What a wonderfully written fic you've got here! I enjoyed reading it.
There were certain lines that put a smile on my face here, like when said Harry walked into the burrow's kitchen. and was wished a happy birthday from his real family.I thought that was sweet.
There were a couple of things I picked up, however, that might want to fix. Don't worry, they're all little. 9 paragraphs down from the top, Uncle Vernon says “How do you accept to stay in this house if you don’t earn your keep?” I'm almost positive that 'accept' is supposed to be 'expect'.
12 paragraphs down from the top, Harry says "I haven’t past my apparition test yet." 'Past' should be 'passed'. It's an easy mistake to make, so don't worry. When you're reading them allowed, they both sound the same.
A paragraph above that, it says 'She say her give Ron a quick glance...' I think that it's supposed to say that 'He saw' her give Ron a quick glance.
I hope those have helped. This story, overall, was really well written. Keep up the good work!Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Report Review
Aw, that's so dreadfully sad! Poor Draco, and poor Hermione too.
I really liked the dialouge in this chapter. It kept my attention and made me want to keep reading.
Good job, like the last chapter. I hope you add more to this story soon!Author's Response: I'm glad it caught (and kept) your attention! The next chapter has been waiting to be validated for about three days, so it should be up shortly. Thanks again for the kind review! Report Review
Good job! I like the idea so far, and I think your voice is pretty unique. So, keep up the good work!
I can't wait to see what happens with the whole Draco thing.Author's Response: Thank you! I really think that being told you have a unique voice/style is one of the best compliments you can recieve as an author, so that means a lot to me! :) Report Review
I'm sure you've gotten this reaction before, but this little piece of writing is so sad! I think it's because you wrote it so that we almost feel Remus' pain and the heart-ache the rest of his family went through.
Overall, this is a wonderfully written piece. I'm glad I took the time to read this. It's going into my favorites. Great job!Author's Response: Thank you very much for taking the time to review. I appreciate your leaving such lovely and inspiring comments. =) Report Review
Amazing. Simply stunning, really. Originally, I decided to return the lovely favor you payed me of reading and reviewing my story...and I'm so glad I payed your page a visit.
Your voice is just incredible. And you really did capture a lot of who Sirius was, like the 'watered- down black' line. At the same time, however, you added a new light- the fact that he wasn't always as confident as he seemed.
I really really loved it. Keep up with the good work you've got here, m'kay?
And, by the way...you need to gain more faith in your work. This was brilliant (althought I'm sure you've gathered my opinion on this little masterpiece already). But, in all seriousness, I'm glad you decided to post it. You never know what the audiences reaction will be until you try, no? Author's Response: Thanks so much! This means a lot coming from you, with your own wonderful writing. :) I'm really glad you like it, and I'll be sure to keep writing. Thanks again. :) Report Review
Wow. I really really like this. Your voice is so clear in your writing that it's almost like having a conversation. Keep up the great work, dear!Author's Response: well thank you alot! i'm so glad that you like it! thanks for the review.
~CeeCee~ Report Review
Why did you not tell me about this story! I MUST know what happens next. Cha. Are you starting from 1st year and going all through 7th? Or skipping ahead?
Update soon please!
Anyway, ciao for now.
Love your BFF
~AliAuthor's Response: I'm writing, I'm writing. Sheesh. About the 1st year all the way through 7th, I'm not sure.
I'm definitely going to have the whole first year, and definitely the whole seventh. the inbetween is iffy. Report Review
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