lol that last bit was funny!
but that whole hermione schpeil, that was kind of duplicating everything in the previous chapter as she was thinking...
i liked it! is this the end?Author's Response: Yeah, that was the last chapter. Glad you liked it. Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
loved it! except well not so much in this chapter as earlier ones, but the boys kind of swear a little more than necessary... but other than that i really enjoy this sooo much! I see you've updated a lot in the time that i've been away from this site! you're doing a great job - keep up the excellent work!Author's Response: Thank you very much for coming back to read, and saying nice things. Report Review
very cute, and no lie there! i wouldn't mind a little follow up story to this one... heheAuthor's Response: thank you! I might be writing some other missing scenes from DH added to this one so watch out for some later on!~AmericanRonnyBabe Report Review
great first shot at the works. you're pretty good already!Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
great job! it kept me guessing til the end, and it really was sad, but in that you brought out harry's character quite well, because it's just something he would do. keep up the great work!Author's Response: Thanks so much! I appreciate the review!! (o: Report Review
ah! Great once again! you did wonderfully, and I loved it from start to finish!Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much!! Report Review
all his points are very clear in this, and so are hers, except even when i am just reading it, it doesn't sound as natural as it would be if people were actually talking. it kind of seems rehearsed. I don't know why. But otherwise, I like the way the story is going.Author's Response: I think my conversation writing improved as the story progressed. There were many years of rust to work through. Thanks for reviewing. G. Report Review
haha how cute. good for a first chapter. Report Review
oh, i remember reading this before, except i never reviewed, i guess. nice job though. you brought out the dramatic-ness very well. :) oh, and beautiful banner by the way! it really drew me to read your story!
Great job!Author's Response: Thanks so much Sudha.
& I'm glad you liked the banner aswell because it took me a long time to get it just the way I wanted.
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but great job
i am so curious. you - gaah!Author's Response: LoL. Thanks, and I'm glad you're curious. Muahaha...! (o: Report Review
nice, though i know Harry doesn't really curse that much. Report Review
hahahhahahhaa you made me laugh so hard!Author's Response: Thank you for your review. Glad I was able to do so. Report Review
well, you're down to a month! or a little more, but good luck! I can't wait to see what you'll do with this. you're a very talented writer, and dedicated as well, by the looks of this. wonderful job.
hope to read more soon,
Sudha Report Review
wow, well i caught that wand thing anyway, but i guess the medallions still have a bit to go. you're doing an amazing job with this! I can't imagine how you think up all this stuff, but you've kept me sitting here for quite a few hours now. Report Review
wonderful! please don't stop writing this! Report Review
yesss i saw that the second he said he assumed ron had taken it with him. and when ginny had something gold with her. but wasn't the locket silver? Report Review
oh wow. that was really good. the whole selling it to borgin thing... well, harry's right. Report Review
aww, poor Ron.
but great job, this is so realistic - a bit more fluff overall in this than the real book will probably have, but still, it is wonderfully written! Report Review
ohhh very intriguing! and why are the twins staring at him oddly? I wonder... Report Review
i love how you've really thought all of this out. the whole thing was very well structured, and you write very well!
great job! Report Review
ahahahaha i liked this chapter a lot! haha very nice! Report Review
I LOVED IT!!! I can't explain to you how much, and you're probably getting the same thing from everyone else, but I honestly think this is the best thing I've read overall for the longest time, and this chapter just made me - omg. hands down best ever. you're amazing!Author's Response: Don't worry at all, everything you said made me smile my face off! Writers always appreciate any review, even if other people are saying the same things. What the readers say is always very helpful. Anyway, thank you so much, and I'm glad you liked it that much!! Report Review
no, not bad at all really! you made it quite realistic, but it was kind of a repeat of the battle at Hogwarts, when Dumbledore tells Malfoy he doesn't have to do this. But other than that, I really liked it, and it's kind of funny actually, that Ron and Hermione made up right there in the middle of the battle. It definitely reminded me strongly of the Pirates of the Caribbean At World's End when Orlando Bloom and Kierra Knightley get married in the middle of the biggest battle and they're making out as the ship's getting blown up. hahahaha well, at least your story was more realistic than thatAuthor's Response: Oh yes! You're lucky I already saw Pirates 3, or that would have been quite the spoiler. Yes I suppose it is a little like that now that you mention it. Yes, it was a little of a repeat, but Hermione didn't know Dumbledore had said that since she wasn't in the tower at the time, so I guess she thought she was doing the right thing. Thank you so much for your comments!! Report Review
I knew after reading not two chapters that you had to be older than merely 16 because you write so maturely, in a way that quite matches Rowling herself. I have really enjoyed this piece so far, and am very amazed at the amount of imagination and creativity as well as sharp wit that you have used on this. The small details that you have included, as well as your not-so-cliche concepts and ideas have made this read all the more enjoyable!
Wishing you all the luck if you ever become some sort of writer if you aren't already,
SudhaAuthor's Response: *giggle* Thanks! I've tried to imitate JKR's style in this story and in some ways that's kind of cramped my own, but it's working, more or less. I wanted it to sound like it could really be "the" 7th book. Report Review
i read every chapter of this so far, and i really like the way you've written it! you're doing a great job,and you've really got me wrapped in. I can't tell about Harry though... I think there's something wrong with him. But the thing I don't get is, if he's allowed to come walk around and see her and stuff, then why is he supposed to be in "critical condition"?Author's Response: Thanks for the kind review! I'm glad you're enjoying it and that's so cool you read the chapters straight through!
And you raise some very great questions, too. (o: I hope to hear from you again! Report Review
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