when the face was described as scarred. What a surprise, which really shouldn't be because of the story's title.

I really enjoyed reading this, excellent writing and execution of the plot.

- Avi

Author's Response: Thank you Avi, I really always enjoy hearing that.

Haha, Remus never even crossed my mind... but yeah the scars could apply to him as well... sorry for all the confusion xD


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Review #20, by LostmyheartJust Breathe: Dominique's First Diary Entry

29th August 2015:

Wow, this chapter was very sweet. It sort of set the theme for this story, Dominique's fight to come out of the shadows and perhaps overcome her 'Lethifold attacks'.
I like that you write them in Diary style, it's refreshing to read something different like that. And you write so well! I love Dominique's character, she seems like such a sweet girl, insecure but pretty clear in her head about what's going on with herself.

I really enjoyed reacing this chapter!

- Avi

Author's Response: Hi there yourself, Avi, and thanks for the kind review! : )

I'm so happy you liked this chapter! And that you think it's sweet - most people focus on how sorry they are for Dominique, so it's refreshing to see someone focus on the good things about her, like how sweet she is and how she knows herself pretty well. That really is something I hadn't thought much about before, but you're right; she's really self-aware which is good when you have something difficult to deal with in your life.

I actually tried to write this story in third person at first, but then I tried first person and it worked so well that the Diary thing came kinda naturally from that. For me writing things down is such a good way to process things, so when I wrote a story about someone who has a lot to process it felt natural to write in that style, hehe. And thanks for saying I write well - I really tried my very hardest with this story. : )

I hope you'll be back some time, perhaps when I dare to do my first review swap...


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Review #21, by LostmyheartBlaise Zabini and the Trouble with Theodore Nott: Blaise Zabini and the Annoying Best Friend

25th May 2015:
That. Ending.

It just makes me even more convinced something between Blaise and Theo happened, but then again, Pansy wouldn't flirt with Blaise like that if she had witnessed them kissing.

Seriously, Tammi, WHAT happened during that drunken night? HUH? + a million question marks :b

I love this story so far, you've managed to make it all interesting and it looks like it's going to develop into a fun, multi-chaptered story with them helping Theo get Harry.
So, who does Blaise like? If it isn't Pansy? Hmm.

I hope you're enjoying writing Blaise like this, and thank you so much for entering my challenge!

- Avi

Author's Response: Hahaha oh that ending :P

One of the upcoming chapters is going to be what happened that night that everyone is talking about, so you will get to see I promise!


Thank you so much! I am having so much fun writing this, and I'm so glad that your challenge is the one who pushed me to do it :D Thank you for that!

Blaise totally fancies Pansy, don't let him fool you with his lies :P

Thank you Avi!

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Review #22, by LostmyheartBlaise Zabini and the Trouble with Theodore Nott: Blaise Zabini Doesn't Have The Energy For This

25th May 2015:
Hi Tammi!

I am finally here. Sorry for the long wait.

Wow, that ending, I had a different idea of it and you just blew it away. I have this feeling that Blaise and Theo might have hooked up during that drunken night and they both don't remember it.

Theo in love with Harry, that's so sweet and I'd love to know why. That will probably be discovered in the next chapter.

I enjoyed reading this, it was really different from what I've read before, this is really teenage-ish where they always hang around in groups. Stories like these are rare, in my opinion.

I'll move on to the next chapter :)

- Avi

Author's Response: Avi!! Awww that's fine I don't mind, because you've left me this wonderful review!

Haha oh what happened that drunken night is coming up, don't you worry!

Oh Tharry, I'm going to delve more into his feelings for that boy soon, don't you worry.

Thank you so much! I'm so glad that you enjoyed this.

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Review #23, by LostmyheartFrom Afar: From Afar

25th May 2015:

I am so sorry for the long wait but I am finally here, ready to review your lovely story!
It was really sweet, I liked the small moments here and there. He sees ser surprisingly little, since you write 'the next time he saw her' at the beginning of each section.

This Blaise is so sweet, he seems very clear about who he is and what he stands for, he doesn't want to listen to his mother and he doesn't want to be a follower of Voldemort. I like his determination and that he just left the battle of Hogwarts.

It was a very sweet story and I enjoyed it very much. I hope you enjoyed writing it in and thank you so much for entering my challenge!

- Avi

Author's Response: Hi Avi! I am so sorry that i've taken so long to respond to your review!

I was so unsure about this one-shot but I was determined to enter your challenge - I really wanted to write Blaise so i'm glad your challenge came about!

Thank you! Small moments was what I was going for - I always picture Blaise as a man of few words so even in his head, I don't see him reacting much so I thought small moments between the two of them would work perfectly - anything more would have been too full on!

I always see him as determined - I know he's haughty and whatnot but I think deep down, he knows his own mind and he knows when to act like a follower and when not too. I didn't picture him as a full on follower and he's seems to be the kind who would slip out quietly whilst the party was still going - that's what i was going for anyway!

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and I loved taking part in your challenge! I can't wait for any more of your challenges!


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Review #24, by LostmyheartAn Inconvenient Repercussion: Chapter 1

24th May 2015:
Hi Kaitlin!

Oh my god, that ending! I had not seen that one coming, it was heartbreaking. And his honesty makes me respect him so much.
He could've had the chance to hide the evidence and live a life without her and yet, under unknown circumstances, he admits it all.

This is a wonderful one-shot and beautifully written. My heart ached for Blaise and the way his mother treated him, what a horrible woman.

I'm so glad you entered my challenge and I hope you enjoyed writing Blaise! Yes, I've seen it as well, where stories about him often mentions his mother. It is an unusual mother he has, after all.

- Avi

Author's Response: Hi Avi,

It is a tragic ending, but one that I felt was necessary.

If anything, he definitely is honest and regardless of the fact that he murdered his mum, I think he has a pretty strong moral core.

I definitely enjoyed writing Blaise, although my heart kind of broke when I started imagining his story.

Thanks for a great challenge!


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Review #25, by LostmyheartUnravel. : Blaise.

18th May 2015:
This, Erin, this is just breathtaking! I'm so in awe right now, I feel the love and the heartache Blaise is going through. It's just... absolutely stunning, the way you've written it.

It's a beautiful story, the way Blaise loves Theo is incredibly sweet and it breaks my heart because he knows nothing will ever happen. That must be the most terrible kind of love: To love someone, well aware of the fact that it will never be reciprocated. (I just googled that word, I'm so fancy).

Brilliant writing as to be expected from you :b

Thank you so much for entering my challenge! I hope you enjoyed writing Blaise, despite the dark and sad feeling this story has.

Big hug,

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