I like it, you should write more quickly. My one criticism is that Tara's hair seems to change a little too fast. Maybe make it slightly more gradual and less suddenly thrown into the story. Instead of flipping to bright orange it can take on a slightly orangish tint that matches the glow in her eyes. Other than that, GOOD JOB!!!Author's Response: lol.. thanks for the thought. And i do write fast.. it's up to ch 11 at the momeny.. i just don't get around here as much anymore. Thanks for reading! Report Review
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