Hi, I'm back!! I left you a review for chapter 5 or 6 I think, then my laptop broke down, I forgot the name of this fic and I couldn't find it again! Agony, I tell you. I've been sooo curious to see what happens!! Finally I did find to though, and I must say it's been exciting as usual :) Soo.. as I've been gone awhile, my review will be a general one for chapters 6-8 :)
Kiera and Henry are as disgustingly cute as ever, I can totally see why their friends start pretend-vomiting around them... I'm a bit curious to see Henry's character develop, as it is now you've made him theee perfect boyfriend, right? I find that even a lot of his flaws are irritatingling perfect. But he's getting there, I really liked the part where he's being all macho-male with James over the quidditch loss the previous year. It really feels like we're getting to know not just Henry but all the characters more and more. Me likey!
Another thing I like is all the little, perhaps irrelevant or perhaps totally relevant, details you all sneakily stick into the plot. Like Flitwick saying he didn't hear the bell go? It's a nice change from just saying "the bell rang". And Kiera teasing Alice about biology is funny AND gives character-depth to both of tem (the whole muggleborn/pureblood dynamic). But you never know if it's just a small detail or a foreshadowing for something later in the plot - like a while back when Kiera saw a sad figure by the lake - that certainly seems like a very suspicious detail to include because at the time it seemed a bit irrelevant. Then you read on a bit in the chapter and it totally helped set the mysterious atmosphere in that part of the story, but it's still there, at the back of your head, making you wonder...
umm, what else? Really, I do think you're a terrific writer and it's nice to see a good balance between drama and funny little everyday anecdotes. I think fanfiction often is rather heavy on the drama...
Until next time! :)Author's Response: Haha, yess. I wondered where you'd gone. It's lovely to see you back, my dear. :)
They are, aren't they? Yes, Henry is a fairly straight forward character, but, in a way, it makes him more complex to write (if that makes any sense at all). Hopefully you'll find more of his characterisation in the next few chapters, as I'm working to expand on that some more, along with plot.
I'm glad you like that. It's something I've been working hard on developing (re: foreshadowing). Haha, I won't say anything about the figure near the lake. You'll have to wait and see ;)
Oh, good. I've been working hard to try and add just those little details into the story that others don't, such as Flitwick not hearing the bell, etc. and I really wanted to play on that dynamic as you mentioned. I'm glad that you liked it and that it turned out alright on my behalf. :)
FF is always heavy on the drama, and while this story has its fair share, it's spread out a bit more to a manageable level. I'm glad you like it - it's something I was worried about; that my story might become boring, etc.
I'm trying to get the next chapter finished with my exams, but fingers crossed it won't take too long. Thanks again for the review, love.
- Adele :) Report Review
OMG YES! Seriously I love you - I've been waiting for something epic like this to come along ever since 'How to tame a Marauder' became completed. It sort of reminds me a bit of the story; not because it's a Sirius/OC or a "rip off" (which btw it certainly isn't) or anything, but your story and HTTAM have the same realistic slow build up and well-written quality. And Canis Major is so funny - exactly my kind of humour. Gosh, I'm gushing aren't I? Lol, keep up the good work, I'm waiting with baited breath ;) I'm predicting this is going to be one of those 2000 + review stories... So can I just say this while you're still in your hundreds? I AM YOUR BIGGEST FANAuthor's Response: HOORAY FOR NEW FANS! (I'm still in shock that I have any at all, but you know, not going to complain ;) )
'How to tame a Marauder' was the first FF I ever read. I fell in love with it and cried at the end (yes, I am a shameless fangirl :P) So the fact that you liked my story to much after reading that, and feeling that it's comparable, blows me away. Thank you, thank you, thank you! ^_^
I'm so happy you find it funny (I have a weird sense of humour, and was hoping it would still appeal to others!) It's very light hearted here, but hopefully it will become darker as the story progresses and the characters have more contact with the war.
I'm seriously so thrilled to get a review like this; completely out of the blue and blew me away, it was just so fantastic to receive. ^_^
Hopefully once my English speech is done and out of the way, i'll be able to spend this weekend finishing Ch 6, before my other assessments next week. (Fingers crossed, yeah? :P)
I've said it before and i'll say it again, thank you so much for the review. It really helped make my day. ^_^ Report Review
your banner caught my eye - been watching the Swedish "Girl with the dragon tattoo" film, have you? ;) or just knicked pictures from it lol...
I like the concept of the story, and I find mythology very interesting too so can't wait for the next chapter :)Author's Response: Yeah, I've been watching the girl with a dragon tattoo, i wanted someone different looking for the banner than the usual.
I'll get the next chapter up soon, thanks for the review. Report Review
Oh this was so good! I could totally feel her pain when I read it - poor Ellis! I hope she gets her retribution eventually :)Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you could feel her pain. She may or may not get her retribution, you'll just have to wait and see. :) Report Review
Omg seriously I'm reading this and listening to Mumford & Sons at the same time = crying bucketloads. Holy cow. 10/10Author's Response: I just listened to them as well. I'm in love with that kind of music - I write my pieces to those songs! That's so weird... Thank you so much for reviewing! It really means a lot xx Report Review
Nice. I like your style :)Author's Response: Thank you :) Report Review
Wowtch. you know, even before that sorting-hat-going-into-his-mind-episode I literally felt like I was sitting in his head, hearing his thoughts and looking out through his eyes. Literally, too, not figuratively. Freakey feeling I tell you. 10/10 :)Author's Response: good to know, because that was definitely what I was aiming for ;) thanks for the review! Report Review
Um, just so you know, I mostly wrote this whole thing because whenever I read something good I have this urge to analyze it (I blame International Baccalaureate, if you happen to know what that is). So I put my thoughts down in a review because that's the point of a review, isn't it? SO here we go!
I read this story in one go today (while I should've been studying... that's always what happens, isn't it?) and whew, my eyes are tired haha. BUT just that is credit to your story, don't you think? Well, I usually don't read this much in one go haha.
Nywaay.. I had a couple of questions there about Draco because his vampiredness disappeared for a good few chapters so I thought you'd forgotten about it and I thought it was such a nice twist that I wanted to know more about it! Obviously my wish was fulfilled! I still don't get why Selene kept Draco's and Harry's vampiredness (good word huh? ;))secret from each other. I mean--she said to Draco that of course she would've contacted him as a fellow vampire if she'd known he was one, so why didn't she put Harry and Draco "in contact" about their, errr, condition?
Second, you sorta answered this one as well, I don't get why Selene treats Harry as a kid all the time. I mean, he is a kid of course, but he's also a trained assassin of sorts... I'd imagine that type of upbringing would make you a bit more mature right? And obviously she knows he can take care of himself--there was no need to send him to the woods for his safety during the attack at the stadium, in my opinion. Then, Selene admitted the thing about Harry losing his innocence and childhood and all that so it explains it I suppose... but still... right now there's not a balance between kid and Death Dealer, he's more kid than Death Dealer. Of course, that may be your intention!
Thirdly, what the heck was Salazar Slytherin doing meeting up with Selene in the forbidden forest forever ago???!?! I'm sooo curious!! Did you forget about it or are you going to make me wait an eternity to get the answer?! You're a master of suspension, and right now I MIGHT consider it a negative trait... ;) jk!
OK, now that I got that off my chest... I love your story telling! I think I found some grammar issues here and there, but really they're so few so who cares? Your style is a bit like canon in a way, with all the secret keeping from Harry and lots and lots of details! And just like in canon, a detail may raise a question that you don't get an answer to until way later in the story (like my comment about Draco for example. I've noticed in the canon books, a lot of questions are raised that are only answered by Dumbledore at the end, after the climax.) Excellent!! I think the characters are both in canon and OOC at the same time--it's as if you've captured the essence of them while changing them a bit to fit their current AU environment. EXCELLENT again!!
Huggles! ErikaAuthor's Response: Erika, thank you so much for this wonderful review! I was so thrilled to find this waiting. You read this entire thing in one go? Oh wow, I don't know if I've even done that with this one...and while you were studying? Oh you naughty thing! Not that I can say much...but I will take it as a very good compliment, thank you! Now, onto your questions and comments, shall we?
Selene kept Draco and Harry's vampiredness from each other due to respect and privacy. Its one of those secrets that you don't tell another person without permission, and since she never had it, she wasn't about to spill the beans. It also has to do with her age, and the periods she has lived through. Being a vampire or a witch could get you killed, so you didn't reveal it, even if the other person was the same as you. So she left it up to them and fate.
Selene treats Harry as a child for several reasons, one he really is a kid, two she had seen him as a baby and small child a handful of times, but also because she has seen the consequences for some people when they grow up and mature to fast. Right now there isn't a balance between them, but it is something I'm working on and hoping to correct soon. It works for now having him act more childlike than as a Death Dealer, but there will come a time soon when the balance will need to strengthen and eventually shift.
As for Salazar.I can't answer why he was there! So I'm going to make you wait for a full answer.
Thank you so much for the review and your compliments. I try to catch grammar mistakes, and I know my beta does as well but every so often they slip through the cracks and we can't find them. Thank you so much and I hope I see you around again soon! ~Selene Report Review
Wow, this fic was really... unusual. In a good way! It reminds me a lot of the movie Sin City (probably the series it's based on too but I haven't read them so I can't say for sure...) Still, I can tell you haven't made a Sin City/HP crossover or ripped off Sin City or anything. I usually don't read this kind of fanfics but now I'm glad I did =) The grammar was a bit off sometimes, though, and where you end sentences and have commas and stuff like that too. Not that it's too annoying, just pointing it out ;) You have a really good plot going on here, I look forward to read the rest of the series. Oh and you have the AWESOMEST banner EVER! That Lucid or whoever made it really really is good!
Huh, I think this must've been the longest review I've ever written.. Feel honoured, haha! Report Review
Interesting.. Keep it up =) Report Review
HAHAHA! Wonderful!Author's Response: thanks Report Review
Oooh. Like it! A very original timeturner story!Author's Response: Hey there!
Haha, thanks, I tried not to make it cliche. Most have the whole 'Hermione's accidentally thrown back in time and falls in love!!!' thing - I tried to change it, :P . Anyway, thanks for your review - I really appreciate it.
I'm sorry for the fact I'm putting this story on hold for a while, but I have BIG exams coming up - in about 3 three weeks - but after that, I'll start typing away!
Anyway, thanks again, and I hope you continue to read this story, and check out my others.
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Ooh this one sure seems promising to me too! =D Report Review
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