I don't know why but while reading this is just made me feel so heart broken for poor Alice and so in love with Frank for loving her so much. Most people if they got too annoyed with a person they would leave them in an instance but Frank even with her craziness, stuck by her side...and the part "And you used to care about me.""That's where you're wrong. I never stopped." is a real tear jerker!!!
Another excellent fic i've read from you, I think your going to be one of my favourite authors on this site. *Goes off to add as favourite*
Your writing style is really unique and I love it. Excellent work.Author's Response: Oh gosh, you are much too nice! It's kind of funny that you reviewed this story, since I wrote it way back in like, April and I haven't gotten any very recent reviews on it, but all of a sudden, I got two in the span of like, two days. Hah. Anyway, I'm really glad you enjoyed this! Thank you! Report Review
What can i say...i loved it.
I thought it was excellent, and really well written. You've managed to write as a child perfectly.
And all the little details that you mention, like at the beginning the way he eats the orange...leaving the thickest pieces to the last (thats what i used to do :D), how he views people and the little scene where he's sat on his mothers lap is all just so real like. They really make this story stand out.
I think this fic deserves a longer review, but to be honest there isnt much to describe it except for being excellent.
I'm so glad i stumbled across your thread in the forums and asked for a link...i would've missed out.
Great work, really captures your attention throughtout the whole chapter.
100/10 :DAuthor's Response: Eeee, thank you so much! I really appreciate your asking for a link in that thread. ^^ I do that with oranges too! Only I don't eat a lot of oranges anymore. And just wow, thank you! Your review made me smile! Report Review
Right, let me gather my thoughts first, because this fic requires a good review. :) First, I'll say great Job done here, you've described things really well, and as I've just followed it through from the challenge on the forums I think so far your's is the best.
I love the way you describe the rose then link it to Lily, and as i have a strong passion for roses I really loved it.
All i can say is you've done an excellent Job, only thing is you might want someone to read over it, just a few mistakes here and there.
Again great fic, I really enjoyed it.Author's Response: wow thank you! I had a lot of fun with this segment and I've been thinking on getting some work done on the next chapter. To be honest this started before the challenge with just the description of the Rose coming to me, I thought it would be great for a romance love story and I hope to use some of the same elements in an original fictions, but I discovered that it could apply to Lily so I thought I'd go that way see what people say on this first before I put more work into an original. Report Review
Awww such a cute plot line and definietly different to other Dramiones. I loved the flashback scene, i have a soft spot for romantic fics so i really liked this fic. You have the odd mistake or two but I'm sure if you keep trying you'll get a Beta that will help you with them and wouldnt disappear. :)
Great work. And considering its your 3rd language it isnt that bad at all. Report Review
This fic brings out a whole new side to Petunia one that is totally believable, i think anyone would be jealous if their sister could do magic and they couldnt. A lovely portray of emotions, a really beautifully written fic.
Excellent.Author's Response: Thank you for such a wonderful review! I'm so happy you could relate to Petunia and that you liked her. I kinda wanted to do her justice, cause everyone sees her like this really bitter, despisable person. But the fic was meant to make people ponder on her character and wonder "hey, wouldn't anyone be bitter if their sister was a witch?". Thanks for the compliments, you've really made my day! Much love, CJ Report Review
This seems like its going to be one hell of a fic...its excellent so far and i loved the scene in Azkaban and the true likeliness of Sirius's character.
I thought you might like to know what caught my eye to this fic, it was your banner in your siggy on the forums. And the fact that Sirius is a part of it :)
Back to reviewing your first chapter, i think you should mention who and what each OC works as, as part of the fic rather then writing it at the end, but thats just my opinion. Cant wait to read more.Author's Response: Hey there! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, it always makes mevery happy! Yes, the scene in Azkaban is my favorite one (mostly because I just love writing Sirius). I'm very happy the banner caught your eye, I love it! I'll try and introduce the OCs' identities in the story, if you think it's better. I just thought it would be easier for people to remember, or go back to, if the characters were explained in the end. But I promise I'll try. Thank you once again for the lovely review! Much love, CJ Report Review
I'm just going to be repeating my self...let me think of something other then Excellent to say :D
Beside it being really really good i wanted to say i love the way you write your fics, judging from how many fics you've got up, your pretty experienced and i love your style of writing, it just makes the reader want to read and read and read, i try reading one chapter at a time but end up reading about 5 at one time, LOL.
Hmmm...should make you my role model :D
Great work!Author's Response: lol thanks Angel. I don't really know what it is with the 'not being able to stop' thing about my stories. I guess I just sort of write as I go and that's all there is too it really.
hehe, a role model eh? I feel rather honored :D Report Review
Ok what can i say another excellent chapter, i really like the fact that you work us (readers) through how things came to be rather then diving straight in and saying this and that.
Author's Response: I figured that since Skyris is such a complex character on the site I would rather explain her back story before I jumped into anything straight from the RP, which I will do eventually anyways lol so don't worry and I'm glad you're enjoying it. Report Review
Oh wow i really liked this, i dont know but the way you've written it is kinda cool. I'm impressed by your work and this just makes me want to read your fic even more, but I'm going to have to restrain myself until i have a bit more time on my hands. But do not worry I will eventually get round to reading it because it seems like a story not to be missed out on. Way to go Girl! :) Excellent work.Author's Response: Thanks! It was a fit of randomness and boredom that brought it about - and i really wanted to say that I had written something on a plane ^.^. Report Review
LOL i loved it, made me laugh. So what are you going to do? Keep your readers hanging forever? Or is there going to be more of this? I want more! Really good work. Just the spacing is a bit distracting but other then that its great.Author's Response: Well... it's kinda cliche, isn't it? I went back later (AKA now), and I really didn't like what I had written. Maybe I'll tackle it after What's In A Name? is done. Or over the long summer, when I have nothing better to do. But yes, I plan on leaving you hanging forever! Report Review
It just gets better, I cant wait to see where you eventually wind up. Really well written, I love the way you describe things. Its another excellent chapter. Want to read more.Author's Response: When it comes to description I like to picture actual objects that you'd compare the people to, the mask like smile being one of them. Like don't you find smiling mask scarry and very false? I know I do. Next chapter is already in the works btw. Report Review
WOW! Skyris its excellent, I love it so far. Cant wait to read more. :) Excellent work.Author's Response: Angel! Glad you like the intro, it's always hard to get a hook to keep the readers captivated but I guess I'm doing on okay job ain't I? Report Review
Awww that was a really sweet ending, And that letter from George is so cute.
Really Excellent fic.
But wait you have to write a sequel now, coz i want to know what happens when they meet next year. Come on start thinking of new plots and get writing, LOL :) (I really do hope you write a sequel)Author's Response: Okay ... I'm thinking : )
Thanks so much for your support for the story : ) Report Review
Hehe, I loved that fic and that ending, you only got a few mistakes here and there but thats understandable as its a one shot. But i loved it and i think i will always remember that quote from now on and use it where ever i go. Pushing Can Get You Through A Lot In Life; Except A Door Marked Pull. I LOVE IT! excellent fic you got here even if it is a one shot. Great Job.
AngelAuthor's Response: Awww, thanks Angel! I've never really written many one-shot's original or non- but after writing this I'm doing it a lot more; and I think it's really improving my skills as a writer so thats good!
Thanks again. *huggles*
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Well to be honest i always had a sneaking suspicion that Remus liked Lily from the way he talked about her to Harry and this fic just proves it :P This Fic is so cute...and i know how hard it is to watch the person you love fall in love with some one else, i think the only improvement would be to describe his feelings more. The heartache he feels everytime he watches them together just expand on it if you want to. But its excellent as it is, so just ignore me. :D
AngelAuthor's Response: Thanks Angel! I'm surprised you find it cute! May be I can't ever write anything that's not cute ... hmm ... but yep I'll think about how I can expand it! Thanks for your comments!
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Awww god my heart is breaking, this is just the saddest thing I've read, its excellent. Report Review
Hey i think you got good potential here, but you might want to consider getting a Beta to go over your fic's. You can find one by going to the forums, they are really alot of help even to the more experienced writers.
First quittich game is Quidditch...and then at the end you said kessed him, its Kissed.
Hope this helps u futher your writing :)Author's Response: thanks for the advice, sorry about all the spelling errors. Report Review
Hey I've also watched 'She's all that' its one of my favourite movies. :D
And i really like the way you've got the girls chasing the marauders, usually the popular girls are the ones being chased not the other way round, so i like your idea :D
Can't wait for the third chapter.Author's Response: =D Thanks! i love that movie! Report Review
Hey i really like it :) Especially the letter from Lily's father it made me laugh.Author's Response: Great! Report Review
What can i say, i really like ur story....the best on this site....keep it going!
AND HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY! hope u had a great 17th birthday and all ur wiskes and dreams come true.Author's Response: Aww, thanks! You're so nice! Report Review
i thought of a name for your story... you could call it "Is it Love?" or "Boring Summer, Turns Good" hope they are OK! Report Review
I've been waiting for this at last its come, your stories are excellent i've read allllllllll of them, this one is the best and then i realy like 'A missing Weasley'. i love reading you stories, they are brill, i think you'll become a reat author.Author's Response: Aww! This is one of my favorite reviews! I'm glad you liked them! You made me so happy! THANK YOU! Report Review
wen will the rest cum i can't wait to read the ending i can tell it's gana be a great 1.Author's Response: Thanks! Sorry it's been a while. Report Review
oh my god excellent story I really like it. it’s so cute and so sad.Author's Response: Thank you!! <3 Report Review
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