Reading Reviews From Member: benamatiluver
  
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Review #1, by benamatiluverHarry Potter and the Girl Who Lived: Sweetest Sixteen

28th March 2006:
wow that is great. i like your use of detail. you dont linger on unimportant things but when you need to you really pay close attention to details

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Review #2, by benamatiluverHarry Potter and the Girl Who Lived: Sirius's Legacy

27th March 2006:
ooh nice cliff hangers. another good quality

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Review #3, by benamatiluverHarry Potter and the Girl Who Lived: Another Summer

27th March 2006:
omg. i love it. you are such a talented writer im highly impressed. its just like the books. but better in a way. you really are good. i wish it was a book so i wasnt sitting in this chair forever. lol. but really good!!!

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Review #4, by benamatiluverYear 7: Hes back

23rd January 2006:
nice. leave them with a cliff hanger. thats the best way. again with the indenting thing. cuz when you make the paragraphs shorter it incureges more ppl to read it.

Author's Response: yeah thats what i try to do lol

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Review #5, by benamatiluverYear 7: The call on the loud speaker

23rd January 2006:
ok with this one a lot of spelling errors. you might wanna revise and edit more before posting it. and also when ppl talk you should indent. with each new person starting is a new indentation otherwise people get really confused

Author's Response: okay thanks ill go do that , on that one i was rushing a bit cause i had to go but thanks any way torie

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Review #6, by benamatiluverYear 7: Coming back

23rd January 2006:
hmmm. you seem as if you are rushing it a bit. try and slow it down to build up the plot..

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Review #7, by benamatiluver10 things I hate about you: First Meetings

19th December 2005:
you need to put in more story then words. it gets ahh to read. no offense just constructive criticism

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